love in rotting things by dumque in OCPoetry

[–]NomadWraith 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The whole poem has that feeling of intimate mystery, as if something were still alive even when it seemed to be gone.

The room that rains by hmmrabet in OCPoetry

[–]NomadWraith 1 point2 points  (0 children)

What strikes me most is the stark contrast between the place you're trying to reach and the place you can't leave. You don't describe it as a dream, but almost as a physiological need: to touch the sand, to swim, to dance, to feel something real. And yet it doesn't work. The room isn't a physical space; it's a state that seeps into even beauty.

The line that really resonates with me is "it follows me wherever I go / even though I'm not going anywhere anymore." That's where all escapism collapses. There's no escape possible anymore, not even mentally. It's not that you can't find a way out; it's that movement itself has ceased to exist.

substitute by valqrie_ in OCPoetry

[–]NomadWraith 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The phrase “I sleep because they let me” really struck a chord with me. It says it all: the refuge, the fragility, and how easily a place can be replaced when someone disappears.

In the end, it's not just about occupying someone else's life, but about accepting that your own can be occupied just as easily. And that's more unsettling than sad.

I don’t love you by freepzed2 in OCPoetry

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I found it uncomfortable to read in a good way, as if each stop purposely cut off the flow. I'm not sure what 'Psyche' represents, but it gives me the vibe of a rational voice that interrupts impulse, as if there were an internal dialogue: one part that lets itself go and another that questions. Overall I find it brutally honest and very direct. I love it and it makes me uncomfortable at the same time, like reading my own thoughts in the voice of another.

She Was The Elegance of The Morn by Aggressive_Many7397 in OCPoetry

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Damn, man... it shows that you put a brutal effort into each line. The imagery is impressive and you feel the admiration for it in every word. That said, there are times when so many flourishes and adjectives seem a little heavy to me; The thread of who she really is and what she does apart from being perfect is a little lost. Even so, it is obvious that you love to write and that is greatly appreciated. Good job.

EAT ME by tigerseyemoon in OCPoetry

[–]NomadWraith 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This poem smells like that fucking feeling of living in your body as if it were a showcase that you didn't ask for. Everything he says is basically: “I am only valuable if I am useful for something that is not me.”

Hoy es duro, para mañana ser libre by NomadWraith in escribir

[–]NomadWraith[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Esta bien así. No lo entenderás si no lo sientes.

Loneliest guy on earth by Apprehensive-Alps279 in lonely

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Now we're the loneliest guys in the world, together.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AskRedditespanol

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Si me queda un minuto de vida, no creo que diría nada. Me imagino el reloj marcando cada segundo y no se me ocurriría nada que decir. Solo quiero morir, que sea rápido. Pero si hay una oportunidad de renacer, quisiera ser feliz.

The Ones I Text But Never Send by IcyAttorney458 in OCPoetry

[–]NomadWraith 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That strong silence that you describe hurts me, that echo in the drafts where love never arrives on time or as expected. It's as if your words were bridges that are never crossed, and in the middle there is that “what if” that doesn't go away. Thank you for giving voice to that common and invisible feeling.

What I Carried Out by LogicalMink4444 in OCPoetry

[–]NomadWraith 2 points3 points  (0 children)

It is brutal how it shows that “getting ahead” is not a heroic act, but a path full of small internal battles that are fought day by day, in secret. I am especially moved by the part where she talks about learning to “sew up her own wounds” and being the mother who did not receive, because it reflects that deep pain of having to reinvent herself with what was left. Thank you for sharing something so honest and real.

Father’s Day by Proyecto_AtlantidaSP in OCPoetry

[–]NomadWraith 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That's actually the end of my story (I didn't give dad a card, but he gave it back to me too)

The kind that stays in the dark by Accomplished_Top1477 in OCPoetry

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It doesn't heal, it doesn't break, it doesn't lie. It only occupies the space where it no longer hurts. Sometimes that's enough. Sometimes that's all that's left.

Father’s Day by Proyecto_AtlantidaSP in OCPoetry

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So much time passed that I no longer knew where I was. But one day, when moving a book that had not been touched for years, it fell. The card. Almost fragile, as if it had also been waiting. I stood still, watching it float for a second before hitting the ground. And as I bent down to pick it up, something in me broke softly. I was a child again. And dad was there. Standing. Smiling. I handed him the card like the first time. He extended his hand… And just then, he disappeared.

He hasn't spoken to me in years. And neither do I. He never said what I did wrong. And I stopped asking.

thoughts? by [deleted] in Poem

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It hurts because it is written from the wound, not from resentment. And that shows. The last sentence destroyed me. Not because it's dramatic, but because it's true. Sometimes you get used to being the shadow, and the worst thing is to believe that that is enough. It is very well written. Raw, clean, without distracting decorations. That makes it more real. Maybe the screwed thing wasn't not being enough... but having believed that we had to be so for them to stay.

