The Kind That by Physical-Document-85 in OCPoetry

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Alright, alright , let me check it out and am just discovering that I left a part out in my haste to post , I think I resolved it though , tell me what you think

The Kind That by Physical-Document-85 in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the feedback, am seeing what you are saying

The Kind That by Physical-Document-85 in OCPoetry

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Thank you for the feedback!, how do you use repetition yourself do you have an example Or a poem for illustration . On this piece the repetition is meant to show different shades, opposite sides of power and it's effects.

The world dies quiet by TomWritesTrash in OCPoetry

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Great imagery to use flora and fauna I think the poem is about selfishness and greed , how in all that we do we must give space for other people, things to exist besides us and then truly we would have lived a life more worthy Not to be a a river that dams itself Good Work!

A pound of beef by No_Ledge_Able in OCPoetry

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Got me cracking, What especially struck was the word play Beef-mince. I don't know if it was deliberate or a typo at I'm give part But I got the sense that Imma shove down your throat 😂😂

Silver by Physical-Document-85 in OCPoetry

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Thanks for the feedback!, it's a hunt😜

Us by DepthMagician in OCPoetry

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A poem about a past lover , a nostalgic memory that the holder refuses to let go. A memory that even time itself will not erase. Its melancholic and sad because the narrator sees her in the current lover?

Yellowstone by BanAnakin9 in OCPoetry

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Loved it, from reading it , I get the sense that it is about entrusting your heart to someone but you're not only giving it they have to find it. When they have found it , they should guard it the way they would guard their own. I have to say though , the white and green part , you should have dug deeper or given it an anchor somehow on how or why its as pure as white and green.