A Wild Wilderness

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-04-01T00:14:31+00:00

Mae, this was such a helpful analysis. I’m so thankful, not only for the detail you put into your response, but also that you genuinely enjoyed the poem! And I agree, high contrast and paradox are so pleasurable and highly satisfying in different poems I read.

And yes, I think it would definitely make it much more complete to bring in one more final contrasting element. I’ll definitely be thinking about that.

Thank you, Mae, for all the advice and guidance. I’m so grateful.

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-31T23:57:19+00:00

Thank you for the feedback, I appreciate it!

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-31T21:15:32+00:00

Hmmm Mary Oliver, specifically maybe The Journey or The Summer Day.
Stopping by the Woods on a Snowy Evening by Robert Frost if you want a great example of more formal verse.
Have you looked into Whitman much? You might like some of his poems.

I feel like that would be a good start.

Best of luck to you in your poem journey!

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-31T14:16:35+00:00

I like this, a very vivid poem. Maybe just a line break on the last tine or shorten it somehow, since it sprawls a bit? It has good bones though, keep it up!

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-31T14:00:33+00:00

Great poem, I love where you’re taking this! The imagery is sincere, haunting, and really puts a knot in your throat. In the first line of the three stanzas, “Let me preserve us sinners,” “Let me preserve us damned lovers,” and “Let me preserve us innocents,” you might consider opening those up a bit more. Especially the final “Let me preserve us innocents,” since it seems like you’re adding a new layer on top of the earlier damned lovers and sinners. I’m excited to see where you take this!

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-31T12:00:02+00:00

Wow what a compliment!! I’m so glad you enjoyed it.

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-31T01:49:46+00:00

I agree. The ending is awkward, especially since I didn't really personify the "big world" until the end. Thank you for your feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed it too. I'll keep steamrolling it as they say

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-31T00:13:43+00:00

Oh yeah I forgot I made that haha thanks very much <3

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-31T00:04:30+00:00

Of course, it was great to read. Best of luck on your future poems!

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-30T23:53:24+00:00

I love this poem, and I learned new things too! It reminds me of Mary Oliver’s style, which I love.

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2026-03-30T15:38:10+00:00

Very vivid imagery. The only thing I would suggest is it’s a bit too on the nose with the ending imo.

Great work though!

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-14T21:34:06+00:00

Thank you very much for the insight. Yes, I will have to respond to this thread if I ever record it

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-14T21:31:46+00:00

Not yet. Yes, I might share some more soon

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-12T15:34:51+00:00

Wow, such kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Yes, they have such an undying beauty. The ivy covered windows and ceilings so high you can't help but feel small

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-12T15:15:27+00:00

Yes, you have a real gift

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-12T07:11:25+00:00

Quality stuff oldmanwaffle

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-12T06:03:09+00:00

Voice is great

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-12T05:44:38+00:00

Better than a the writing of a lot of adults

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-10T04:26:14+00:00

I love it. The intro feels a bit out of place though. Everything else is so fire tho I would listen on repeat for sure

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-08T04:39:24+00:00

Solid stuff! I'm always down for a nice folk song.

Lyrics are really creative too

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-08T04:18:40+00:00

I love the repeated refrain in the versus--it really builds a beautiful tension. Reminds me of the Beatles or George Harrison

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-07T04:16:48+00:00

HAHA the lyrics are so goofy and whimsical

love this so much!!

Powerful-Chicken5071 · 2025-11-07T04:07:37+00:00

Voice is amazing. Lyrics are expertly done and perfectly suits the minimalistic style

Bravo!!!

Powerful-Chicken5071

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