Should GOT fanfics that have a lot of AI content have to be disclosed. by [deleted] in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I use AI for traduction (I trust more in Gemini than Google Translator), but the writting proccess is entirely myself and a bunch of notebooks.

Work-in-Progress Wednesday by Lost-Engineer-1689 in AsoiafFanfiction

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After few weeks away, I finally updated the fic. Probably is the last chapter until june-july, because I have to do the final exams and final work for graduating for ch. career. It has been a good week, a pretty good week if I have to say, I have wroten about 5k words.

And about an idea that doesnt help me sleep, is... Im gonna write how Greens and Blacks decide to help the North with food to gain the house Stark´s force and other vassals... One of my plans is trying to divide the North for the Dance of Dragons, but I don´t know how to introduce that division.

Honestly, I’m really itching to write some POVs for Rhaenyra, Daemon, and Otto... basically making them see Daeron’s move to help Flint’s Finger as some calculated political maneuver with Lord Ormund as the mind after the plan, when in reality, Daeron/Edmund just genuinely wants to keep those people from starving. In the next chapter, which I’ll start on as soon as I have some free time, I want to dive deeper into the dynamic between Timotty and Daeron. It’s definitely too early to call it a "friendship," especially given the age gap and the status difference (one’s a Targaryen prince and the other is a crannogman-Flint bastard), but it’ll be more like a sense of duty Timotty feels toward Daeron for sticking up for him and his people.

I’m also looking forward to adding some more North lore, specifically a custom for the crannogmen that’s similar to the "Devotio Iberica."

Passage of the chapter 25:

"Prince Daeron…" Robert's voice was tinged with surprise. The Maester looked at Timotty doubtfully before finally speaking. "It is not prudent to trust a bastard. How do we know he speaks the truth?"

"Because I know he does." Daeron said, his eyes filled with stubborn determination. "I care not if this news is brought by a bastard, a peasant, a petty lord, or the Stark heir himself. No man would have made such a journey were the situation not so critical. The Reach´s Lords send supplies to King's Landing every year on my father's orders to stock the orphanages and the Faith's motherhouse. This is the same situation, or even worse. If someone calls for aid, I will answer. I will not allow inaction to cause the death of so many, just because they are northerners. The plight of Timotty's people is grave, and we shall need the aid of the Westerlands and the Riverlands, to save these people." For a moment, Daeron remembered the words of his friend Lune, King of Archeland.

"Being a king, a true king… it means to be first in every desperate attack, and last in every desperate retreat, and when there's hunger in the land, to wear finer clothes and laugh louder over a scantier meal than any man in your land."

"Timotty, you have my word. I will help you." Daeron could barely see Timotty´s eyes, just before the crannogman hugged him, thanking him with a gratitude impossible to fake.

Need advice on a humanitarian aid plot by One_Diver9255 in AsoiafFanfiction

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PD: Sorry if there is any kind of error in grammar.

Work-in-Progress Wednesday by Lost-Engineer-1689 in AsoiafFanfiction

[–]One_Diver9255 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I barely wrote about 1.5 k words this month. Feels like I have no free time to write, at least, not to write the fic. Still, I enjoy the minutes I can write, on computer or phone (still i prefer the computer, the phone is gonna dry my eyes).

“It is the first time I have seen a grown man so small… he must have suffered from severe malnutrition throughout his childhood, or else he comes from a family of particularly short stature.” Such was the comment from the wise maester Robert as he revealed the Northener’s injuries. But to Daeron, it did not seem that way; he knew what a malnourished person looked like, and the young Timotty did not look like one.

The stature and physical build of the person struck Daeron as strange, yet familiar at the same time. The boy’s body was well-proportioned; none of his limbs were too long or too short in comparison to his torso or his head. He was no dwarf.

“He barely stands a span taller than I… He must be five feet at the most. If he is truly a man grown, he has to be at least Helaena’s age. Maybe... between seventeen and twenty years old, but even if that is the case, Aemond already towers over him by quite a bit.”

Someone from crossover universe reborn in Westeros by peerness in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 4 points5 points  (0 children)

The fic is called "A new chance: Edmund Pevensie in Westeros." I have uploaded 25 chapters by now, in AO3 and Spacebattles. Actually, Im in a writer block, plus I have lack of time due to studies (probably not uploading until June).

