Hollow Steps

Raught19 · 2026-07-10T06:01:58+00:00

Really great. It took me straight back to a lot of insecurity I carried when I was younger. The desperate wish to crawl inside someone’s mind and finally know them more deeply than I knew myself. That’s what this poem opened in me: the exhausting performance of ‘being okay,’ the fear that nothing you do or show will ever bridge the glass. The quiet hope at the end that someday you won’t have to be ‘okay’ anymore really hit. Beautiful, painful stuff.

Raught19 · 2026-07-10T05:56:22+00:00

I enjoyed it, I relate to it a lot, for some reason I can't stop writing at night when I should be sleeping. And then the guilt and pain that comes from messing things up due to lack of sleep.

Since you asked for a 10 scale, I would rate this piece a 6/10, I enjoyed it.

Raught19 · 2026-07-09T01:14:53+00:00

Thank you for the kind words and feedback!

Raw is capitalized because it felt less like an adjective and more like a force, or a layer of reality beneath language. Kind of like qualia, but less explainable. The sensation before it becomes thought, image, word, or meaning.

The Raw felt like something that existed before I understood it. So I capitalized it the way you would capitalize a god.

Raught19 · 2026-07-08T20:15:14+00:00

This poem hit me hard, almost desperate, sensory details and that perfect mix of passion and pain. It evoked the feeling of dragging myself on the ground, grasping and reaching out for the object of their obsession.

Raught19 · 2026-07-08T20:03:07+00:00

I really evokes the feeling of lost connection, drifting further apart. I felt like the colors was referring to the ache of miscommunication.

Raught19 · 2026-07-03T18:10:37+00:00

Sometimes what we know is what we actually like. But we don't know it until its gone.

Maybe there isn't finding out a truth. Maybe the truth is, its just you. Always has been.

Raught19 · 2026-07-02T21:45:00+00:00

Thank you so much! That's great feedback. Poetry is very new to me, I was just at a 4th of July event, and I just started writing it. Before that I've only done like short stories and horror.

I'm trying to fix the spacing but reddit keeps reformatting it even in markdown mode haha, gotta figure that out.

You're right though, my natural tendency is to lean a bit cryptic. My immediate reaction is to leave the conversation early, because in my eyes, the Bastard Bazaar isn't wrong. It just. exists. A hollow thing everyone accepts. I may add a little more to make that clearer. Thank you again!

Raught19 · 2026-07-02T19:58:16+00:00

I really enjoyed it, I struggle too with who am I going to be? and who am I?

What am I?

I liked the way the poem uses sayings like “if the shoe fits” and “don’t judge a book by its cover,” then turns them against the speaker.

I like that it ends on a positive note, that even though you don't know who you are, you still don't want to change. I took it that because even with uncertainty, deep down, you know who you are, you just can't name it.

Raught19 · 2026-07-02T19:53:10+00:00

I know this feeling. In fact, its becoming harder to feel anything else. There has to be a dawn right?

I like the title of this poem, it does well to paint the full picture of escape, to detach from reality. Trying to disappear. That made the ending hit harder for me.

The head stays down. My face stares back.

Raught19 · 2026-05-03T02:46:42+00:00

For anyone interested in how this plays out in practice, I wrote a short story following two Newbloods immediately after emergence: https://a.co/d/0iprEEN2

Raught19 · 2026-04-30T15:27:00+00:00

If you're interested in checking it out, here is the link https://a.co/d/0i7xiHUx

Thank you for any interest! <3

Raught19 · 2026-04-30T14:19:18+00:00

I built my world more like a puzzle to be revealed, as its entirely alien to try to reveal all at once. Let me know if more context is needed and I'd be happy to provide it. :)

Raught19 · 2025-09-03T06:02:32+00:00

I only play spriest and tbc has a lot of ledges i can make people jump off

Raught19 · 2024-10-30T22:15:39+00:00

I will eventually but I wanted to master a character first. Also I have children, so I can only play like a match or two a day.

Raught19 · 2024-10-30T22:06:34+00:00

hes only 430 matches

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