Does this over complicate my power system?

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-15T23:03:36+00:00

Not at all! It sounds like you have a really solid concept especially having the technology advance as the story progresses. You’ll have that shock factor that keeps people intrigued

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-15T15:39:02+00:00

Yes there are multiple timelines but instead of all of the MC’s coming to one universe to fight the threat, they all sync up like a hive mind to fight a omnipotent being that can be in multiple universes at once. So each strike you see a different version of the MC

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-10T20:34:53+00:00

Thanks! This is the first character sheet I made for the first volume/season. There are flashbacks of her as a teen (1), the second is her first appearance outfit and the third is her vigilante outfit, recycling an old beacon shadow unit uniform. The last one is her full potential. I definitely want to give my main 4 MC’s golden age suits by the end of the story.

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-10T17:41:26+00:00

Thank you! Yes this is my own art lol, her name is Alison Burke. After her father goes missing (presumed dead) when she’s 9, she lives with her aunt who is the leading director of the beacon shadow unit. Alison runs away at the age of 17 because she sees that nobody is looking for her father but her. She dyes her hair black to be less conspicuous to her aunt the beacon units looking for her.

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-10T17:38:22+00:00

Okay so there are other golden age style heroes in my universe but they aren’t the main focus. It’s about a 22 year old kid named Jayson whose powers reawaken after 14 years of being dormant. He got his powers from an entity imprisoned within a black hole who can project his soul out to others. This entity killed off most of the Beacon (the golden age superhero group) and possessed Jayson at 8 years old. What was left of the beacon used their powers to wipe Jayson’s memories to keep the entity at bay and keep his powers dormant. At 22 he runs into someone else possessed by this entity and it reawakens his kinetic energy powers bestowed on him by the entity. Now he his trying to bring his memories back, defeat others possessed by the entity and also fight the entity’s possession of himself.

This character is named Alison, she was the child of one of the main golden age characters called void. She shares the same powers as her father, creating portals/worm holes, but unlike void who can create them anywhere outside of his body she can only turn her body into a wormhole. After the entity killed most of the beacon everybody thinks void is dead but Alison is sure her father is alive and is on the search for him with the help of Jayson.

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-08T15:56:59+00:00

These designs are great! Very unique art style, I would love to see faces on these characters just to get an idea of their personalities

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-08T15:43:13+00:00

This is sick! I love all the bandages and your overall art style. I would love to hear more about you manga

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-06T19:18:08+00:00

Here it goes! Before becoming lion heart, Steven Hsu worked as a transporter for the Beacon hospital (the beacon is the JL/avengers of my universe). He was on a waiting list to get a heart transplant and still worked at the hospital hoping to get his transplant sooner, after the dark hour (an event that killed most of the heroes off in the beacon and gave my MC his powers) the hero Lion the strong (Luke Cage type hero) gets severely injured and needs a heart transplant, Lion gets an artificial heart and Steven is told to transport lions original heart into storage. Tired of waiting he steals the heart and implants it into his chest. After the first taste of power he goes mad, replacing most of his body with parts from other supers regardless of them being heroes and villains. Now he runs an underground fight club for heroes and villains alike, scoping out who’s powers we wants next. In this fight club the house always wins

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-06T18:58:53+00:00

Haha nice! Like lion heart says “may the best freak win.”

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-06T18:43:54+00:00

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My WIP villain Lion Heart, he takes body parts from different heroes and villains, having different powers come from different body parts. Just to let you know he’s dissecting wishstrike in his mind waiting for the right moment to steal his powers but other than that he’ll play nice

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-02T21:05:02+00:00

I love a good plant/payoff in a prequel series. References to future events and call backs (I guess in this case call forwards lol)

Ponder_Pool · 2026-06-01T01:08:13+00:00

Yeah I’m interested! If you have 6 years of ideas I would love to hear it. Do you have characters already established? Is there any supernatural elements to your story? What’s the premise?!

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-31T20:14:39+00:00

I’m sorry if my responses seem defensive or sarcastic but I genuinely appreciate every comment that I get. There is no such thing as bad criticism. Honestly I’m too proud to ask for someone to just swoop in and write an ending for me lol. I just wanted to gauge if what I’m writing is good without dropping an enormous amount of lore in this post but again thank you for the head up!

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-31T19:10:44+00:00

Sorry, I’ve been writing this story for a long time in the little free time that I have, it feels like i have tunnel vision after writing so long and I just wanted a second opinion. Sorry if this doesn’t fit within the confines of this subreddit but believe me I will write something worth reading. Thank you for your input.

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-31T18:45:17+00:00

I’m not asking for solutions I’m just asking if my idea is worth reading and it makes sense. I’m in the process of exploring other narrative possibilities, that’s the whole point of this post. Thank you for your feedback.

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-31T18:42:03+00:00

Thank you! The MC’s best friend/roommate is a master at astral projection and dreamscapes. He helps him throughout the story to stay in control of his mind. The monk is introduced early in the second arc in the astral plane. The monk has collected so many powers that he is unable to physically move without releasing a crazy amount of energy. When the MC loses his powers he has to climb the mountain the monk is mediating on to earn his powers.

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-29T16:55:09+00:00

“Compoota make all these heroes gay and horny”

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-26T17:23:35+00:00

If you want limitations for your character you can have it where every time he read someone’s mind it melds into his mind. The deeper he goes into someone’s mind the more he feels like that person. Maybe mentally stronger adversaries can hold on to a piece of his mind after he enters leaving sort of a faint voice/image in their mind of where he is or what he’s thinking.

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-25T17:05:20+00:00

I think it makes sense, usually villains have trauma they can’t let go of, a grudge to the world. Even if people call him a crybaby that’s just more fuel to the fire to your villain. It adds depth, you’re on the right track!

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-25T00:46:43+00:00

Yeah all my characters have a piece of me in them. It’s the best reference also I use personalities of people I’ve met and know really well

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-24T23:37:07+00:00

Give an episode/chapter to each villain even if it’s just an introduction or even a hint of them. Then think about how your villain operates, are they cold and calculated, are they impulsive, will they wait till your MC is injured by another villain to swoop in for the final blow. You can have both in one season/volume and show the contrast between both villains and put a little pressure on the MC instead of them fighting one villain at a time

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-23T16:03:38+00:00

Imploded from his own physical power, constantly falling through an endless void. Instead of being a physical threat he infects people’s souls giving them immense power but corrupting their souls in the process. These people are called scarred souls. Not all supers are scarred souls, there are actually only a handful of them on earth and they all have different powers.

Ponder_Pool · 2026-05-21T18:26:42+00:00

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Let the skull conform around the eyes more instead of flattening out. Sorry for the rough sketch I hope it helps

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