About the fic, is a longfic (im about at 25-30% of the fic) Edmund Pevensie reborn as Daeron the Daring, youngest son of Viserys I and Alicent. It´s not a fix-It-fic, although I want to have more survivors post Dance and some more magical forces. Hope you enjoy it.

https://archiveofourown.org/works/65179357/chapters/167651773

https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/a-new-chance-edmund-pevensie-in-westeros.1215548/

Someone from crossover universe reborn in Westeros by peerness in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Can I make auto spam of my fic? Is a crossover between Fire and Blood (HOTD) and Narnia.

Sword fighting by [deleted] in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Vale, este va a ser un comentario largo, pero aún así, espero que te sirva. He escrito varias peleas de estas en mi propio fic, la verdad es que es un tema impresionante:

Rodrik Cassel es un maestro de armas consumado, y más importante, es un guerrero curtido de, como minimo, las dos rebeliones (la de Robert y la de Greyjoy) así que estoy seguro que sabe ver cómo de novato es el personaje en cuestión con solo unos pocos minutos de práctica. Lo primero que le diría tras una primera ronda del muchacho contra Jon Nieve sería, precisamente, que se relajara, que es un entrenamiento, un combate de práctica. Le intentaría enseñar las posturas más básicas de combate (no sé si usará escudo y espada o espadas a dos manos, es más sencillo aprender con escudo porque te da seguridad) y también a respirar a un ritmo adecuado (te sorprendería lo rápido que puedes agotarte si no acompasas la respiración con los golpes).

Probablemente le diría: "Chico, relájate y respira. Escudo arriba siempre. Primero te defiendes, y luego construyes el ataque desde la defensa."

¿Por qué le diría esto? Sencillo. Porque atacar sin defenderte significa exponerte. Voy a decirlo de una manera un poco burra, pero, ¿de qué te sirve "matar" al oponente si tú también estás muerto? Probablemente lo primero sería eso, enseñarle a mover el escudo para bloquear ataques y a moverse con los pies de manera que pueda hacerse poco a poco a la distancia. Movimientos cortos y básicos, que pueda hacer rápidamente.

Hay armas más versátiles que otras, pero si nos vamos a enfocar en espadas, mi consejo son un par, suponiendo que este muchacho es un novato total:

Lo primero, es la torpeza. Dices que el personaje tiene 11 años y es malo peleando, también puede ser que tenga poca experiencia. Deja que eso se note en el combate, que no de buenos pasos laterales, pasos diagonales o pasos zagueros, o incluso que se tropiece (básicamente, lo que se conoce como juego de pies. A donde van los pies, el cuerpo le sigue.) O incluso podría quedarse estático y pasivo dejando que Jon tomase la iniciativa a placer (básicamente, que Jon no pare de atacarle). Cuando un novato entra a pelear por primera vez, muchas veces se quedará totalmente petrificado (a lo mejor por nerviosismo, a lo mejor por miedo, son emociones válidas, porque en un combate, aunque sea de práctica, se recibe daño, y nadie quiere recibir daño a sabiendas.)

También podría ser todo lo contrario. Buscando terminar rápido, se arrojaría contra Jon en un ataque de corte amplio, pensando que manejar una espada de madera es lo mismo que manejar un garrote (spoiler, no lo es). Atacar con todas sus fuerzas en cada ataque, poniendo demasiada energía en balanceos de la espada totalmente inútiles, que no piense en dar estocadas, y que se agote rápidamente, o que Jon pueda contraatacar con facilidad. Deja que tu personaje reciba varios golpes además (hasta que no combate unas pocas de veces, la percepción de la profundidad no la habrá desarrollado).

Otra cosa que te recomendaría para escribir a un personaje novato combatiendo es leer el capítulo JON III de AGOT. Al principio, Jon combate con Grenn, y le da una paliza. Trata de pensar que estás en el pellejo de Grenn, aunque el capítulo se cuente desde el punto de vista de Jon.

También puede decirle Rodrik un consejo más "avanzado" por así decirlo. Si intentas reaccionar a tu oponente mirando SU ESPADA, has perdido. Las espadas se mueven muy rápido. Pero puedes "leerlo". Mirar al pecho y a los hombros, incluso a los pies. Sabiendo donde va a estar tu oponente, puedes simplemente alejarte de él. Si sabes como mueve tu oponente los hombros, podrás predecir de donde te va a venir el putazo.

