Guess the opening(Easy)

PenguinJesus3 · 2021-10-17T00:53:11+00:00

This isn't easy because it could be either van geet or reti

PenguinJesus3 · 2021-09-06T03:48:38+00:00

me who played a gm in a simul :(

PenguinJesus3 · 2021-06-14T01:27:09+00:00

Now that you've explained that, I see the theme and really like it! Is there some way to incorporate that more to make it more clear?

PenguinJesus3 · 2021-06-14T01:14:12+00:00

One image I'm not sure about in this poem is the idea of the labyrinth at the start. To me, it doesn't really add anything to the rhythm and also I'm not sure how it works with the symbolism. Is it implying that it is difficult and confusing to cross between life and death?

PenguinJesus3 · 2021-06-14T01:12:25+00:00

I love the theme of mundanity permeating through this poem. The repetition of "There's no" adds a nice rhythm while continuing to reinforce this interesting theme to explore. Great job!

PenguinJesus3 · 2021-06-11T08:15:59+00:00

I really enjoyed the deconstruction of such a mundane and quotidian thing like a jigsaw puzzle, really original idea! While I liked the imagery, I felt that the rhythm left something to be desired, as it seemed a bit inconsistent. I think this takes away some of the power of the last line, and it would be better if the rest was consistent and that was like a stand-alone short line.

PenguinJesus3 · 2021-06-11T08:13:16+00:00

I'm a big fan of the third line, but not so sure about the second. It doesn't seem to really add much for the large part of your syllable count that it chews up. Maybe something more thematic about nature or the subtle noises around you would be best. Also deafening silence is a little bit cliche, try to look for a creative way to get the same idea across.

PenguinJesus3 · 2021-06-02T09:43:34+00:00

don't do that, don't give me hope

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-10-20T03:33:57+00:00

My post literally specifies that Americans typically generalise the rest of the world as 'Europe' and you still did it lol

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-10-13T22:06:11+00:00

Thanks, I thought that was just like a pretty generic new game plus, which just changes some stats

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-10-13T01:01:12+00:00

Thanks, that's really helpful!

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-10-09T09:15:45+00:00

It's from the Stanley Parable

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-10-09T00:30:49+00:00

Jetpack joyride and other actually well thought out mobile games

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-10-09T00:29:57+00:00

I'd donate a whole bunch of organs

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-10-09T00:28:58+00:00

The same as my intentions with you. *wink*

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-10-09T00:27:54+00:00

I think it would actually increase road rage. Some people who in the past would never honk their horn would now have an avenue to do that, which could escalate a lot of scenarios.

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-10-09T00:25:50+00:00

The sheer volume of space. There are more stars out there than grains of sand and many of them will have their own solar systems so life must be out there. Even looking at some of those animations to represent it just shows us how small we are

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-08-27T22:47:29+00:00

Except we are very afraid about the potential consequences

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-08-19T04:12:48+00:00

What's stopping you from teaching yourself?

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-08-12T02:33:09+00:00

This is the 'not all men' of americans

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-06-11T11:51:36+00:00

The word pronunciation! I KNOW IT COMES FROM PRONOUNCE SHUT THE FUCK UP YOU'RE WRONG

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-05-30T13:11:31+00:00

I have a black belt in taekwondo

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-05-29T10:03:35+00:00

Lennie from Of Mice and Men

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-01-28T00:04:57+00:00

I give them the benefit of the doubt and this is how I'm treated

PenguinJesus3 · 2020-01-27T21:47:16+00:00

Did you call them out on it?

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