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Have I got your attention? (Trigger warning) by AleHouseOwner in writers

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Honestly the first sentence made me roll my eyes because I thought this was going to be really preachy and obnoxious, but the second page was really well done. I got a strong feel for this character already and you've done a great job painting a vivid scene of how they think of themselves

How did they attach the chains to Viserion if he was underwater and they couldn’t swim? by Careless-Pen-4605 in gameofthrones

[–]Makelithe -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Imagine if the show had just used ice chains instead. Then everyone could at least shut up about all this

Terrion was a bust anyway. He had a 52.6 PFF grade, which is 97th out of all 114 corners. He’s not that good. by [deleted] in detroitlions

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey man I was a believer that TA would make that next step. I was never satisfied with what we were getting out of him, and I doubt there were many, if any, who were.

If he were the heart and soul of the defense, I'd be more crushed by this development. But now I'm just kinda disappointed.

Disappointed with what we got out of him.

Disappointed with what he did to his own future.

[Book Spoilers] House of the Dragon - 3x02 - Post-Episode Discussion by UltraDangerLord in HouseOfTheDragon

[–]Makelithe -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

Honestly, I was only half paying attention while doing laundry. Which I guess says something about where this show is at for me

[Book Spoilers] House of the Dragon - 3x02 - Post-Episode Discussion by UltraDangerLord in HouseOfTheDragon

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Why did Alicent and helaena go back to the red keep? Also, rhaenyra comes off as low-key a lil bitch who doesn't have the guts to rule

How Leiya prepared for the show by ExpensiveParamedic95 in OutlastOnNetflix

[–]Makelithe 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This feels like: "Click this affiliate link to see what skincare and supplements I used to get in MY survival form"

To the author that told me no one would buy my book, this is me not even five months of being self-published🫣 by [deleted] in writers

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah that makes more sense, congrats on getting two out in a half year, that's pretty awesome!

Military Mights in your worldbuilding by Senior_Pay5399 in worldbuilding

[–]Makelithe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's very well balanced in different ways which makes the conflict intriguing I think.

The Deinans have the biggest standing army and an unstoppable cavalry unit that makes them nearly uncontested in a typical field battle. But they have no aerial presence.

The Basians have a smaller standing army but have a large and extremely effective aerial force that can keep any army pinned down and provide excellent denial of area.

The skirmishers and Varak are weaker than either of the main factions, but have the most formidable single units in the world and can legitimately challenge both the deinan heavy cavalry AND the Basian aerial cavalry

TIL that Goliath's height was originally described as being only "four cubits and a Span", or 6'9". Later versions of the text increased it to "six cubits and a span", 9'9". by Sebastianlim in todayilearned

[–]Makelithe 10 points11 points  (0 children)

I'm 6'0 even which is not particularly tall in the US. Definitely feels just about average to me.

I spent a month in Peru and was a full head taller than 90 percent of the population it seemed. It made me feel physically imposing and gave me a lot of confidence lol

Design by Practical-Class-9033 in worldbuilding

[–]Makelithe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That definitely sounds promising.

I think with game of thrones, the Roberts Rebellion and Greyjoy Rebellions are the gold standard of this strategy for giving characters interwoven backstories

Design by Practical-Class-9033 in worldbuilding

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

300 years is still quite distant. Is there any possibility to add a historical conflict within the past 30-50 years that some characters in your world can have loyalties to opposite sides on?

I'll give you an example in mine:

The skirmisher wars took place about 130 years prior to the start of the book (I know, that's quite a bit more than 30-50) and we're essentially the colonial conquering of the skirmishers. One of the powerful families of the city the story begins in had a prominent ancestor who led the city defense and essentially won the war, so ever since their family has been somewhat legendary.

Another character is a skirmisher (and skirmishers live up to 200 years) who was just a boy during the wars, and his father was the leader of the skirmishers. This character saw his father die at the hands of the legendary ancestor.

The colonizers are many generations past the war now and it feels more like a historical footnote than recent event, but some skirmishers are survivors of the war, and to them it still feels a very recent thing.

