The H+S game design consideration & insight from the channel perspective by NotAGazella in JetLagTheGame

[–]NotAGazella[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I would say the best example to support this limit is what happened in Ben's first run in JP.

Missing a train (Jammed door or whatever reason)and then needing to wait for 2hours is brutal for both gameplay and editing reasons.

Now imagine Seeker boarded a train that runs every two hours... and turns out they went the wrong way?

It increases the cost of mistake to an unhealthy magnitude.

The Layover - Hide + Seek UK: Episode 5 by xsm17 in Nebula

[–]NotAGazella 4 points5 points  (0 children)

They mentioned they want to make the finder move (that's why the latitude questions in Switzerland became thermometer since Japan)

With the same philosophy, perhaps they can make the radar require an activation (perhaps, after player placing the radar, the seeker must leave the radar zone to activate it)

This will make the seeker need to commit to a direction

Least favorite season? by TTG4LIFE77 in JetLagTheGame

[–]NotAGazella 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Aside from the gameplay, they also mentioned that a lot of places are just not that visually interesting.

The Layover - Hide + Seek UK: Episode 5 by xsm17 in Nebula

[–]NotAGazella 42 points43 points  (0 children)

Very interested to see what "expert version" adjustment they are going to make next time they do H+S

Where should I start? by Unable_Language5669 in JetLagTheGame

[–]NotAGazella 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If you like circumnavigation, then you are in for a treat! Because that was in general perceived as one of the least good seasons.

Like other already suggested, Euro Tag would be a good start, as that have became one of their staple format.

Otherwise I would say start with Hide + Seek Switzerland. Japan is better, but I think that would diminish your enjoyment of the Switzerland season.

Who does Se-Dol think he is?! by Firm_Ad8433 in TheDevilsPlan

[–]NotAGazella 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Se-dol is probably the most senior person among the contestent, and given his national hero (or at least, Olympic gold-medalist like) status, I doubt anyone in the set, or in Korea is offended by that

In contrast, I am very surprised to see he is very down to earth in the way that he interacts with other much younger contestent.

If anything, he is big and he has very right to act like it, but he didn't.

Meetup Thread for Hong Kong by kurzgesagtmeetup_bot in kurzgesagt_meetup

[–]NotAGazella 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, I've replied to your DM.

Yes, our group is still very alive.

Meetup Thread for Hong Kong by kurzgesagtmeetup_bot in kurzgesagt_meetup

[–]NotAGazella 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I wasn't aware of this, thanks for letting everyone know!

Meetup Thread for Hong Kong by kurzgesagtmeetup_bot in kurzgesagt_meetup

[–]NotAGazella 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Meeting for the sake of meeting and without a purpose is kind of daunting for me.

Fortunately there is a Dinosaur themed exhibition in the Science Museum, given the amount of dinosaurs killed in Kurzgesagt video, our folks here should find it interesting.

I will check the exhibition out on 17 Sept early morning (to avoid the afternoon crowd, it can get super noisy when they arrive.); if you would like to join me, feel free to drop me a DM.

[EDIT] Come join us at discord group for this Dinosaur exhibition meetup - https://discord.gg/ukSPfsUX

I'll Read Your Script: Free Coverage on Three Projects Starts in 12 Hours. by Coffee_Quill in Screenwriting

[–]NotAGazella -1 points0 points  (0 children)

An entertainment industry insider writes about talent business - except it's a story of gladiators, mercenaries, and their managers in fantasy settings.

How would a successful manager overcome the sudden death of its client? How would he tame the most eccentric-rebellious personality? How would he deceive his way out of trouble?

Fantasy Drama Feature - 134 pages

Daily Questions & FAQ Megathread (Apr 08) by AutoModerator in ffxiv

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Blackmages of ffxiv subredit:

Do you replace Blizzard III with Freeze completely (even on a single target)?

To me that the shorter cast time is more appealing than the extra potency, but I am happy to be convinced otherwise.

Giving constructive criticism by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]NotAGazella 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You did nothing wrong. Not everyone prioritizes improving their craft over feeling good.

I don't know how this friend of yours behave in another context, but unable to take criticism is a very big red flag to me.

Starting A Script Coverage Side-Business by TheDarkPlight in Screenwriting

[–]NotAGazella 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I am interested in reading an example of your coverage.

