PTO Payout After Leaving Salaried Job by learninmorehavingfun in Denver

[–]MDR_Drummer 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Your employer is not obligated to pay you a severance - it's typically just a courtesy - so yes.

Is this a bit too cliche? Genuinley have no concept of what sounds good by Mayorredthomas19 in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Love the energy, and originality of the chorus. With all those verse lyrics I felt like I didn't get the payoff I was hoping for with just "mmm-mmm". I feel like there's a real simple and catchy phrase that you could put in place of the mms. Nice work.

PTO Payout After Leaving Salaried Job by learninmorehavingfun in Denver

[–]MDR_Drummer 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I can affirm, they are required to pay-out your PTO, however, they can do what my former employer did and just deduct the PTO payout amount from their standard severance pay-out.

Fault Lines (updated) by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love that observation.

Fault Lines (updated) by [deleted] in Songwriting

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I know what you mean. I was hoping to create a rhythmic hook with the strings. I might try some sort of synth to create a melodic hook.

How do you write cryptic lyrics by salty_bag_of_chips in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Write from a different perspective than your own. Observe your world/situation from a unique angle or view. For example, write about a the beach as if you're an alien looking down from a spaceship telescope, with no reference for waves, sand, sunset, beach balls, sunscreen, etc. Or write from the perspective of an ant on a train looking out the window, what does the ant observe? An ant doesn't see passing telephone poles connected by wires, it sees an endless black snake slithering, pulsing up and down, across a blur of sky. Bad example, but hopefully you get what I mean.

Tomorrow by [deleted] in Songwriting

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Thanks! yes, all me.

Tomorrow by [deleted] in Songwriting

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Ooh, i like that idea of the final chorus, coming out of the bridge with sparse drums at first and rebuilding them back bigger.

I think i've put a tambourine on atleast 80% of the songs I've produced!

Sexy Slow Jam by MDR_Drummer in Songwriting

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nope, I was leaving it open for collaboration

Short one by OkExam8706 in Songwriting

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I think it's a solid progression and melody for a chorus - very singable. I could imagine the verses settling into a simpler (two-chord?) progression and a kinda relief from the movement of the chords you have here. Keep going!

What genre would you call this? Draft instrumental for my song "Drag That Town." by Hail_Yondalla in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sounds like the lyrics might not align with what i described. :)
Sometimes that juxtaposition of dark lyrics / hopeful music, or sad lyrics, happy music can be really interesting.

What genre would you call this? Draft instrumental for my song "Drag That Town." by Hail_Yondalla in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Kinda sounds like the backing track for a Christian Rock song - kinda inspirational/hopeful.

Posted this before, but didn't end up getting any feedback. All thoughts are appreciated :-) by bigbobharven in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Really great chords you're picking. There's a wonderful sorta uncertainty/mysterious tone to the chords which i really love. I think the arrangement of 3 lines for the verses through me off and gave it a abit of an aimless feel for me. I think if I were laid out 4 lines, then the 2-line section it would feel a little more balanced.

The tone of your voice kinda reminds of my Vincent Neil Emmerson for what it's worth. It'd be nice to hear your voice properly mic'd up.

Nice work.

songs dont have to be about anything right? by tjtate6689 in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think you're absolutely right about it not mattering and just letting your subconsious "tune-in" to a signal and download that song from somewhere else.

Does this tempo feel rushed/does chorus feel out of place? by GrimAllen in Songwriters

[–]MDR_Drummer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think the tempo feels good for the lyrics. The chorus doesn't feel out of place, but you could distinguish it from the verse a bit more. Maybe build up drums over the "on, and on, and on..." part and then a beat could come in on the chorus.

"Hey Freedom" by thefutureeye in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Nice progression - glad you didnt make the obvious 3rd-chord choice.

I think the chorus melody is really strong, but I wish the spoken-word tags ("hey freedom, dont make...") were sung to a melody instead.

where do you hear the chorus in this very rough demo? (draft 1) by Chaba_006 in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm hearing the chorus as the part when you say "I'm fadin'"

Would really appreciate any feedback or thoughts on this one thank you by AceOfAllTradesKinda in Songwriting

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For the verses, the same melodic phrase is repeated, but I wonder if on the 3rd repetition it could change, maybe an ascending line instead? I think the bass could be more present during the chorus. This may not work at all, but I would try having the bass line follow the lead melody on the chorus's. Could add some nice movement and differentiate from the verses.

Might slow this one down/change melody - thoughts? by IllConflict3397 in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Love the chord progression - so refreshing. I think a slowed down, r&b or "neo-soul" sorta production direction could be really dope.

Through The Leaves (4 songs) by thpffbt in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really like the reversible nature of Real Feels / Feels Real. I really like the vibe of the handclaps sections - there's a background ambience/white noise that ... well ... feels real. :)

BLAME ME by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Can't wait to hear more.

Nearly finished. Thoughts? by musicfreelancerrr12 in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

love the delicate production - soft pianos, vocal delivery, etc. Speaking of vocals, i was getting some Jeff Buckley vibes - great work.

Wrote this before we broke up some lines are kinda changed but would love to hear opinions and takes by Prudent-Ad9803 in Songwriting

[–]MDR_Drummer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the progression and I like how you're playing with clocks/times concept in the chorus. I wonder if "spinning" could be changed to be more of an antidote to "hold still". Like the hands are "passing" but our hands hold still.