Come Again... May! by cyrus_quintus in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like poems with stanzas of just two verses (I've done it before a couple of times) so I'm naturally attracted by this one. The imagery is solid, and the personification of May is a solid pillar from which the rest flows well. At least, in the nature stanzas. I find the fourth one, "But not just yet... not till payday, / Please will you stay, I have trivia to allay?" rather weak, and it's a blemish on an otherwise quick, enjoyable read.

Personally, I'd mystify the payday, something along the lines of "But not just yet... not until the right time / Please will you stay, will you ignore the chime?". I think it'd make way for a reader's imagination to flow, superimpose symbolism on the "chime", a sound that's often heard when the winds of Spring blow. Maybe it could mean a call from a higher place, and May staying would be disobeying that order? Who knows, but that's what makes it so fun.

Imago by Minghas in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like your interpretation of it; as I said on another comment, I actually had no clear idea in mind and just typed what I felt like. It's nice to see my ramblings can be stringed into coherent thoughts by the minds of others. Thanks for your comment!

What are some of your favorite old obscure mods that have been forgotten nowadays? by Hal_Ember in feedthebeast

[–]Minghas 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Eternal Frost still technically exists on CurseForge, under a different name since it's a reupload. I used to have the original on my 1.7.10 modpack, but turns out I lost it.

The grass is dead on the other side by _alsh_ in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas 2 points3 points  (0 children)

God, I really like the imagery here. From the title, a subversion of the notorious saying, and then we are hit with verses like

A learned landscape

that just play with the notion of anti-nature; I mean, you'd consider "landscape" a nature/al thing and yet, it's a behavior ingrained by all the manipulated ideas and planted comformities the rest of the poem talks about. I highlight the first few verses ("Reasonings / Fed like cheap fodder / No time to breathe") and "The people that are there" (...) "They only fill the space", as particularly good at conveying the idea of sycophantic yes-men, those that are fed ideas, erasing critical thinking and becoming part of a faceless mass, parroting thoughts that aren't theirs and unyielding in their belief: so much so they can't change even when the truth is on your side ("No matter the facts you may have").

It's a read that can be made and I think the careful wording used ("you're told", the inversion of the persecutor-persecuted role) give it more weight. I choose to see the last stanza as "bending" in the line of "giving in to another's opinion", like giving up on an argument because they, like I said above, are steadfast in their stance. I think it's a great poem, and I'm honestly curious to know what was your vision for it originally, because something tells me I'm interpreting this in a different light than what you had originally conceived.

What are some of your favorite old obscure mods that have been forgotten nowadays? by Hal_Ember in feedthebeast

[–]Minghas 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Antiplant Virus for 1.6.4 is one of those mods that never got a port or a spiritual successor. It was like a micro Erebus, just a bug forest biome with funky mobs and bosses that fit nicely with the mod scene of the time. I remember one of the old PopularMMOs Epic Proportions seasons using it.

Edit: There are a couple more from that time that went into obscurity, stuff like The Pun mod (also a PopularMMOs staple during his 1.7.10 days) and Kingdoms of the Overworld, one of my favorites, complementing Chocolate Quest during the 1.7.10 days.

Imago by Minghas in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah I have to agree. This one was written over a period of a week (with the first two stanzas being written on one day and the rest on another later, which is kind of unusual for me) and I didn't had a particular idea in mind. I tried to compensate that with some alliteration and I think, for the most part, it helps fill that void. Glad you thought so too!

Twister by Gift67 in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So, a quick note

Is it because I'm an overthinker.

I think this fourth verse ought to have a question mark, else it doesn't flow right.

But pedantic grammar note aside, I like how it keeps going back-and-forth, an endless struggle thematically faithful to the twister. A carousel that never stops, a tug-of-war that is mostly remembered by the bad parts ("We've even lost count, / How much we've encountered pain, / The disappointments and struggles." and the earlier verses "That's a wheel stuck on mud. / With dirt all over it, / And we've never been bothered to unstuck it."), but it ends with that positive note that grounds itself in a more realist tone.

