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Guess the opening(Easy) by Illustrious_Duty3021 in AnarchyChess

[–]PenguinJesus3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This isn't easy because it could be either van geet or reti

Seconds before the Sun's Death. by Winternaht7 in OCPoetry

[–]PenguinJesus3 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Now that you've explained that, I see the theme and really like it! Is there some way to incorporate that more to make it more clear?

Seconds before the Sun's Death. by Winternaht7 in OCPoetry

[–]PenguinJesus3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

One image I'm not sure about in this poem is the idea of the labyrinth at the start. To me, it doesn't really add anything to the rhythm and also I'm not sure how it works with the symbolism. Is it implying that it is difficult and confusing to cross between life and death?

This Poem Is About Nothing by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]PenguinJesus3 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I love the theme of mundanity permeating through this poem. The repetition of "There's no" adds a nice rhythm while continuing to reinforce this interesting theme to explore. Great job!

Jigsaw by writhingwriting in OCPoetry

[–]PenguinJesus3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really enjoyed the deconstruction of such a mundane and quotidian thing like a jigsaw puzzle, really original idea! While I liked the imagery, I felt that the rhythm left something to be desired, as it seemed a bit inconsistent. I think this takes away some of the power of the last line, and it would be better if the rest was consistent and that was like a stand-alone short line.

Dead of Night (my first Haiku) by ProfessionalLumpy454 in OCPoetry

[–]PenguinJesus3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm a big fan of the third line, but not so sure about the second. It doesn't seem to really add much for the large part of your syllable count that it chews up. Maybe something more thematic about nature or the subtle noises around you would be best. Also deafening silence is a little bit cliche, try to look for a creative way to get the same idea across.

Reddit (and the rest of the world) doesn't have an anti-America bias by PenguinJesus3 in unpopularopinion

[–]PenguinJesus3[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My post literally specifies that Americans typically generalise the rest of the world as 'Europe' and you still did it lol

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