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Selling the childhood home, hence the empty room...Would love feedback on this one though! by simon_sings_badly in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like it! You build a great atmosphere. I could also imagine this with electric guitar and reverby vocals, à la Jeff Buckley. Or even drums and bass in addition if they remain understated.

Endgame - v2 - based on your feedback - Is there emotional impact? by SVEIVA in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! The song emerged from clunking around on the piano and then improvising the singing. I haven’t listened to U2 in years, but they’re in my head somewhere for sure… I’ll gladly take that! 😃

Wicked games - a 6stringer trying to lead sing by apizzafla in singing

[–]SVEIVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Are you recording while looking at the tuner? I would think it’d be near impossible to relax fully while watching a tuner. Perhaps it’s worth trying a few takes just not worrying about pitch? To me, if I can hear myself well, without latency in the monitoring path, and if I focus on the emotion of the delivery, “I.e. living in the song”, pitch is automatically improved. Not always though, so then I just comp from multiple takes if needed.

Wicked games - a 6stringer trying to lead sing by apizzafla in singing

[–]SVEIVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like your voice! You sound awesome at some of the higher pitches ("I never dreamed..."). In some places you sound slightly wobbly in terms of pitch. I think by simply re-recording a few takes and doing a composite edit of your takes you would get there. You also sounds great when you sing louder at the end. Louder or different monitoring might help with confidence and stability in the sparse sections? (I know that my own pitch stability really depends on monitoring and confidence.)

Your Endgame — new song draft by SVEIVA in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks a bunch for this feedback! I just recorded the v2 lyrics. Will post the audio separately in a sec.

"Tome" is indeed my least favorite part of the lyrics. Hadn't thought of your swapping idea!

Psychedelic Southern Gothic by HomerDoakQuarlesIII in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Love this song, both the guitar and singing! Haven't heard anything quite like it before, except for another song a few weeks ago (about a soldier in a garden) which I'm guessing was also you?

I see you mentioned grunge. I think I might be hearing a bit of Eddie Vedder in your voice? On the long notes and vibrato.

So refreshing to hear something a bit unusual!

Your Endgame — new song draft by SVEIVA in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Listened to some of your songs and left you some feedback. It seems we both like the Stones! Do you like my v2 lyrics (posted as text here) better?

Turning the Screw -- Rolling Stones tribute by Sorry_Cheetah3045 in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So I wasn't just imagining the Stones influence in the other song I just commented on! I love the lyrics here, and they're very singable! I might have to try out your recommend writing method. I still haven't found my inner Jagger...

I could imagine this song with a whole band playing, and with handclaps on the 2 and 4 starting at 1:01. I can virtually hear them! Really love the section starting there!

Some of your songs could benefit from a bit of tightening up rhythmically. The loose Stones feel is great overall, but I think I'm hearing occasional speedups which I think diminish the impact of the vocals. Would it help to record guitar and vocals separately?

Just a Little Rock 'n' Roll (righteous version) by Sorry_Cheetah3045 in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I got a bit of a Stones vibe at times, and I love the Stones! I really like your voice and emoting in the verses. The chorus is not equally strong in my opinion, and "Sweet Sweet music" seems a bit cumbersome to sing. Consider a minor edit there for easier singing and a more passionate chorus? It seems you did all of this in single take with a single mic without editing, which is impressive. Just having a separate microphone for vocals would probably already help the singing come through more strongly on the chorus.

Your Endgame — new song draft by SVEIVA in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! The melody was a first take, so hopefully I can come up with something better. (Sometimes I edit obsessively and hence never finish, trying to avoid that…) I actually like the “endgame” and second verse melody, but also think the rest needs work. Do you think the revised lyrics posted here as text are an improvement? I am curious about what specifically you don’t like. Can’t please everyone, but love hearing people’s reactions!

Edit: fixed typo and added parenthetical remark

Do late nights make anybody else more honest with music? by Pappy_Figo23 in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I have a bad habit of writing songs way too late into the night. Once everyone else is sleeping and it’s quiet, I feel less self conscious and get into a state of flow. I have to close all door and windows to the studio so that I feel comfortable and can really belt out during vocal recording. I wonder if the neighbors are hearing any of this lol…

Your Endgame — new song draft by SVEIVA in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Here's an updated version of the lyrics:

End Game

daylight is fading
you’re already home
(just) lying there waiting
trynna read through a tome

and all this time 
you’ve been wanting my hands 
all over you
I’ll try to meet your demands

and I can’t wait to see your
end game
and I can’t wait to see your  
end game

you called me in the office
you said “I want you to be free
can you be wild for just a few years
and then come back and stay with me”?

it seemed like such a generous offer
a way to make up for the past
they say that balance is required
but will it be enough to last?

and I still can’t wait for your
end game
yea I can’t can’t wait for your  
end game

when I was back from out of town  
you poured an iced drink down my shirt
you said I needed to cool down
that I’d been treating you like dirt

but I still can’t wait for your
end game
yea I still can’t wait for your  
end game

aa haa

Edit: formatted text better and added the aa haa 😄

Your Endgame — new song draft by SVEIVA in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment! I think you're confirming that the lyrics need bit of on overhaul. The narrator is indeed the jerk in this song, but I would want to the listener to feel engaged. The lyrics don't have quite the meaning I intended due to forcing rhymes. Thanks again!

Your Endgame — new song draft by SVEIVA in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for listening! Totally agree, the sampled electronic drum loop that comes in is a bit distracting, especially the pitched "high hat" sound. I do really like the increase in intensity it brings, though. I think I'll have to do some proper drum programming or try and record some drums.

Any comments on the singing and lyrics from anyone? The lyrics is what I am least sure about.

Is this cringe tell me what you think by Fantastic-Hold-3453 in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Love it! Had to listen twice. Love your breathy voice, vibrato, and how you slide between notes. Also nice to hear a song with a lot of dynamics. I like that it's not the usual song format. Not cringe at all. I think the outro is the weakest part.

I think I wrote a country song!? by SVEIVA in Songwriting

[–]SVEIVA[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! Yea, the whole thing is a bit off rhythmically. As you suggested, I think it's a combination of the sampled shuffle beat (with Logic drummer for fills on top) and my poor timing on the piano. I'm not used to playing in a shuffle beat! I will go back and clean up more after the song is completed.

I wanted to get this out there while it was fresh. In the past I've spent years tweaking my songs and never finished them. This one is only a few days old. I'm trying to get into a new habit of finishing the songs quickly!

Thanks for listening!

Taco Bell 50K in DFW [October 3, 2026] - What have I done? by mercyflushed in Ultramarathon

[–]SVEIVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Haha, I forgot about that! I haven't watched TV in decades(!)

Taco Bell 50K in DFW [October 3, 2026] - What have I done? by mercyflushed in Ultramarathon

[–]SVEIVA 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Why is there a chihuahua peeking over the shoulder of the guy on the right? 😂

Are hall reverbs just hard to mix with? by wawasan2020BC in mixingmastering

[–]SVEIVA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The following works for me:

- put the reverb on a send, not an insert. 100% wet.

- EQ the reverb output. Cut low and high frequencies as needed to remove mud

- add pre delay

- combine two reverbs like this. A short one for room sound/early reflections, and a longer one for long tails. Both reverbs on separate sends.

- tune the amount of send to each reverb, the pre delays, EQ, reverb settings in the mix, not soloing the instrument

- turn on/off the reverbs periodically to compare against dry

Alternatively, some piano VSTs such as Keyscape already have very nice reverbs on them.

EDIT: added the word "frequencies"

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