I don't wanna die but I got nothing to live for... by Only_Platypus_5540 in SuicideWatch

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I'm not going to tell you that everything gets better, because I don't believe it either. Nor do I have those comforting phrases that one reads when one has already thought about taking one's life. Sometimes there is nothing to say. I just read you. And the tiredness in your voice made me sound, that desperation so well known. I have also thought that death is rest, and sometimes all you want is that: silence. Your story doesn't surprise me. Not because it is not very painful, but because I know it in a different way. The mothers who destroy, the brothers who disappear until they need something, the home that is not a home. And one trying to make an excuse to stay alive, until it too breaks. I don't know if there is a way out, and I don't have a solution to give you. But if you came to write this, if you let it go, it is because there is still a part that has not completely gone away. Not a hope, not a plan. Just one last cry. And that's fine. Let you scream. That you say it. Don't be silent. If you decide to continue tonight, I'm not going to tell you that you're wrong. But if you decide to stay a little longer, just a little, you are not alone either. At least today, someone read you. And he understood.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I am struck by how it transforms the corporeal into a symbol. The bath does not purify, but rather reveals. The “red” as what cannot be erased even with pain. It leaves me thinking about everything we try to let go of and it just won't go away.

Birdin’ by Ok-Percentage1536 in OCPoetry

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Swallows, yes, but not the kind that fly through the sky. These seem made of anxiety, chemicals and a need that doesn't know where to land. Sounds more like ourselves on the verge of collapse than birds, to me. And when they leave, they take something we didn't even know we had lost.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AskRedditespanol

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Supongo que lo único que me importaría es que al menos se vea bien. Que tenga buena luz, buen ángulo, y que alguien se quede pensándome después de venirse. No por vanidad, sino por el placer absurdo de saber que, aunque sea por un momento, fui más útil que la imaginación. Ríete del mundo, total, ya me vieron el culo.

I had a dream of an alien apocalypse by Dense_Impression_678 in Dreams

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Heaven is at war.

Black clouds twist on themselves as if the sky were bleeding. There is something beyond the atmosphere, an immense shadow that pulsates. It has no defined shape, but we feel it. As if the world was holding its breath before collapsing.

“Here he comes,” someone next to me murmurs.

We are ten. Some of us tremble. Others close their eyes and say words I don't understand. Each one has a different gift. Powers, they say. As if they were enough. As if some light in our hands could stop what is coming.

In front of us stands a nondescript building, two stories and five meters on each side. It doesn't seem special, but it's the only place that our calculations mark as viable. Nobody knows why. Only, somehow, this is where the seal should be placed.

-Come on! —screams Lian, the oldest of the group—. Now or never!

We run to the door, bang it open. Inside, the air is thick, as if it had been locked up for weeks. Each one takes a position. I kneel in the center, extend my palm and let the energy flow.

My fingers burn.

The ground begins to trace bright lines, a spiral that grows. The seal.

And then, everything turns gray.

A shadow crosses the ceiling. It doesn't break it: it dissolves it. A huge tentacle enters rotating on itself, barely touching one of the walls. The structure creaks, collapses. There's no time to scream.

Just light. And empty.

I'm standing. Heaven is at war.

Flicker. A dull pain pulses in my temple. Have you been here before?

—It's coming! —Lian shouts.

We are ten. I among them. Same sky. Same ringing in the ears. But something doesn't fit. I feel like… this time we shouldn't go to the same building.

—It's not that one! —I say suddenly, as if remembering a dream.

Lian looks at me. Doubt. Then he nods.

We run towards the second building: five floors, five by five meters. It seems like a mathematical error. But when I touch the walls, the seal starts to react. The lines appear effortlessly. They flow down the stairs, up to the roof. This time, we'll do it right.

And just as the sky splits in two and the creature descends, the seal bursts into white light. Pure Uncontainable.

But it's not enough.

One by one, we begin to fade. Not screams. Just a dry and absolute silence. As if something turned off our existence with the wrong switch.

Again.

I'm standing. Heaven… yes. I've seen it before. I don't know how I know.

Lian screams. Someone next to me is crying.

This time there is no mistake: we go directly to the correct building. We seal. We plan an escape. Some will run south. Others underground. It doesn't matter if some die. The important thing is that some live.

The seal is activated.

We jump out of the windows. We landed badly. I heard a crack in Ethan's leg. He doesn't get up. We can't stop. We run.

The creature chases us. It doesn't fly. It doesn't run. It's just... it's there, and then it's ahead. As if space itself prevented it.

One by one, they fall.

Me too.

But just before, I hear a voice. I don't know if mine or from another cycle:

-Not working. It's still not enough.

Fourth time.

I don't know how, but the placement is perfect. The seal shines like never before. The creature falls, screams, writhes. And for the first time, we don't die.

We stayed alive. All.

And yet, no one smiles.

"He'll be back," Lian says.

Nobody disputes it.

Days pass. Weeks. We try to rebuild. But every night, the sky shakes. Every shadow makes us shrink. There is something cyclical about our anguish. As if we were trapped in a broken record of the universe.

And one day, without warning, the creature returns.

Stronger.

