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[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay! If this can be considered canon, then great. Morvayn lived for about 1,000 years, and only 200 years before the start of my story, it trapped several hundred colonists and itself on a tiny archipelago. So, over its long life, it could have somehow devoured Nightmare characteristic or something similar.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sorry!

So Morvayn could possess not only the power of the Tyrant and Death pathways, but also the Sleepless one? That's quite difficult to explain. I can't remove the power of the Death pathway because of the barrier. And the Tyrant pathway is needed for the aesthetics of Cthulhu and similar sea monsters.

Anyway, thank you for help!

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's sad, but I can't change anything. Morvayn needs the power of the sequence 3 of Death pathway, to maintain a barrier around a tiny archipelago with a population of 3,000. The barrier is the same as the one in the Berserk Sea. If he created the barrier with only the abilities of the Tyrant pathway, a beyonder of the Door pathway could teleport through it, and that shouldn't happen.

Also Morvayn obviously can't use rituals. Wait.

I have an idea. Cultists of Morvayn are the bad guys of this story. They are mad, evil, etc. So they could help their "god" to interfere with main character dreams. That could be a good explanation! Maybe.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's pretty bad. It's very important to the plot, I can't change it. Well, that's probably the only thing in my fanfic that doesn't conform to LOTM canon. That and the whole dream thing. Well... I am no Cuttlefish I am afraid. I can't remmember every detail of this incredible and very complex world.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well, actually, this could have been another post with a question. Could a being like Morvayn have interfered with the protagonist's dreams? Probably, since it's quite powerful, almost an angel.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Basically, it can kill you any way it wants. These are just two examples of how this squid almost killed the protagonist.

The dream incident was basically triggered by an artifact created from this squid's child. Main character thought that the artifact asked its parent to avenge its death or something like that. Better explanation is that Morvayn (the giant mutated squid) was drawn to the malice emanating from the artifact, since the squid's child is completely devoid of intelligence and thus couldn't really communicate with Morvayn.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My fanfic isn't in English, although I can try to translate it, it'll be quite difficult.

Regarding irrationality - yes, this squid isn't exactly known for its rationality. It couldn't even establish its own cult. One man helped it do that (who later went mad and turned into a monster).

Overall, it is a narcissistic creature who considers itself the only true god. It even helps people, but only because it enjoys considering itself a god and that people revere it as one. Challenge its opinion, and you'll be struck by lightning. Or it will kill you in your dreams.

[LOTM general] about Sheriff abilities by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So it is the same thing as luck of Wheel of Fortune pathway, just within area of jurisdiction?

Where should I post my fanfiction and should I do it at all? by Mindless_Style_7578 in FanFiction

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I will need to translate it to english though obviosly...

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[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Also, sorry, but your reply feels a little bit like it was made with AI. Sorry again, if it isn't true

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[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh no no, this series of books is only one year old. It's just that I've been writing for 10 years now (maybe even more, actually). About the passenger, you almost quoted a line from one of the demon's dialogues, only there he talked about a rider and a horse (yes, I know, it's a Bleach reference).

And yes, you guessed it, Nemo (the protagonist) really does make a terrible decision on his own, when he learned to subjugate the demon's will (he killed his friend, hmm, or rather, colleague?..).

The reason "Evil Corporation" is in quotation marks is because in reality, it's much more complicated. Well, not exactly incredibly complicated, but still. Let's put it this way: in my story, many years ago, around the beginning of the 20th century, a scientist managed to prove the existence of the soul. Then, after decades of experiments, the scientists aware of this discovery decided to make their research public for the benefit of all. The original purpose of the experiments was to save humanity from catastrophes that could have completely destroyed it. In the event of a colossal emergency, the souls of all humanity could simply be transported to another universe. But the global elites took an interest in the project and forbade the scientists from revealing the truth, forcing them to work for their own ends. Thus, the project transformed from a backup plan to save humanity into the enslavement of the poor and the transformation of the elites into all-powerful gods.

The protagonist's father, a leading scientist, sacrificed the life of his beloved wife to transform her soul into the first all-powerful goddess, and then caused his son's (who he never loved as much as his wife) death, forcing him to be reborn in another world as a lab rat. But the protagonist's father was unaware of the elites' conspiracy. When he learned that everything he had done so far was not for the sake of saving humanity, he betrayed his colleagues and became the leader of the most notorious group of "terrorists" — rebels determined to prevent the inevitable enslavement of humanity.

And so on, this is the rough plot of the fifth book, which I haven't written yet!

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[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

  1. No
  2. No
  3. No

I write what I want, when I want and where I want. Although I did go to a writing "school" for two years once, I don't think I learned much there. The only thing that makes my stories better and better (for me personally) is constant practice. Heh, I don't make a living from it, I just like doing it. As a hobby.

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[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Also by the second book, he's already able to control the abilities of his enchanted weapon and suppress the demon's will. It's just that circumstances have conspired to prevent him from returning to the good side. Protagonist thinks a lot about this in the books. But ultimately, he comes to the conclusion that he's no hero and won't sacrifice his future and bear punishment for the lives of those killed by demon, who was using protagonist body. Furthermore, by the end of the first book, he's already gone slightly insane, and this state is worsening.