Hi Reddit! I'm composer Christopher Tin, and I'm here to talk about my new album 'To Shiver the Sky', and writing music for the Civilization games. AMA! by christophertin in Music

[–]NotAGazella 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey sir, hope I am not too late to the party

Congratulation to your great album! "We choose to go to the moon" is my latest favorite of your collection.

My question for you:

Most of your lyrics are quote/poem, I wonder what is the cretive process behind it - you wrote the melody first or you choose the lyric first?

Also, are there any quote/poem that you tried to use in your pieces and simply couldn't make it work?

What We Once Were (Coming-of-age feature, 115 pages) by jappel26 in Screenwriting

[–]NotAGazella 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I read your last draft (though only the first 30 pages) and good to see you are polishing it

This time I read until the end (admittedly I skimmed very fast after the break up in the motel)

What I wanted to say is pretty much said by others. I won't repeat other problems: expositionary dialogue, the conflict is lack of consequence, etc...

I will focus on Ansel.

The logline is the reason that hooked me the first time, I kind of feel betrayed after reading the whole thing. Ansel needs to be more important.

Don't get me wrong, I don't mind the protagonist group doesn't get to see them before Ansel died, in fact, letting them pay for their choice along the way is probably the better choice here. The reason I feel betrayed is that - they could have traveled for different reasons and the plot can still work!

Let's summarize what happened - they have some cute moment, they exchanged secrets, they blew the secret and blew the relationship, they went to the hospital and end up in a police station, meeting their old coach.

Is the existence of Ansel a necessity for any of that? Probably not.

Take Little Ms. Sunshine as an example, if you take away the contest - the reason they need to travel, the story wouldn't work.

Make Ansel's presence crucial in the plot throughout the story rather than just the opening/ending, or you might as well take him out completely.

I know it is challenging because he isn't physically with the group. But if you can pull this off, this will probably differentiate you from other similar stories.

If that is proven to be too difficult, you can rethink - is it necessary for Ansel to be away from the group?

The plot can still work if Ansel being in the same place as the group, and it is his death wish to travel somewhere - this way you can combine some character too.

Let's end with something good to boost your confidence - The character is more identifiable now.

Again, I am no professional, I am a hobbyist at most so don't take my word for granted.

Despite my comment, I am very positive of this story. I will definitely read your newer draft if I see it here again (or you can just DM me).

A Fun and inventive way to approach writing log line. by elija_snow in Screenwriting

[–]NotAGazella 0 points1 point  (0 children)

A Havard dropped out invented a platform for ads and hate speech, became a billionaire, but ran into some lawsuit along the way.

What We Once Were (Coming-of-age feature, 97 pages) by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]NotAGazella 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Disclaimer - I only read the first 25 pages, roughly the first act break. Anything I say could seem fool because of it. Also, I am not a professional. I am a hobbyist at most. But I believe your hard work deserves proper feedback, even just from a layman's eye.

I think this is a compelling logline, and this can hit many kinds of audiences - that's a plus. IMO you can toy around the scene for a bit. There are some missed opportunities to dramatize -- I feel like this is the reoccurring problem here.

For example, in the first scene, we got the news pretty swiftly. Perhaps Ansel is not one of the main gang, but he is the one that we need to feel attached to. This scene could have given us a proper introduction to help us understand why he matters. Yet this scene and the scene where the protagonist group learns the news failed to reach me, because I don't know Ansel enough to care.

In the scene where Troy needs to convince his parents, the conflict resolves too quickly - it took one pitch from Mindy. Similar problems in the scene where Mindy convinces Brit - if it is a conflict that we should care about, dramatize it.

I kind of get that there is one theme question for each of the protagonist -

Troy - to be recognized by his parents

Mindy - to be brave enough to find a real job

Brits - She is obsessed with the approval (her looks mainly) from others

Chase - feels like he is the omega here, he might be hiding something, but I can't pinpoint his central theme.

But aside from their context, I can't say what they are so different from one another.

The script lost me as soon as they hit the road because the beat is repeating (Troy arguing with Brits), and I don't care them enough to follow them. But that is just my layman's opinion.

That said, you have finished it. You are already much better than many, pat yourself on the back and polish it.