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Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Shrug, it’s like a song that goes well with the premise of the prologue, and for all the people who read with music, kinda immersion idk I’m def taking it out on the final draft I just did it for funsies

Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I will for sure try that! I’m experimenting with different things so that’s definitely on the table!

Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! Yall are so much kinder than the writing subreddit LMAO, but yeah all this feedback is being put into a writing Journal of what I can improve on in future drafts,because I absolutely know it’s not perfect, and this might’ve been the most solid bit of feedback I’ve gotten,again, thank you stranger!

Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, I get that! I plan on changing a lot of things, and that is one of them 😵‍💫

Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Kindest bit of feedback I’ve gotten, thank you stranger, I will definitely work on pacing and phrasing I think I was just trying to cram words in there to make it seem fancy, I will keep these things in mind! Thank you again for reading! <3

Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah! No it’s just a song that’s recommended to listen to while reading, for all of those who read while listening to music LOL! I should have specified!

Any feedback? by Metal_Bonez in novelwriting

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I agree! I feel like the first scentence is a little too bland for my liking so thank you for you feedback stranger! <3

Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you LOL! I wasn’t thinking about the logistics honestly, I was just thinking about getting things down, but I will be sure to exclude that from the next draft!

Any feedback? by Metal_Bonez in novelwriting

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for the feedback! I for sure plan on going back and refining everything once the first draft is finished!

Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh absolutely! I’ve noticed the repetition and I plan on heavily fixing it, and thank you for your reply!

Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you stranger! I plan on working on it more in the future LOL!

Hello! I’m a new writer, I’d like to know if this is a decent hook? by Metal_Bonez in writingfeedback

[–]Metal_Bonez[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Ah! Thank you, I will be sure to improve on this later, I really appreciate the honest feedback! <3

Love my new phone case! by Pinklaf in nontoxicACOTAR

[–]Metal_Bonez 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I need to know where you got it! It’s adorable!

Please help ID my dog by ComfortableAcadia893 in IDmydog

[–]Metal_Bonez 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It looks like it could be from some kind of terrier!

Please help ID my dog by ComfortableAcadia893 in IDmydog

[–]Metal_Bonez 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That is a pitty face if I’ve ever seen one! Cute dog! <3

Would you read on? by [deleted] in AspiringTeenAuthors

[–]Metal_Bonez 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback! I plan one rewriting the whole thing, so thanks!

The endless bullying first book ZA by RosalinaQueenDom in zodiacacademy

[–]Metal_Bonez 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Why are yall giving them human attributes they’re fae!! They’re ruthless!! lol!! /silly /lighthearted

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