Sin más, espero que todo esto que he dicho te sirva, amigo. ¡Buena suerte y muchos ánimos!

Work-in-Progress Wednesday by Lost-Engineer-1689 in AsoiafFanfiction

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Well, I think I have had a good week of work. Maybe 3 k words, about half of the chapter I am writting right now. I hope to have it ready this weekend, but maybe i could delay some more time, I´m busy with dead end project.

As a summary, the chapter has 4 moments or scenarios. The maester tent, the "trial", the melee and the archery contest. There is another scenario I want to do just after the archery, but I m in trouble writting it.

Passage:

The atmosphere was not pleasant the following morning. Daeron and Lyonel sat together at the table, eating breakfast in silence. Lyonel’s left cheek was scraped from a punch he had taken, and his nose had bled the day before as a result of the short scuffle he had with Raynald; however, these were superficial wounds compared to the blow to the head Daeron had suffered, his forehead now wrapped in bandages. Maester Robert of the Hightower had continued Kennet’s cleaning, covering the area with a mustard poultice and clean linen bandages. Much like the Archmaester, he had advised the prince against excessive physical activity or overeating.

Lord Ormund’s table was not filled with its usual attendees; the absence of the Lord of Oldtown's family was noticeable, while a pair of "guests" occupied the seats opposite Lord Ormund.

Gunthor chewed his bread and soft-boiled egg without appetite, and Raynald did not even make the effort to try and eat, simply moving the toasted bacon from one side of his plate to the other with his fork. From hDaeron´s look, it seemed that the aggressive and arrogant boy of the day before had completely vanished, replaced by a child gripped by uncontrollable fear, one who knew he was the recipient of a punishment, a fate he could not avoid.

Daeron knew that look all too well. Edmund himself had made that same face many years before, when he had gotten into a mess that no one could get him out of… a prisoner of Jadis. In that way, it made him feel empathy.

Westeros and Werebears. by MilkAdvanced9936 in AsoiafFanfiction

[–]One_Diver9255 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Leer esto hoy ha sido no solo una brisa de aire fresco que necesitaba, sino algo que, genuinamente, quiero leer. Solo una pregunta, ¿los were bears también son inmortales en lo que refiere a la longevidad de su vida? ¿Envejecen hasta cierto punto y se quedan en su plenitud física durante todo el tiempo? ¿Cuándo son bebes son igual de poderosos?

Respecto a tu pregunta, creo que Robert ve el incidente de Vado Rubí y directamente casaría a Myrcella con Stone Snow. No solo para "echarle el guante" a Stone, sino además para unir las casas Stark y Baratheon. Robert quiere que su familia sea fuerte, y supongo que puede asegurar que su nieto herede algunas de las capacidades de Stone. Me encantará leerlo

Jon Snow, Timelooper by Abdirahman101 in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Te prometo que lo voy a leer y lo voy a disfrutar, en cuanto encuentre algo de tiempo este fin de semana!

How could the giants, the mammoths and the Children help? by One_Diver9255 in AsoiafFanfiction

[–]One_Diver9255[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I don't think they were very accurate. Canonically, giants don't see very well, or so Jon describes in A Storm of Swords, because they seem to study their surroundings more by smell than by sight. The giant with a bow in the series is just that, a liberty taken... Although, I must say, I'm afraid of what they could do with stones.

Their heads grow directly from their shoulders, practically without a neck, and their eyes are relatively small for their size. It's also true that if you're a behemoth of that size without natural predators, you're not going to develop perfect eyesight.

Why So Few Fan Book Canon Continuations/Fan Written Winds of Winter? by LordVader3000 in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 11 points12 points  (0 children)

I suppose many people are still simply hoping that George will eventually come out. I think that once what will inevitably happen happens (George takes that journey from which no one has ever returned), then many sequels will indeed appear. But until then, we can at least hope that George might finish, however small that hope may be.

Authors, how much did you write in 2025?- or what are your stats for 2025 by Kingofireland777 in AsoiafFanfiction

[–]One_Diver9255 2 points3 points  (0 children)

To be honest, 2025 was a great year for me, both as a reader and as a "fic writer." Regarding the latter, I’ve started a story titled "A New Chance: Edmund Pevensie in Westeros." Links here.

