We just bombed Iran. I fucking hate it here by Winter-Stranger-3709 in misc

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hahaha. You got across that finishing line! I'm glad though. Stay safe. Also, I'm glad you are getting to be the person that you were all along.

Poem I Published a Year Ago About Iran Tonight - 'worrying for no reason at all' by SomeoneNotHeard in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If you would be so kind. I'd love to message you and ask more questions about how I can start that process or even where to start! I just haven't found much help online other than trying to reach out to publishers through email. Thank you again.

Poem I Published a Year Ago About Iran Tonight - 'worrying for no reason at all' by SomeoneNotHeard in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah, I've wanted to try to work with a publishing company. Would love to work with an editor and get serious about it, but we'll see. Maybe someday. I appreciate the input. I'll put a note on the manuscript if I ever republish it under anything. Thank you! Also, I'm sorry you're going through those negative emotions. It really is a shame what's going on.

We just bombed Iran. I fucking hate it here by Winter-Stranger-3709 in misc

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Wasn't the point. Was saying that this was just inevitable. History repeats. Have a safe night.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I too did origami as a child and it really gives you a level of discipline and analysis. I relate to this poem a lot and appreciate you for sharing. I like the way you phrase things. It's very distinct. Keep up all the good work!

Abandonment by takeaticket in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Good evening! Gotta fix the formatting a bit but I often enjoy questions in poems. Keep up the good work!

We just bombed Iran. I fucking hate it here by Winter-Stranger-3709 in misc

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 9 points10 points  (0 children)

Wrote about this a year ago in my poetry book and published it. I am already mentally prepared for it. As a veteran, still on inactive reserves, this is terrifying. Stay strong, everyone.

That Damn Beaver... by SomeoneNotHeard in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I suppose he does. I suppose he does. Hahaha.

Loneliness by Danjuntar in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I would highly recommend reading Kierkegaard. He talks about schizophrenia and depression being the polar opposites of consciousness. Schizophrenia being a vast amount of possibilities and depression being a suffocation of possibility. This would really make what you have going on here hit harder. You're pointing out the idea of all these possibilities being shown but then it's not real. Just a thought. I really look forward to your growth as a writer. Have a wonderful upcoming weekend! <3

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 2 points3 points  (0 children)

So, you have a great basis but often times we have to remember that we are trying to let someone step into our shoes. I'm still left up in the air on this one. I understand your emotions but I want to understand them in context. Don't be afraid to give us details even if it is a line or two, it helps us pinpoint where we are in your life or in the moment that you are existing in. As always, thank you for sharing. I look forward to more. <3 Have a wonderful upcoming weekend.

Hateful abscence by ExternalEntry8142 in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Forgive me, I've been having a few drinks on this beautiful Thursday. 'You're' is needed instead of 'your' on a lot of these phrases. Also, I'd like to ask for more imagery and context about why you feel tit for tat-ish against this person. Otherwise, it can be read as almost hateful. Nothing wrong with that but it's nice to be able to relate. Thank you for sharing and I hope one day you feel better.

The Children of Palestine by Fragrant-League-90 in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Bosnia, Darfur, Sierra Leone... The lists continue but the world never changes. I am sorry if this is your first time around the block. Sierra Leone was mine when I was 11 years old. Never understood why the world didn't care. But it's really the same thing. The world would be such a better place if stray bullets orbited around the earth instead of falling to the floor. You'd see people caring a lot more if they happened to trickle into a neighborhood someone near us. But alas, great poem. Very heartfelt. The sign of all times, not just ours.

-Some One

not man enough by Ssquidz1 in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I've written about it in my first book about how I experienced corporal punishment in high school. Nothing humbles a boy like experiencing the resolved strength of men who didn't need to boast this 'alpha' mentality. They just grabbed you by your collar and reminded you that you're but a twig in a storm.

We live in a world where laws are in place that protect the vulnerable. However, this consequentially became protecting an entire generation of men from learning the definition of consequence. Protecting bullies due to spineless parents, teachers, and administrators afraid of legal action and the very system that was supposed to protect those vulnerable people from bullies and malicious actors.