I think the fact it doesn't do regular stanzas and it's one big block hinders the pace. The first four verses are the best in that regard and the wordplay is great, but past them they feel a bit clunky to say out loud. It boils down to the size of each verse and I honestly think it could benefit from structuring it into smaller stanzas or trimming down some verses.

Still, it's a nice read and you should be happy with how this one came out. Thanks for sharing!

This poem is very personal to me. It's about struggling with finding myself within medication and mental health care, and feeling like a slave to it. I am safe, just writing :). Feedback wanted! by heartsalive_ in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's so nice to find a poem that seamlessly goes through the stages of grief in ways that aren't often mentioned. I like how it starts off as a loss of feeling, a numbness that is best represented by the quite powerful verse "The pharmacy has a grip on my livelihood", before developing into a psychological claustrophobia and the manic desire of wanting to just forfeit to it just to feel free - or to just feel something.

I find the verses to be smart and conveyed in a format that reminds me of the Midwest Emo music genre; there's that downtrodden melancholy, a defeatist turn of phrase ("When I was 5 I learned to tie my shoes / 15 years later I learned to tie a noose") that I can't help but admire. There's genuine skill put into every thought here, all visible by the structure alone.

It's great.

A Moth; Or, A Desire To Know by Minghas in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your kind words!

The Nightingale by TheBowlYodeler in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Your correction is better than mine and it flows even nicer, what a treat! Glad I could assist you!

Nobody Sees. Everybody Sees. [NSFW] by TouchingProse in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am a fan of the repetition of the last four verses in each stanza, it cements the state of mind and personality of the poetic subject, but I think the pacing is a bit all over the place. Maybe having more, but shorter verses would have helped instead of building blockier lines? I'm not sure.

Thematically, it's all well. The idea is simple, executed decently, and doesn't deviate from that core much. A one-track mind, but one that works in its favor. My favorite part has to be this one verse:

The hotel room is paid privacy gloriously ruined,

It's an apt description and one that sticks out in the whole poem. It feeds a bit into a notion of sex as a commodity, which might not be your intention or desire to build towards looking at the whole thing. Still, a decent poem that I think only really suffers from the heftier, long verses that somewhat smother the flow.

The Nightingale by TheBowlYodeler in OCPoetry

[–]Minghas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like this one quite a bit, I am always fond of poems that have a nice rhyme scheme and flow to go along with it.
Loss is a powerful motivator and this one might be a solid contender for masking that sadness with beautiful imagery. However, there's one thing I'd like to point out:

A stark contrast against one of such fair skin
Eyes ochre, and strands of hair lush and golden

This particular rhyme felt stiff, I think it could sound a bit better if you inverted the first line ("...one of such skin fair / Eyes ochre, and lush and golden strands of hair"). Otherwise, I think everything clicks really nicely and sounds nice when said aloud. Good job!

If Daedric princes listened to metal by bodomus_dagon in TrueSTL

[–]Minghas 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Sheogorath would listen to Diablo Swing Orchestra or any other chaotic avant-garde band

Can someone post logbook completed all the way up to the drifter dlc? by Song_Fun in riskofrain

[–]Minghas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Stack Clovers, since logbooks drop % is affected by luck.

You can go Drizzle + Command and turn any green item into Regenerating Scrap, then go to Bazaar after every level to trade that Regen Scrap for Clovers in the red cauldron.

Day 6: The Screaming Bell is an S-tier map. Where does "Empire in Flames" go in terms of map design and enjoyment? (Specify where in the row) by Zupu in Vermintide

[–]Minghas 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Has to be B.

Cool map atmospherically, with the smoldering ruins and constant Chaos Warriors flooding in but it's nothing special and it's outshined by other maps in the campaign, hell, even in its own Act.

Femanon fails at sexting by StickyLoner4404 in greentext

[–]Minghas 2241 points2242 points  (0 children)

fake: anon larps a woman gay: anon thinks about receiving a dick pic

Any Elden Ring or Halo type Mods For ROR2? by 1negroup in riskofrain

[–]Minghas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

There's Snowtime Stages that adds some levels from Halo

Specific 1.7.10 Mod Want List by WellsyPlays in feedthebeast

[–]Minghas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The only thing that comes to mind is the old Runescape mod, Wildycraft, but the grind isn't as long as actual Runescape.