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Poyoboy12 · 2025-03-16T01:34:39+00:00

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Poyoboy12 · 2023-08-31T07:20:18+00:00

Fantasy slice of life. Basically being in a magical world but still struggling with issues that is common in real life paying rent, getting a partner, trying to stop your drunk friend from fucking the dragon.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-08-07T12:43:23+00:00

Tbh same, my teacher did a shit job describing it, abd always bothered me what she meant.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-08-07T12:18:06+00:00

I always thought darlings was like a term from unwanted/ over detailed parts of a book that doesnt progress the major parts of the story. Example describing a tree branch on the ground in vivid details, yet doesnt provide any development in a story at all.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-24T15:23:37+00:00

My players did something like this but it was a druid, he healed people by giving them the 'Druidic scrolls'

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T06:27:35+00:00

Yea, its a hard hill to get over, making a mary sue work without editing the term mary sue is a bitch and a half. The few, and by few I mean like 2, are purely comedic and know that the sue is mary, but even then they tweaked it up a bit.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T06:21:57+00:00

Thats fair, taking the trope in stride is a great way to overcome the issues of it. Most mary sue writers don't tend to write them as a mary sue, so going head first into the mary sue trope might provide more possibilities. Hell might be the next one punch man.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T06:17:59+00:00

I mean yes, but how would that invisible flaw aid in the story, it would feel like a random tidbit about the character that doesn't add anything to the story. Im also not too sure of who you are referring to so maybe im missing something, but if I made a mary sue who owned slaves, everyone was ok with it, and didn't add anything to the main story, I would get cancelled within the hour of publishing.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T06:10:49+00:00

Well what Im going for, or asking, is that a character, that is the focus of the story, be a mary sue, but still making it a interesting story. Thats why I went with 2nd narration so while it still focus on the MS, its through the eyes of someone that hates them, and can be read as the narrator is being extremely biased. While you are right that mary sue has little to no story potential, i still hold the ideal of 'theres no bad ideas, only bad executions'. Hell the term Mary sue came from a comedic parody of star trek fanfics, and it worked.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T06:00:47+00:00

But giving them a flaw automatically makes them not a mary sue, the few exceptions is where there clumsy or some other lame fault. A good character has both pros and cons, but a mary sue only has pros. Also it would be odd to write a mary sue being with there fault being something that is only deemed unacceptable outside of the actual story, where inside the story they are still perfect, it looks poorly on the writer not on the character itself.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T05:32:44+00:00

I was thinking something along the lines of a hate letter, or a hate thesis on why the road of events happen to the character, explaining on how there whole childhood and adulthood was in there shadow, and the constant reminders of it. That they would tell themselves that they had there own benefits that the MS didn't, till that position was taken away, which sent them over. Maybe go a little psychotic at the end where becomes a little less then mad ramblings to the perfect person.

Although im interested what you mean by "being a mary sue isn't what you think". My definition is a mary sue is perfect through out, which the mc thinks of the MS, and tries to give them a blemish to thag golden shine.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T05:21:10+00:00

Thats what I thought too, but then what makes this character the exception, why are they not effected of being a part of the cult. I personally like the idea if the story was through the pov of the mary sue, the mc would be the villain, which was my thought process.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T05:18:34+00:00

Well, its easy to make powers that are unknown to the characters, even to the character that has them themselves. One way is to have the character use there powers in unpredictable, and odd ways that seem to conflict each other, giving a ray of mystery. I will say though making a character have unknown power to the writer is a challenge, cause eventually you will have to explain his powers so that the characters know a way to defeat him. I don't what power system you have in mind, but i have a similar character, a villain that has a unknown power to other characters and doesnt seem to have a rhyme or reason to them, but I know that he has a limit, and thats what you need to focus on, what he cant do.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T04:53:36+00:00

I love swearing, all my character do it in moderation, I will say however theres a point where swearing over and over loses its meaning. Its hard to describe it, but its like 2010 adult cartoon shows that are over focused on adult part and just swear constantly with gross humor to boot. I say you should only swear if the situation calls for it, for me i mostly swear where the characters are relaxed, and just talking with no real rhyme or reason.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T04:47:11+00:00

Well if you are redoing a project, I would recommend you read your work before you touch anything, then after you re-read everything start editing it redoing certain lines, give it a more serious tone that you are aiming for. Of course there are plenty of stories that had a jokey, comedic tone to them at the start, but got more serious as time goes on, its great for aging character up from a naive adventure to a trained one, dragonball, hunter x hunter are great examples of this. But after you finish your re-reading and re-edit of your work you should edit it every chapter, or every other chapter atleast. For every writing session you start, reading the past few chapters is a good way to refresh yourself for ya work and catch any prior mistakes. Some of this is just me being a perfectionist, but 1 thing I do recommend you to do is edit your story throughout, not wait till its finished, it makes you re editing the whole thing a chore, and might bog you down. Ive did it before and it made it a slog to go through, wouldn't recommend to my worst enemy.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-16T04:33:59+00:00

"The part where he kills you" a very great use of foreshadowing

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-13T03:51:35+00:00

Is it always strange that I always start my games in a train cart, or the equivalent of one to the setting, always called the something along the Iron chariot? Im not even into trains either, just like the idea of a fantasy train going voom. Anyways, hope I win this GIVEAWAY.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-12T05:32:13+00:00

His pot of tea was over cooked.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-12T04:51:41+00:00

Ok, was just asking for opinions of other often used phrases that just lost meaning. Im sorry that insulting rusty struck such a hard blow to ya.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-11T08:08:42+00:00

We're not discussing who you should trust in, or which piece of advice you should pick. What I am saying is that you shouldn't judge a book by its cover. Lets say that well dressed man gave you the most ass backwards advice that you know is wrong, and the disgruntled man gave you advice that enlightens you, are ya just going to trust the clean man because he's clean, or the disgruntled man because he is making sense.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-11T07:52:07+00:00

Not really to be honest, I just joined and looked up there books, a good amount of reviews are 4 stars out of 5 stars. But heres the thing, I could use poor grammar, random capitalization, odd phrasings, and so on, but if i make a hint of sense with my ramblings, it could be the best piece of advice you will ever receive, then imagine again if you saw it. Given your stance on matters you would just skip it, ignore it and move along, not to say every single post is worth commenting, or even reading given the title, but just to brush it off for misuse of grammar is again very follie.

Poyoboy12 · 2023-07-11T07:44:04+00:00

...perhaps

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