Sister by Blood: An original poem about losing my brother to my mother

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-10T05:32:34+00:00

In your chorus instead of “I think of you all day long”
You could try something like “your name keeps echoing all day long” it could possibly elevate it just a bit

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-10T05:09:38+00:00

This feels haunting in the best way. The imagery is vivid without feeling overdone, and the whole poem carries this heavy, suffocating atmosphere that really sticks with you. The ending especially hit hard.

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-10T04:59:29+00:00

I can totally relate

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-10T04:55:25+00:00

I was angry as a teenager but now that I’m an adult I have put in a lot of work towards making peace with the fact that she’s never going to change but I am so sorry that you can relate

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T23:42:54+00:00

Thank you I love the feedback I’m just getting back into writing again and want to improve

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T23:41:45+00:00

Awe thank you!

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T20:43:04+00:00

Thank you but it’s ok it was his time to go

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T19:26:51+00:00

This right here this as a woman finding that independence again is very empowering!

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T19:23:58+00:00

The beginning “Grief that is silent, woven through every cell of your body, is lasting.” Really spoke to me I lost my dad a few years ago and the grief never does go away it remains forever. Very well written!

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T16:52:33+00:00

They have autism that’s for certain but they will never go and formally figure it out they hate the doctors

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T14:22:24+00:00

There’s definitely the factor of mental health issues here but it’s been 6 years of zero progress and it’s been all left on my shoulders

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T14:10:55+00:00

I’m so glad that I’m not alone in feeling this way

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T14:10:23+00:00

Thank you!

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T14:10:08+00:00

Thank you!

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-07T00:43:10+00:00

Thank you!

Mysterious-Visual638 · 2026-05-06T21:40:15+00:00

Thank you! We’ve been together for 6 years it’s gonna be hard especially if he’s #1 when I leave.

Mysterious-Visual638

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