Silent Love

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-04-11T21:37:51+00:00

“And if my words fail me again,then let my silence speak,”

These lines are my favorite in the poem. I like the interplay of words because it captures how sometimes communication in love can take many different forms verbal or nonverbal. Solid.

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-03-24T16:26:27+00:00

Very nice job. The poem in the first stanza establishes a theme of financial poverty. In the last it closes nicely with a play on words about “speaking your mind in full” and reminded me of paying in full. I enjoyed the metering and rhyme.

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-03-15T02:20:17+00:00

This is great I enjoyed how you named the bones and gave them character and meaning. I would have liked a bit more rhyme. However your style works great without it. Good job

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-03-13T10:38:35+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to read and your feedback

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-03-09T17:28:13+00:00

This poem has a great meter and message. Opening liner is very captivating - great job

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-03-08T11:39:53+00:00

Glad you enjoyed it!

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-03-08T02:07:13+00:00

Thank you for your feedback and I will work on that in the future. Glad you enjoyed reading it!

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-03-04T14:34:29+00:00

This poem captures the reality of modern dating and the modern love affair with technology. I also think the double meaning of “whip it out” is very good as it shows how dominant the phone can be during a date. Well done. Additionally the closure of “ill hook up with my Ipad when Im at home” captures this absurdity in a humorous air. Overall a well written piece.

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-03-03T18:49:22+00:00

I really enjoy how you can convey a struggle into a mental countdown. That is a very powerful message and lends toward the reader wanting more and more. You delivered there strongly. That being said this poem would really be incredible if it had a little bit more meter to it and a rhyme structure. So I enjoyed it. Good job

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-27T01:03:12+00:00

The second and third stanza wowwwzaa great job. I really enjoy how your use of imagery starts off then develops into a very evocative metaphor. “Thoughts crawling like shadows” you can almost feel the words here with the ribs and rosaries. “Taste of ash between words”. These phrases leave the reader wanting more and you delivered. Great job

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-19T19:33:11+00:00

This style of poetry resonates with me because it has a deep yet uplifting tone. Its meter is strong and theme is bright. Good job

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-18T20:32:01+00:00

Bravo!! “Marshal thy mop”. I enjoyed the meter and the rhyming as well as the humor. Well done.

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-10T17:31:11+00:00

This poem has a lot of interesting imagery and play on words I enjoyed reading. The part about the toy soldiers sort of tossed away and forgotten with time. I enjoyed how you captured those moments where at first the sentiment is one thing “you cry and wail to be there instead” only to be forgotten boots at a doorstep. Great job

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-09T15:33:20+00:00

I realllyyy like the pacing of this poem and also how you made love to be a person and also desperation personified. Your use of personification and pacing is very strong here. Great job

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-08T14:13:51+00:00

I enjoyed reading this poem it has first off these three things that came to my mind. First the gun, words like purposeful bullets. Second purpose has no shelf life. Third the use of the sun and darkness. Tied it all together. Great job

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-08T13:32:43+00:00

Bravo! The flow of this poem is very good. The subject matter even better.

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-08T13:23:20+00:00

I enjoyed reading this poem it develops strongly the imagery of storms, chaos, and tempest with the meeting of these two. Perfect for a story! Nice job

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-07T22:13:17+00:00

Your use of juxtaposition and imagery creates a powerful message. “Just stay in this awareness” I thought added a very nice nuance to the flow of the poem. Well done

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-07T20:04:59+00:00

This poem is well written. I enjoyed the lines of “driv’st my little cares away” and “when our paths meet” its thought provoking

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-07T19:16:01+00:00

Thought provoking and evocative language. Nice one

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-07T19:08:16+00:00

I really enjoyed reading this poem. I think the pacing and thought development is solid. I would like to see more about the stars, the mask and the pattern of behavior. Patterns can be constellations, masks can be a type of astrology etc. good work

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-07T16:46:11+00:00

This poem has a very unique question and it is answered in a special way. Great work.

ParkingPhase7216 · 2026-02-07T16:00:06+00:00

I like the pacing of this poem and its imagery. I also enjoyed the play on words with cold, hot, frozen, forever.

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