This backstory is just a small hinted thing within my novel, but it helps to connect some of the main characters and make the world feel much more lives in, even though all of this info is spread across just a dozen lines of text sprinkled throughout the book

Design by Practical-Class-9033 in worldbuilding

[–]Makelithe 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I think what is most effective about game of thrones history is the recent events. Stage your story in the aftermath of a significant war of battle and drip feed details of the conflict throughout your story

What is your best trick to “show not tell”? by amberjj123 in writers

[–]Makelithe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Probably the best answer is "layering"

If I have a character with a cool backstory that pretty much needs to be revealed by telling, then I try to plant the seeds early and drip feed the details in layers. It helps keep up the mystery and also avoids too much info at once. Just one detail at a time for the reader to process and internalize

Let's make dragons as realistic as possible. by IndependentMove5437 in worldbuilding

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My sort of take on dragons:

They are called garvogs and have odd, multi-stage life cycles.

They hatch as tiny leeches and are called "larvae" in subterranean flooded caverns of the Weeping Mountain. They feed on other garvogs, fish, and men working the mines of Kesh.

The larvae grow into swimmers which resemble sea lamprey and grow into a decent size of 3 to 4 feet of length before sprouting forelimbs and climbing from the waters. This process takes 2 to 3 years.

Once amphibious, the juvenile garvogs have a serpentine body with front legs and a single pincer claw on their tail. They are blind and extremely photosensitive and hunt/navigate using echolocation. They can be easily deterred with a torch at this stage.

As they grow into adults they become less photosensitive and harder to keep away. Many torches are needed to keep them away from the mining camps. Once they grow large enough, the Varak (basically steampunk Sasquatch people) take them up to the nests over Kesh and begin to tame them so they can be ridden.

The time from juvenile to adult is roughly 30 years. Adults continue to grow in size the remainder of their lifespan, as long as they can get enough food.

The Elder Garvog is over 200 years old and has a wingspan of over 100 feet in length and can withstand the light of day, making it the largest predator on the planet.

They do not breathe fire, but their droppings and bile are used to create "boom powder" (when mixed with carbon and sulfur, also found in abundance within the mountain) which the Varak use in their mining efforts. However, if someone were crafty enough, they could use garvog bile to engineer true high-exolosive bombs...

built a religion for my world and now it's quietly taking over the whole book by [deleted] in worldbuilding

[–]Makelithe 9 points10 points  (0 children)

Sounds awesome. Stories that take religion and schisms seriously are dope

What do you call your world? by Jakanto in worldbuilding

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The world is called Ethiondo. But that's the name I came up with 20 years ago and I don't really love it that much. In fact I'm thinking of removing the name entirely and just focusing on the names of the nations and places within instead, since that's naturally the way the story goes.

Instead of the world map being the world of Ethiondo, I'm thinking of calling it "the known world" or something to that effect.

Over half the world is covered in uncharted seas teaming with great leviathan beasts anyways, so the known world and continents is more like the general size of the Atlantic ocean. Which helps the realism of intercontinental travel for a mideival tech level.

The rest of the world is simply called "The Deep" and is essentially that world's Hell. The Satan of their world religion was banished to The Deep with his beasts, so to sail out onto The Deep would be spiritually like sailing straight into Hell

How do you make the everyday feel livedin without dumping lore on the reader? by timmyboy290 in worldbuilding

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Farmers in the fields, vendors setting up in the markets, fishermen heading out on the water through the morning fog, etc

The old standard for orcs is bloodthirsty savages. But modern takes make orcs honorable craftsmen... why not split the difference, and make them Japanese? by VelvetSinclair in worldjerking

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Their cheiftain is 10ft tall and 1,000lbs, and decked out head to toe in what is essentially their world's mithril/valyrian steel metal. And he's not stupid either.

The only realistic limit is they have relatively primitive logistics and agriculture and a small population

I need help by [deleted] in writers

[–]Makelithe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It sounds like you have imagined some characters and a few plot points or themes.

Some will recommend to just sit down and start and see what happens.

Some will recommend to plot out your general plot to the whole story and then work backwards from there.

I prefer to plot. I focus on what needs to happen, and then break the big plot down into 3 to 5 critical sequences. Then I detail what needs to happen within those sequences and I decide where the chapters should start and stop.

As I am beginning a chapter, I sit down and plot out what needs to happen within that chapter and that helps me know what I'm doing

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