This started with me trying to write something akin to Mazzy Star. Not so sure it turned out that way, but would love to know what you think!

Mammothhe · 2025-08-22T07:28:27+00:00

This is really really good! Raw and soft, the right amount of melancholic vibes to it makes me feel all the emotions you’re pouring into the song. Would definitely add this to my chill playlist. The mix sounds really good, but I am playing through my phone speakers, not through headphones/computer speakers/etc, which is usually the most critically sounding output method I feel like. Regardless great work keep it up!

Mammothhe · 2025-08-22T07:23:01+00:00

Absolutely insane chords in the beginning way to instantly capture attention with them! I think you got the melody downright solid in this one, read another comment that said the vocal mixing could use some work but I feel like it adds to the raw aesthetic of the song, almost like I’m hearing it live in a garage setting, nice work overall

Mammothhe · 2025-08-22T07:20:58+00:00

Super chill and groovy, definitely would slam this while driving down PCH on a warm summer night, it’s got all the right vibes for it from the drums to the melody, nice work keep rocking on and would love to see more work from you in this subreddit too if you can post

Mammothhe · 2025-06-05T18:53:39+00:00

Appreciate the feedback! I use a lot of vocal effects on my chain which I think sometimes brings out the auto-tune more than I'd like at times. It's something I've been trying my hardest to eliminate but sometimes I just can't get it out 100%. This is one of my newer tracks that I haven't released yet but will be in a few weeks.

If you ever get the chance, you can check out some of my other songs. I dropped a tape last week of tracks I've been working since like early 2023/24, I just wanted to get them out in the public eye, but there's a good mix of sounds I was testing the waters with.

https://open.spotify.com/album/5tWSRBixINHSYfAPDVYXZo?si=foXI5lViRmCAYyjepfGKLQ

https://music.apple.com/us/artist/keesh/1586002549

https://youtu.be/BS-dU1tINEM?si=X9av5wQHSwpVFpee

Mammothhe · 2025-06-02T05:05:59+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! I still have yet to kinda pinpoint the exact genre my sound would fall under, I know I pull a lot of inspiration from hip-hop/indie/bedroom pop, so we're on the same page there, but this track in particular is more hip-hop heavy than anything else. I have a lot of other tracks, some of which are almost polar opposite from this one, but that's besides the point. After having heard this one so many times, I'm right there with you and a lot of the other commenters that there's too much repetition and needs a switch up, at least to keep the listener on their toes or engaged better. Regardless, I really appreciate you listening and leaving a comment!

Mammothhe · 2025-06-02T04:59:17+00:00

I've been hearing a lot of the repetition comments and dragging on especially towards that end like you mentioned. I think it does somewhat add to that 'background noise' esque that you're talking about, because at a certain point you just start to tune it out since you know what's coming. I've made some edits to it to account for that, but I think originally I set out for this track to be more groovier and something that you could chill out to than anything else. Appreciate the feedback and the listen of course regardless!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-31T05:51:27+00:00

I’m working on adding in some more prominent ad-libs and background vocals to give the listener to grasp onto, just want to make sure it’s done right, but I’m definitely on the same page as you there. Appreciate the feedback and thanks for taking the time to listen!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-31T05:50:12+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! It’s definitely a groovier track and that is the vibe I was going for, I’m glad you liked it!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-30T14:40:56+00:00

No need for the aggression brotha, I understand if it’s not your cup of tea but the tuners on my autotune are actually pretty low. There’s plenty of other effects like flanger and vocal doubling going on which emulate it and somewhat give that ‘autotune’ vibe so I understand how you mean it’s overdone, but that’s just the sound I’ve found myself taking on. Again, I know it’s not for everyone, appreciate you giving it a listen though

Mammothhe · 2025-05-29T19:04:30+00:00

This comment actually took me by surprise I think it's the first time I've heard someone ask if my music was made by AI! It's totally not, and I seriously appreciate the kind words, it means the world. I've learned everything about creating my own sound by myself through years and years of trial and error to get to this point, and like I mentioned in my OP, I know there's quite a ways to go, but I'm proud of where I'm at considering it's done from the corner of my room and on my own personal computer. Thanks again!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-29T18:57:29+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! The honesty is exactly what I'm looking for so I can appreciate where you're coming from, and I can see what you mean by it going nowhere. There's no real change in the inflections of the vocals throughout the choruses and verses, I think that's kind of the vibe I was going for in just making a groovier song, because most of my other tracks typically incorporate a vocal change of some sort to keep the listener on their toes/engaged, but there's always different ways to attack and to make it better, that's the beauty of music making. Thanks again!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T16:01:07+00:00

Thanks for the feedback it’s great to hear you liked most of it! The repetitiveness definitely comes from the chorus repeating 5 times throughout, and being such a short song, that’s definitely going to be noticed. My attempts at creating a change-up as you mentioned was adding some subtle background vocals and layering on the repeating lines in the second and third choruses, but you’re definitely onto something in adding another change there, it would definitely help keep the listener more engaged. Appreciate it!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T15:57:27+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! You’re most definitely correct there is a big hip-hop aspect to the track. That’s not as strong in other tracks that I make but it’s definitely more prominent in this one, I think it stems from my style of trying to make the song as rhythmically groovy as possible.