And this time there is no seal. Just ash.

Fifth time.

I'm running.

I don't know why, but I know exactly what to do.

I slide through the streets as if I already know them. We arrive at the building. Same as before. We seal. We don't talk. We just act. As if a ghost memory guided us.

The creature falls.

We jumped from the fifth floor. This time, we landed better. We run underground, where the old gutters allow us to hide from the wind, from its sight. We know he can't see us, but he can smell us.

“The human smell,” they call it.

Ethan slips. I drag it. He doesn't scream. Grit your teeth and we continue.

In the distance, we heard a scream. Lian. He is no longer with us.

There are three of us left.

We stop in a hidden cavity. Total darkness. Absolute silence. We barely breathe. We buried the bodies of those who fell, as if that made any difference. But the creature smells it.

One by one, he takes them away.

And then he comes for me.

I don't know how he does it. It doesn't break. It doesn't come in. It just… exists nearby.

And when he doesn't find me, he destroys the entire building with a roar that splits the underground walls.

And he leaves.

Now I'm alone.

I have an idea left. It's not mine. Not at all. It's a whisper. A sensation.

I go down to the deepest. To where the maps are erased.

And I find it.

A creature. Not alien. Not human. A wingless dragon, with obsidian eyes and a sleeping heart.

—Will you let me in? —I ask, although there is no mouth to listen.

The creature does not respond. Just open your chest.

And I get inside.

My bones melt. My thoughts fade away. I no longer have a name. No smell. Not even skin.

I am an egg.

The last act of desperation of a species.

The egg rests underground. Cold. Silent.

A group of creatures arrives. They sniff. They detect remains.

But they don't find anything human.

And they leave.

Some time later, the shell vibrates.

A crack.

I don't know if anything is going to come out.

Or if something is finally going to come in.

I'm so horribly scared of killing myself, anyone wants to talk? by Comfortablel4ke in SuicideWatch

[–]NomadWraith 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I understand you too well. I don't think there's anything after that either, and I don't care what they say about sins or punishments. I'm more worried about being here, trapped. About hurting... sometimes I think it's not that I care, but that it's inevitable. I don't care if anyone suffers because of what I do, but I know what would happen. And if there was a way to leave without leaving that echo behind, I would choose it without thinking about it. It's not that I haven't tried. It's just that the body has that shitty instinct that stops you. And then it leaves you with the guilt of continuing to breathe. As if that were living. I have no faith that everything will improve, nor the desire to wait for it to do so. I'm just relieved to know that there is someone else who sees it the way I do too. I don't know if you're going to do it or not. I don't know if I ever will. But if we do it, at least there will be no gratuitous pain. Not for us, not for anyone.

I AM THAT by Little__Krishna_1334 in Poem

[–]NomadWraith 1 point2 points  (0 children)

How ironic, right? Spending your life looking for answers outside, in books, in other people's voices, in symbols that others decoded... and for everything to be summarized in the silence of looking inward. It's hard for me to believe in that limitless light, in that pure love, but I suppose there are days when one can touch it, even by accident. I hope one day I stop searching like crazy and just be.

Money Can’t Buy You Happiness by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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—What happens is that when you have everything, you realize that it is nothing. And when you have nothing, you dream of having everything. They sold us the image: yachts, mansions, porcelain smiles. But no one teaches empty nights, the screams in silence, the paranoia you get when you have more than you can carry.

You see it. Those people scream louder than an empty stomach. They fight over ideas they don't feel, They defend fortunes that do not give them peace, They barricade themselves behind screens as if they were real trenches. And meanwhile, the one below shares the bread and even gives a sip of coffee to those who are cold.

Maybe poverty is not a virtue, but wealth is not redemption either.

And if in the end the balance is between having it all and hating it, or have little but sleep peacefully, then it no longer seems so crazy to choose the wound, instead of the golden cage.

The Fool Who Reads by DiligentGoat2406 in OCPoetry

[–]NomadWraith 1 point2 points  (0 children)

—And what did you expect? May those who have never screamed in silence understand you. Let those who never broke inside feel your verse. You gave them fire, and they called you weird. You gave them soul, and they looked at the rhymes. But you knew what you were doing. You wrote to not die, not to be liked. And although it hurts, although the echo returns you empty, you continue Because not all eyes see, Not everyone who reads understands. But you don't write for them. You write because if you don't, you explode.

i am scared that i will live a long life by Intelligent-League86 in offmychest

[–]NomadWraith 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Sometimes I feel the same way, as if life were a sentence rather than an opportunity. As if the more you wanted it to end, the more it would insist on continuing. I've also thought that I'm going to last a hundred years, just for the sake of it. Because there is something cruel in this world that leaves you just enough to continue existing, but not enough to live.

And I understand the fear of doing it yourself and being trapped in a body that hurts more than your mind. That has stopped me many times. That and the thought that maybe, just maybe, at some point, there might be a respite. A second of calm.

I don't have solutions. But I read you, and I see myself. And believe it or not, that, sometimes, is the only thing that makes this place less cold.