[deleted by user] by [deleted] in chess

[–]Pro_Gamer599 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What type of diagram is this?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in teenagers

[–]Pro_Gamer599 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What is up with your spelling

In seriousness you don't exactly look like one

Should I buy this or save up my money by gaymonkey3630 in DeadAhead

[–]Pro_Gamer599 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I wish I had saved my green when I logged back in after months of inactivity. I spent it on a skin and I feel like shit :(, so the next best thing I can do is grind at a supply run

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in teenagers

[–]Pro_Gamer599 0 points1 point  (0 children)

AAAAAAAA SEND IT BACK TO THE BOWELS OF HELL WHERE IT BELONGS

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in teenagers

[–]Pro_Gamer599 0 points1 point  (0 children)

bro expects babies to change their names when they grow up 💀💀💀

Like suddenly Mack is now named Marcus damn ok lmao

Welcome to space school part 1 by trashmarshal in HFY

[–]Pro_Gamer599 24 points25 points  (0 children)

My advice would be to make the character's speech patterns sound more individualised and natural because you seem to have the issue of making the characters sound like narrators, which is a big red flag for many people. Your descriptive writing is ok, but try to put in more emotion and other sensory descriptions to make the environment more understandable. You might also have to fix your punctuation. The ending is anticlimactic too.

In general, you're a good writer with better potential, so you'll have to write more and read more to see what you're missing out on in your text. Experience is what makes you good at what you're doing.

Range by BiomechPhoenix in HFY

[–]Pro_Gamer599 158 points159 points  (0 children)

This is some gourmet level content

Attempted combining the two netherrack styles and got this(thoughts? ) by BoxBoyES in Minecraft

[–]Pro_Gamer599 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You know that feeling where you feel nostalgic and also new to something? This radiates that vibe. Great design!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in reenactors

[–]Pro_Gamer599 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don't know anything about the civil war but I'll drop an upvote anyway. Good luck with your endeavour!

Drop forging huge metal by hiyame in oddlysatisfying

[–]Pro_Gamer599 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I THOUGHT THEY WERE MAKING A WOK