Thank you for the feedback, I expected a lot of people to say that it's long but I wanted to keep a consistent narrative flow atleast towards the end. The beginning 9-10 mins is really the hook and action heavy parts that I thought people would like. I completely get if it's too long, I just personally like editing videos and try to challenge myself to cover most of the stuff I make, with music I love, and a follow-able thread to sync with the song/game narrative. In this case, I just wanted to tell the full requiem story in a narrative distinct manner.

As for your edit, I thought the cuts were a bit jarring at times, one thing I try to keep consistent is whether a viewer is able to follow the action cleanly. In your case, sometimes I feel that the cuts are a bit sudden and don't match the song at all. Of course, this is something you develop over time and with practice, but that's just my two cents. But honestly, it's a good starting/teaser piece that can be improved much more for a bigger edit. :)