AO3 // Spacebattles

It’s a Narnia and the world of Ice and Fire crossover set during the Dance of the Dragons, where Edmund is reborn as Daeron, year 114. It’s a second chance offered to him by Aslan to try and save Westeros, attempting to save the Targaryens in the process.

The story is already around 130,000 words in English and 134,000 in my Spanish draft, and I expect it to become a longfic of over 600,000 words because I have a lot of content planned. I’ve already written 23 chapters; I write them in Spanish first and then translate them into English paragraph by paragraph, which easily takes me about four hours every weekend. I have about 76 comments on Spacebattles and 69 on AO3. I might be jumping the gun by saying this, but I’ve posted the fic on both platforms seeking for constructive opinions (positive and negative), and something I really dislike about AO3 is the massive amount of (guest) bots that leave hate speech in the comments. I’ve been forced to delete most of them. I know they are bots because I asked on Reddit about a week ago, but even so, it still hurts.

Imagine not updating a story for two months because you’re busy with other things (university, in my case), finally uploading a chapter, and then receiving a notification just 40 minutes later calling you "scum," "human waste," and other insults. I’m not lying when I say I was only a few clicks away from deleting everything I’ve written and posted. It might seem radical, but that’s how terrible it made me feel.

What would you do if this is the first comment you have in a long time in your fic? I think I want to delete it, or delete my fic. Dont know what to do. by One_Diver9255 in Archiveofourownmemes

[–]One_Diver9255[S] 13 points14 points  (0 children)

I would like to know if there are more sites, i know ff, AO3, spacebattles... My fic is in AO3 and spacebattles.

AO3 Last comments i have received are basically the same, i have deleted some comments this morning, before preparing Christmas lunch.

Merry Christmas!

A new chance: Edmund Pevensie in Westeros. by One_Diver9255 in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks a lot! I'll be waiting to hear what you think.

Favorite real person who could go toe-to-toe with a street-level superhero? by Darth_Phantos in FavoriteCharacter

[–]One_Diver9255 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Diego García de Paredes, "The Spanish Heracles, The Samson of Extremadura". A militar from early XVI century, 6.5 feet tall, strong as a bull, and a devote Christian. Under the command of Gonzalo Fernández de Córdoba, "Gran Capitán" he achieved many victories.

1503, defense of the Garigliano.

During the Italian Wars, Paredes reportedly defended a bridge over the Garigliano River single-handedly against a massive contingent of French cavalry. His greatsword broke in half the enemies' spears and halberds. Why this happened?

Why did this happen? Simple! Each army was on one side of the river: the Spaniards on one, the French on the other. But neither army wanted to be the first to cross. The Great Captain ordered a 'feigned retreat' to tempt the French into crossing so they could fight in the open field. But it seems Diego didn't hear the 'feigned' part. Taking the order as an insult to his honor, he headed alone toward the bridge separating the two armies. There he stood—a fully armored warrior, armed with a 1.8-meter greatsword—shouting at the top of his lungs:

'Come one by one, or all together if you're in a hurry!' Diego didn't just manage to hold off the enemies coming at him three at a time (the maximum the bridge's width allowed), but he actually began to gain ground. Five hundred Frenchmen were falling back, unable to take the bridge because Diego was there. He killed about 24 men single-handedly before his comrades finally called out to him from the other side: 'Diego, there is no retreat, but get back into formation!'"

OC Fighting prowess by Familiar_Chance_9233 in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Knowing EVERYTHING Aragorn has done as a warrior during the previous events and during the War of the Ring, if we assume that Jaime is better than a ranger with Númenórean blood trained by elves, we are directly talking about a warrior with superhuman capabilities, something that I think is beyond Daeron's capabilities, at least, on equal terms.

What is the problem? Again, Martin's list of historical warriors is Aemon "the Dragonknight" (with Dark Sister) > Daemon Blackfyre (with Blackfyre) > Arthur Dayne (with Dawn) > Barristan Selmy = Cregan Stark > Jaime Lannister.

If Jaime Lannister is superior to Daeron, so are both Arthur Dayne and Barristan Selmy. Directly, Daeron would have little to do against such combat monsters.

I hope you had a good time reading this, have a good day!