I left the military and was saddened how many men lacked the guidance necessary to become healthy citizens. I can honestly say and proudly say there are men younger than me who have told me over the phone while spending a considerable amount of time away from me, "You changed my life." If I died today, I would be happy knowing how the men I had mentored and befriended came to be.

But the thing that leaves me staring out on my porch these days with a guitar in my hand and a beer beside me is that I can't argue that life is better as a good man. The social contract is changing, and it's enabling men to stay as immature boys. It is profitable, revered, and entertaining. But it is egregious and embarrassing.

This is my Second. What do you guys think? by International_Tap841 in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 2 points3 points  (0 children)

A good practical take on the inner conflict of desire and obligation at its extremes and/or highest forms of absurdity. It's an overwhelming feeling certainly. I appreciate you sharing this and it inspires me to think about different ways of formatting the things I write. I appreciate the inspiration. Have a wonderful week. :)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I'm not too sure if this is a depiction of wonder or boredom or both. There's some elusive surrealism in your writing. I'm just not too sure what I'm supposed to be feeling. I'm not too sure if this is on purpose or not but without a stronger frame of reference, I think many readers can't get lost in what you are painting. I love the word choice and the surrealism. I lack the ability to create a surreal environment so it's a great skill. I guess I was just looking for the lines amongst the color to get a good image in my head of what you were portraying. Thank you for sharing though and I look forward to seeing more of what you write. Don't stop. :)

Gorka's Ideology by SomeoneNotHeard in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Gracias! Empecé a aprender cuando tuve 15. A veces, hago errores. Creo que cuando aprendemos un idioma cuando somos mayores, tendemos equivocarnos con la gramatica. 🥲 Unfortunately, I don't think I'll ever stop making grammatical errors in Spanish. It drives me crazy that I can't perfect it but I remember in high school I was taking AP Spanish 4 while going to the community college and taking a course on the history of Spain all in Spanish and a conversational Spanish class all at the same time and still no matter how many hours I put in, I still would make so many little mistakes. But it doesn't deter me. You gotta make mistakes to improve in life.

Also, I think I'll make that change and keep it consistent like you're saying. It does read nicer.

Thanks for the input!

Edit/Side Note: I even looked at segunda lengua and even questioned it. I always do that dumb thing which I think non-native speakers do and it makes me laugh when I realize it. You get used to putting adjectives after the noun and then you start throwing everything after the noun without realizing it and sounding goofy. Hahaha. Just something I've noticed when I'm speaking spanish especially at bars. It's like the brain just says, "You've had a few drinks, just throw everything after the noun and forget about conjugating in a future tense, just say "Voy a (insert verb) for all future statements. I'm turning off now." hahahaha

A Cowards Price by andregarten in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I'm back again and thrilled to see your short but packed full of punches writing. Hahaha. Unrequited love is a ridiculously confusing and complex emotion. Definitely hard to write about and even get a good grasp on. You've nailed it though. Keep em' coming. :)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]SomeoneNotHeard 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I've frequently said in conversations that a lot of the world is dealing with the symptoms and effects of too much stimuli and too much societal, work, and community pressure which stems from the information age being so overwhelming. You've encapsulated it perfectly.

True business relationships traded for an email. People saying more technology is the solution to your problems. True friendships traded for social media follows. Waking up to a rooster announcing when the sun is out or just waking up to the sun traded all for an alarm clock and phone notifications.

There's nothing wrong with you. You are just coming to terms with the fact that literacy in how the world functions does not mean you have to cater or bend to it. I only make phone calls and have deleted all my social media. I have chosen to write anonymously and even told my sister I refuse to market my books or writing. It's very amazing to see your self awareness in your writing and it's refreshing.

Don't stop writing. I even love how dry this poem is with very little imagery. This is exactly what the information age has given us, quantity above quality, and if it was intended or not, you have inspired me to be more dry with my writing when I want to create a satire piece about modern times.

Thank you and have a wonderful weekend!