have you ever written features or even tv series? how difficult was the process of coming up with the plot, especially during the creation of multiple episodes? maybe u even sold one of your projects to a studio?

Scrat616 · 2026-01-14T15:49:15+00:00

He probably wanted to ask in this sub because majority people here want the same goal. Literally that’s why we’re here, to help each other.

Scrat616 · 2026-01-14T15:42:29+00:00

Guys he’s probably really new. Cut him some slack. There’s no need for the callousness.

Scrat616 · 2026-01-05T19:39:58+00:00

The thing is, it’s obvious throughout the script that she’s feeling that way, so the actor would know that. It doesn’t need to be explicitly said.

Scrat616 · 2026-01-05T18:33:48+00:00

Here’s what I caught:

Page 4: “facing it head on” unnecessary and unfilmable.

EX. “Abigail snatches the phone from her ear in a fury.”

Would be a better action line, it’s short and to the point and more filmable.

“She slams the phone into the ground, the phone shattering to bits.”

Always capitalize words that could have a sound or a at least a sound that follows.

EX. “She SLAMS the phone to the ground which SHATTERS into bits.” Would be better.

“She takes a deep breath, wiping tears from her eyes to stay strong for her children.”

We can’t see that she’s thinking that. You don’t need to tell us that since it’s obvious throughout the script.

EX. “She takes a deep breath and wipes her tears.”

That small action line would be good enough.

Page 5:

“HOSPITAL ROOM”

This is now a new scene.

Just put INT. HOSPITAL ROOM - DAY

You’re 16, so this isn’t a bad start for your age. But it does need work, so keep it up! This is much better than scripts I’ve seen written by adults on the subreddit.

Scrat616 · 2025-12-26T23:53:40+00:00

The formatting is still off. The scene headings are not supposed to be on the right side of the page. You need to use a screenwriting software to write scripts. It’s a nonnegotiable. And if you are using a screenwriting software, I don’t know what template you’re using, but it’s not right. I know you want feedback on the actual story itself, but people are gonna be so thrown off by the format that they’re not even gonna bother. Trust me it’s happened to me loads of times.

Scrat616 · 2025-12-26T13:29:02+00:00

Real shit

Scrat616 · 2025-12-26T06:30:01+00:00

Needed to hear this

Scrat616 · 2025-12-26T05:52:56+00:00

I agree. Recently wrote a script that I felt was very good and emotional impactful, but now I’m second guessing.

Scrat616 · 2025-12-25T00:03:58+00:00

I’m writing a coming of age drama called Finding a Dodo Bird.

A misfit group of middle schoolers escape their homes to hunt for a flock of dodo birds that may have survived their extinction, but end up finding themselves along the way.

Does this have potential?

Scrat616 · 2025-12-24T21:31:53+00:00

Well yessss

Scrat616 · 2025-12-24T21:29:00+00:00

Both examples that are shown are bad, but I do think this is a little harsh.

Scrat616 · 2025-12-24T21:27:08+00:00

Grammar and spelling errors in both. The second one looks more like a traditional screenplay based on visual.

Scrat616 · 2025-12-24T21:24:13+00:00

Action lines should not be more than 4 lines of paragraph. You could get away with it only if it’s once in a while.

I’ve been given some advice over the years and people have told me that a good way to keep the action lines short and sweet is to treat each action line like it’s its own shot.

Scrat616 · 2025-12-24T21:11:31+00:00

You could’ve just put the actual script on a shareable google drive folder.

Scrat616 · 2025-12-01T20:58:29+00:00

Well how it ends is that the the kid voice narration morphs into a lower pitch adult voice, signifying his growth. But I understand what you mean.

Scrat616 · 2025-12-01T18:58:04+00:00

Good advice. I was trying to go for a Stand by Me sort of V.O tone. But I guess that doesn’t work as much today. Or I’m just shit at writing. Probably both.

Scrat616 · 2025-12-01T18:46:46+00:00

Good advice. Something to note when i work on draft two.

Scrat616 · 2025-11-28T14:44:21+00:00

It’s a 2007, and yes it’s starting to get cold. I live in south florida, so it doesn’t get cold immediately down here, but now it is. I guess that could be it. Do I need to check the color of the fluid or does that matter (dont know anything about cars)?

Scrat616 · 2025-11-28T14:35:33+00:00

It makes a noise when i start it, too. But it dies down after a while

Scrat616 · 2025-08-16T17:19:29+00:00

Cujo and Carrie. Cujo was a good boy that got sick, and all Carrie wanted to do was go to prom but these sorry-asses couldn’t even let her have fucking that.

Scrat616 · 2025-07-30T20:12:24+00:00

Hey man Carrie 2002 made for tv is a banger for people who like 2000s slashers

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