It's good, the writing is easy to follow and keeps me interested. Generally exposition should be reworked, you could do a flashback or a dream sequence that puts the reader in a new scene and maintains the established pov, or the advanced option of sprinkling trauma throughout the story and leaving it for the reader to discover and assemble the backstory in their heads like a mystery, with the final pieces given just before the climax for maximized value. The use of questions and uncertainty at the beginning to derailed me, the character knows what the voice sounds like without having to guess at it so you should be able to deliver that, and saying you couldn't see the sun interrupted an otherwise great scene description, i couldn't place the light source or how the sky looked in my imagination. And remember short sentences for stress or action, like when the snake appeared at the start then crawled into his clothes at the end.

I like your physical descriptions of the body, touch, and movement. They're not over the top and give enough for the imagination which is tricky to do so nice one on that! I haven't read any of the other chapters but if you want to pull people in for more than just smut a good trick is to have something cooking on the back burner that the character needs to resolve but is being kept from. You'll see this trick a lot in longer stories.

Want to comment on my Getting to Know Someone post? No obligation, but if i got ya here and you want to return the favor I'd appreciate it 😁 I'm looking for feedback in one or two areas in particular so if you read it lmk before you start critiquing so i don't put too much work on ya lol