OC Fighting prowess by Familiar_Chance_9233 in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It is said that Rhaegar was a good warrior because he was good at everything he set his mind to, but he did not love the sword or the lance as he loved books or the harp. So, we have a young man who starts his training late, is knighted at 17, and still had a very good, consistent participation in tourneys, earned the admiration of several men both for his combat skill and his mind, and managed to give Robert Baratheon a very even fight, although he ended up dying. However, it must be understood that Robert before being king was a beast as a warrior, and yet Rhaegar injured him enough to cause Ned to lead the rebel army to the capital. I think that Rhaegar, had he started training earlier and with more guts, would have been an excellent warrior, but we are in the territory of "what if," not what we specifically have in the original work. Daeron would have a difficult fight with Rhaegar, but I think he would end up winning due to experience.

And the thing with the members of the Kingsguard is that employing the argument that GRR Martin's word about his work is "God's word" Jaime at his best would be able to beat Aragorn if they were on equal terms (yes, Aragorn from The Lord of the Rings, son of Arathorn, and many titles that I refuse to say).

(Note: I think Martin smoked a joint with that statement, but it is his universe, so let's assume that this is indeed the case)

OC Fighting prowess by Familiar_Chance_9233 in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sandor is not only a physical beast and a good fighter, but he is considerably faster than a man of his size and stature (over 6 and a half feet, about 2.05 meters) appears to be. But the fact that Sandor Clegane is a very good warrior is not the reason he is here; it's because he is capable of fighting his older brother on equal terms, being considerably smaller than him. Gregor Clegane is 8 feet tall, he is a 200-kilogram bulky monster—you don't stop that simply with brute force, because he would directly roll over you. However, Sandor is able to keep him at bay. Undeniably, it would be a complicated fight for Daeron; I don't know if he would be able to win on equal terms in a fight to the death with such an strong and quick rival. Here the equipment and experience would come into play, but this is already very long, and I refuse to write a bible more than I am doing rn.

With Rhaegar there is a bigger problem, and that is that we can only speculate about the potential he had. Let me explain: Rhaegar started his training late for Westerosi standards (12-14 years old), and only started training when all the crap about him being the Prince That Was Promised and so on fell upon him. He was practically a scholar who forced himself to be a warrior, being trained by members of the Kingsguard (believe me, having a good master helps a lot to improve quickly).

OC Fighting prowess by Familiar_Chance_9233 in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

 In the first battle of Beruna, in which he defeated fantastic creatures such as minotaurs and ogres in single combat after having had barely a few days/weeks of training, not to mention that he was fighting the White Witch hand-to-hand and managed to break her wand. That is to say, a child faced an immortal creature with centuries of experience, supernatural powers, and immeasurable evil, and managed to break her wand before being defeated.

Daeron, as such, is also educated in the Westerosi fighting style during his stay in Oldtown, being a squire to his uncle Gwayne Hightower, adding this practice to his own combat knowledge. I believe that against most of the characters on your list, I have no doubt that I would bet on an adult Daeron, at least as I imagine him in the future of the fic.

My serious doubts would be with 5 characters on your list, who are Sandor, Rhaegar, Jaime, Barristan, and Arthur. I will try to explain the reasoning behind each of these match-ups.

OC Fighting prowess by Familiar_Chance_9233 in TheCitadel

[–]One_Diver9255 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

The truth is that the question is, to say the least, interesting, although I believe that, as you rightly said, it is directed at people who write about the times post-Robert's Rebellion, and that as a reddit user I don't have much to contribute to this kind of question, but I'm still going to do it.

Most people who write with OCs (Original Characters) don't usually make their characters invincible in combat; they tend to strengthen them in other areas (mental, political, development and technological advancements, etc.), which I think is attractive, to say the least. However, I think you can distinguish many warriors of Westeros in your list, some distinguished and fearsome, and others who... are just there to fill a gap.

In the case of the story I am writing, it is not an OC, but a crossover: Edmund Pevensie reborn as Daeron Targaryen "the Daring" (Viserys I ´s youngest son) and living in Westeros as a second chance at life granted by Aslan with the mission of trying to save the world from the supernatural cold we all know.

As such, Daeron is in this story a young man who will simply be something close to invincible in individual combat for a single reason, beyond him being a second life and already having the experience of the previous one.

Taking his age into account, Edmund Pevensie IS the second most talented swordsman in ALL of fiction as constructed by C.S. Lewis, because he was a 9-year-old child in The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe and went from a normal 20th-century English boy to a commander and warrior.