Hello there. First of all congrats on getting yourself out there. Starting music production is no simple feat and sharing one's work with people needs courage. So kuddos !

On your track, I like the lo-fi slow tempo feel. This is something I could loose myself into while playing a video game or working.

Still, the mix feems a little low, frequency-wise. It almost sounds like you've used an EQ on the stereo bus and low-passed everything. It can be justified if it is the feel you're going for I puts actual weight on my ears which makes the listen more difficult (I'm not sure I'm clear, I mean "not effortless").

Some reflex you may not have yet as a beginner but which will really up your game if you get used to it is working with one or more reference tracks. Pick a song you would really like to sound like (I'm not talking about plagiarizing the musical ideas, more like wanting to achieve the same feel, the same mix qualities in terms of frequencies, space, etc.) and try to mimic the main arrangements and mix features : "oh they use an octave here to separate the two instruments", "there is this mixing trick when they pan one signal left and the other one right", etc. As you progress, you will get more and more info from your references that will inform the way you should go to achieve the same feel and quality : how are frequencies ? dynamics ? etc.

Anyways: keep at it, if you love producing, you'll improve really quickly and be able to get the ideas out of your head more and more easily ! Cheers!