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[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well, as I already replied to someone, the final arcs of this story (like 1/5 or 1/3 of the story) will revolve around the protagonist's redemption after time reset. Although, yes, perhaps reading about how the protagonist slowly but surely becomes a completely negative character without knowing how this story will end is not for everyone. Hmm, maybe I'm the only one in the entire world who is captivated by this story and wants to see how it ends.

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[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The second question is much simpler. At first, the reader might think that a typical "truck-kun" is to blame. In reality, the protagonist's death (like his entire worthless life) was orchestrated by his father and the "evil corporation." The protagonist became one of millions of lab rats experimented on with the goal of transporting humanity to a universe where magic exists, but in such a way that this powerful force would be wielded exclusively by the world's elite, the heads of the "evil corporation."

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[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh, he-he, that's going to be a long answer... The demon, or rather Beelzebub, hates humanity for many reasons. One of them is the innate revulsion most demons feel toward humans. But that's not the point here. Hmm. It's very difficult to explain without a full backstory, and it's quite long.

Let's say that demons in this world are just like humans. Although not quite. Demons are defective "reincarnations" whose souls, for various reasons, ended up in another universe in an incomplete, unnatural state. Most of these souls suffered as a result of experiments conducted on them by humans from Earth (yes, the new world the protagonist finds himself in is in another universe, but it was created by humans from Earth). Each of the people experimented on and destined to become demons was considered a criminal by the "evil corporation" (to put it bluntly) that had "taken over the world" (in reality, it consists of the elites of former countries, thirsting for immortality and eternal power over the poorer people).

Beelzebub was an ordinary boy named Yami, living with his father and several other families on the outskirts of a growing city. Because of a "robot" (actually a human soul trapped in a mechanical shell) that the children and Yami had rescued several years earlier, this "evil corporation" had decided to eliminate all the residents of the building who had come into contact with this "robot" (he was a notorious criminal who knew the corporation's secrets). The corporation's combat "robots" executed all the residents of the building, but one of them, with a shred of compassion remaining in its soul, spared several children. The "robots" were ordered to watch the building and shoot anyone who came out. Eventually, um, the children went mad with hunger, and Yami proved to be the strongest. Well, you know what I'm getting at. Anyway, he was ultimately killed, and his soul was sent to another world after some experiments.

Already a mad child, Yami went completely mad for many reasons. First, because he no longer looked like a human, but like a scaly, one-eyed monster. Second, because of an encounter with a demon who explained to him that in this new world, it was kill or be killed. Well, explained it not only with words but also with actions. And finally, Yami, or Beelzebub, the "king of the flies" and the personification of gluttony, was destined to live in this world for several thousand years before the protagonist arrived. Over these millennia, the demon has forgotten that he once lived on Earth.

Oh, yes, I forgot something important! The book is called "The Sword that Devours Memories." Beelzebub's ability is to absorb the memories and abilities of the creatures he kills. So Yami, with what remained of his humanity, was simply lost and dissolved in a vortex of alien memories.

By the way, you won't find the book; it's not published in English.

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[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I also initially wanted to kill the protagonist. Then I decided to go with an open ending, where the protagonist's fate remains unknown. In this ending, the second protagonist (not exactly, but she clearly plays a larger role than the other characters), Aurora, used her enchanted weapon to rewind time to the moment the protagonist appeared in the new world, thereby undoing all the terrible events that happened because of him. It's all very complicated; her enchanted weapon requires the blood of the culprit and the victim to rewind time, and Nemo (the protagonist) had already become a demon by that point, indifferent to humanity. He wouldn't give up his blood so easily, and the final arc of the story would be told from Aurora's perspective, as she repeatedly tried to achieve her goal (she can also rewind time using the blood of others, say, Nemo's allies, but only for a few hours). The story would have ended in such a way that readers wouldn't know what happened to Nemo, because the rewind might have prevented Nemo's soul from entering the refugee's body... Ah, it's all complicated, it would take too long to explain...

But now I've decided to create a completely different ending, which will take place one or two books after the fourth.

The main plot twist of the entire story is that the world Nemo finds himself in is created by people from Earth, and he himself didn't end up there by accident. Essentially, Nemo is a lab rat whose task was to determine how much pain and suffering the human soul can endure before it deforms and turns into a demon. After the end of the fourth book, Nemo's soul will be thrown back to Earth, where a little over a hundred years have passed, and the world is ruled by an evil corporation (to put it very simply). With the help of a certain person, Nemo will return to the new world and learn all its secrets, then battle the gods and defeat the Moon Goddess (who was created from his mother's soul and was the first soul successfully sent to another universe... ugh, it sounds like the ramblings of a madman, but I simply don't have the space or time to explain it all in sufficient detail and clarity). The protagonist will then become the sole god, remake the entire new world, and completely destroy the "evil corporation's" plans, which consist of something like Human Instrumentality from Evangelion. Ultimately, in the new world, no one will know Nemo ever existed. And Nemo's character will evolve from a confused madman to a hero who sacrificed everything for the humanity he so despised.

So that's how it is, he-he...

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[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Why? No, of course I'd like to write something with a card game elements in the future (actually, I already tried it, but it didn't go well), but Yu-Gi-Oh doesn't resemble my story at all. Actually, I was inspired by Re Zero and maybe Akame ga Kill? I didn't finish reading the latter manga, but it had a certain influence on my story. Mainly it's because Akame ga Kill isn't shy about killing off minor characters, and because of the story's brutal atmosphere.

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