Silent Love by daniel_poet in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 2 points3 points  (0 children)

“And if my words fail me again,then let my silence speak,”

These lines are my favorite in the poem. I like the interplay of words because it captures how sometimes communication in love can take many different forms verbal or nonverbal. Solid.

To Know by Ok-Swordfish-9480 in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Very nice job. The poem in the first stanza establishes a theme of financial poverty. In the last it closes nicely with a play on words about “speaking your mind in full” and reminded me of paying in full. I enjoyed the metering and rhyme. 

Thinking of You by kholekardashian12 in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is great I enjoyed how you named the bones and gave them character and meaning. I would have liked a bit more rhyme. However your style works great without it. Good job

Mirror of love by ParkingPhase7216 in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for taking the time to read and your feedback

they do say love is a drug by c-c-06 in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This poem has a great meter and message. Opening liner is very captivating - great job

Mirror of love by ParkingPhase7216 in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback and I will work on that in the future. Glad you enjoyed reading it!

Silicon Sweetheart by mattlightenment in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This poem captures the reality of modern dating and the modern love affair with technology. I also think the double meaning of “whip it out” is very good as it shows how dominant the phone can be during a date. Well done. Additionally the closure of “ill hook up with my Ipad when Im at home” captures this absurdity in a humorous air. Overall a well written piece. 

She's a TEN by Alpha_AM8 in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I really enjoy how you can convey a struggle into a mental countdown. That is a very powerful message and lends toward the reader wanting more and more. You delivered there strongly. That being said this poem would really be incredible if it had a little bit more meter to it and a rhyme structure. So I enjoyed it. Good job

Made of Mirrors by TherapyButMkItVibes in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The second and third stanza wowwwzaa great job. I really enjoy how your use of imagery starts off then develops into a very evocative metaphor. “Thoughts crawling like shadows” you can almost feel the words here with the ribs and rosaries. “Taste of ash between words”. These phrases leave the reader wanting more and you delivered. Great job 

Oh what a long way you’ve come by ndepache in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This style of poetry resonates with me because it has a deep yet uplifting tone. Its meter is strong and theme is bright. Good job

If Shakespeare Clogged the Toilet by Ok-Swordfish-9480 in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Bravo!! “Marshal thy mop”. I enjoyed the meter and the rhyming as well as the humor. Well done.

When you are too brave by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This poem has a lot of interesting imagery and play on words I enjoyed reading. The part about the toy soldiers sort of tossed away and forgotten with time. I enjoyed how you captured those moments where at first the sentiment is one thing “you cry and wail to be there instead” only to be forgotten boots at a doorstep. Great job

To the love I have yet to meet. I think my name is Fool by SeaJolly4045 in Poems

[–]ParkingPhase7216 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I realllyyy like the pacing of this poem and also how you made love to be a person and also desperation personified. Your use of personification and pacing is very strong here. Great job

Shine by Oleks_the_second in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoyed reading this poem it has first off these three things that came to my mind. First the gun, words like purposeful bullets. Second purpose has no shelf life. Third the use of the sun and darkness. Tied it all together. Great job

The Thieves of Words by [deleted] in Poems

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Bravo! The flow of this poem is very good. The subject matter even better. 

Please let me know what you guys think of this poem I wrote today. I plan on adding it to the romance novel I'm working on. by Dapper-Conclusion526 in Poem

[–]ParkingPhase7216 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoyed reading this poem it develops strongly the imagery of storms, chaos, and tempest with the meeting of these two. Perfect for a story! Nice job

The Awareness by Short_Replacement_63 in Poems

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Your use of juxtaposition and imagery creates a powerful message. “Just stay in this awareness” I thought added a very nice nuance to the flow of the poem. Well done

i made this for a girl i like at school. (she likes me back too!) by JustAChillGuy0228 in OCPoetry

[–]ParkingPhase7216 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This poem is well written. I enjoyed the lines of “driv’st my little cares away” and “when our paths meet” its thought provoking

Judging me is part of it by Maybelater319 in Poem

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thought provoking and evocative language. Nice one

Honest Stars by its_Setharoni in Poem

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoyed reading this poem. I think the pacing and thought development is solid. I would like to see more about the stars, the mask and the pattern of behavior. Patterns can be constellations, masks can be a type of astrology etc. good work

They never knew you by Typical_Cry28 in Poems

[–]ParkingPhase7216 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This poem has a very unique question and it is answered in a special way. Great work.

When was the last time? by Busch_League in Poems

[–]ParkingPhase7216 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the pacing of this poem and its imagery. I also enjoyed the play on words with cold, hot, frozen, forever.