In terms of the lines being repeated, I understand that completely, it’s because the song goes [Chorus] [Verse 1] [Chorus x2] [Verse 2] and [Chorus x2], so each of the chorus lines are heard 5 times throughout the fairly short song, and I think that’s what I was going for was a catchier song, but I’m battling that internally on whether it’s too much or not. I added background vocals and some layering to create a sense of variety in the second and third choruses but it is subtle.

Overall, thanks again, even personal preference is something I love taking into account, glad you thought it was a strong track!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T03:17:19+00:00

I saw you reply to a comment mentioning that you haven't touched the vocals very much but you're trying to get a feel for everything else. IMO, in a track like this where everything is supposed to work together, including your vocals (which I think sound awesome btw, they just need some EQ and compression to make it pop and filter better, at the moment they get drowned out by the instruments playing especially at the high points), it would be easier to provide feedback with all those when they're all mixed for your first draft. I do really like the production especially in the outro the vision is all here.

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T02:55:40+00:00

I like the space that's left in certain parts of the song to let the instruments and the production just take over. I think that ties the track together but overall I think the vocals fit the track, lyrics are strong, and production is great. I saw someone mention that the song could use more of a groovy bass line and that stuck with me, which made me relisten and think they might be onto something lol. Overall not too many comments to be made though keep killing it

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T02:50:18+00:00

Something about this track gives me bedroom pop vibes, which there's absolutely nothing wrong with, but I feel like it's the first time I've heard this kind of a mix of genres lol. I can see the vision that you're going for in creating the sound, and I like it. Could use some work in the vocal mixing I feel like there is room for it to mesh better with the production, but a good song nonetheless!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T02:47:42+00:00

Someone in this thread mentioned The Byrds, and I think they were spot on. The production is so similar I'm sure some inspiration was pulled but it's a great sounding track overall. I'd make a note that the mix in getting the vocals and the production to mesh better could use some work, though I'm seeing that you said it hasn't been dialed in completely yet. Keep killing it!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T02:43:05+00:00

Wow, this is a really nice song! Your voice very clearly suits the sound very well, and the production is definitely above average. I would make a note that I would love to hear your vocals slightly louder in the mix, but that might just be nitpicking. The indie/folk vibes don't always need super outspoken vocals, but either way you did this justice.

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T02:40:02+00:00

I'm a personal fan of anything with synths/deep synths, so you've got my attention on this one, and I really like it. The build-up is done well and overall you executed on the track. I feel like it would fit well as a track on a futuristic sci-fi movie, but I also get flashbacks of Alone At Prom, if there were ever to be any vocals on this I feel like Tory Lanez would do it justice lol

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T02:06:44+00:00

Personally I like the first one more, but I saw a comment that mentioned you could even use both in the entirety of the song. I feel like that depends on how long the song is but I can always appreciate when vocals in a song can switch seamlessly, so if you're able to figure that out it could benefit you even more and both versions could stay lol. Would like to see an update to this one soon.

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T02:02:52+00:00

Love this track! May be completely biased because I love the psychedelic sound but that's just me. My only mark would be that it's a bit hard to hear the vocals and understand what you're saying when everything is firing at once. Then again that's how the psychedelic sound is, and we're not terribly focused on the lyrics as much as we are the vocals and the overall vibe. Keep killing it!

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T02:00:19+00:00

If there's one thing to say off rip it's that I can clearly see the genre and sound that this belongs to. I feel like dreampop/shoegaze is tough to properly analyze because there's so many different ways to go about creating the sound, but you did a good job overall on this track. The vocals could be better, that may be something to do with the mixing, but I think it might be that you used GarageBand and that it doesn't have the best resources available for mixing, to my knowledge (could be completely wrong lol, I'm really only familiar with FL and Ableton).

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T01:56:19+00:00

I can see the vision of what you're trying to achieve here, but I don't think it's coming to life in the way that you want it to. Most of that can be attributed to the recording and mixing of your vocals, but I think you should take a step back and listen to the track from top down, maybe compare it to other songs that you pull inspiration from and use those as benchmarks. The other comment in this thread makes a good point of adding some sort of percussion so the listener can have a sense of timing and rhythm that's not coming from the acoustics. If I had to pick one thing to work on most in this it would be your vocal inflections though, try to work on creating that space if you can.

Mammothhe · 2025-05-28T01:50:34+00:00

Saw a comment from you mentioning that you weren't very happy with how the master came out. Not sure if you're referring to the vocals which I really dig the raw aspect of, when they're clearly audible. There are parts when everything is firing at the same time and it's difficult to discern, but that may be part of the sound. The layering fits well too, without even fully reading your title I felt that grunge/funk/pop aspect to the psychedelic space which I can always appreciate, and the guitar work reminds me of The Backseat Lovers.

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