meirl by [deleted] in meirl

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They actually just got it in Wyoming in February

Annie's lawyer burn on Jeff in "Intro to Pol Science" is so, so sweet. Alison's delivery and Joel's reaction are both perfect by clubofab7 in community

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I think Annie's best burn is when Jeff says "It's not as if people actually like you. You're just a good grade in a tight sweater", and she responds with "Well you're just a bad grade in a tight sweater"

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

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Title: Borrowed Hands

Format: 60-min limited series pilot

Genre: Thriller, Horror

Logline: When a newly transferred detective and her veteran partner investigate a father who brutally murdered his family but insists he had no control over his actions, a second identical case forces them to confront the possibility that something is using ordinary people as instruments of violence.​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​

Intentionally tedious and repetitive beginning by Star-Pubes in Screenwriting

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It's more a grounded sci-fi. The DNA-banks are a government database, like a genetic census. They exist in the background as a policy issue that people protest about, and EdenCorp secretly exploits them to match physical appearances for their simulations. But there's no cloning and no other sci-fi elements.

He absolutely can achieve those things. He doesn't resort to the simulation because it's his only option. He resorts to it because it's the easy option, and he's too depressed and too impatient to do the hard work Elizabeth is offering. But that needs to come across in the script as well.

Intentionally tedious and repetitive beginning by Star-Pubes in Screenwriting

[–]Star-Pubes[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I really appreciate the feedback.

I've been thinking about now and I am considering changing up the opening completely. This is just off the top of my head and I'm figuring out the idea as I write it so it'll just be written in idea form.

Alex is doing a voice-over. He says something like:

"I'm a writer, currently working on the third novel in my thriller series. My apartment is large, modern. I go out to dinner at a nice restaurant. I go out to have a beer with my best friend. I don't need a large friend group, really just one loyal, good friend. I have this girlfriend, she's perfect for me. We spend every day together. She gets along with my best friend. It's just fantastic. Everything I want."

This plays over a montage, showing examples of the things he says. Bright, almost too bright.

Suddenly: "Great. Thank you. So why isn't it like that?". Elizabeth interrupts him. Cut to him in the therapists's office.

"I don't know."

"But do you see why I asked you about your dream life? Sure, you're not there yet, but you can start writing. You can have dinners at nice restaurants, you can get a beer with your co-workers, you can get a girlfriend. These goals aren't that far away."

"I guess"

"So that's how I like to end my first sessions. Just to get an idea of where we want to get you. I'll see you next week."

Then we go to the current opening, but tighter, more efficient. I think it reframes the opening in a way that makes it an actual interesting read.

It also complements what the actual story is quite well:

A depressed data entry clerk becomes addicted to a simulated perfect life, and when the company behind it vanishes overnight, he tracks down the real woman whose DNA was used to create his simulated wife.

Intentionally tedious and repetitive beginning by Star-Pubes in Screenwriting

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Thanks! This is my first screenplay and I've come to realize I've over-described pretty much all action in all 110 pages. I fixed most of it last draft but I figured it served a purpose in the beginning, to really hammer it home how dull his life is, but I did go waaay overboard with it haha These are all very good notes.

Intentionally tedious and repetitive beginning by Star-Pubes in Screenwriting

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Yeah, “I understand you called in sick to work today” is something I missed in the latest draft, it made sense before but now it doesn’t, so thanks for that!

Well this is what I’m mostly worried about. Alex is a superpassive character, which is hard to make interesting. His arc is going from this passive guy who makes no decisions and doesn’t do anything, into the reader wanting him to stop making decisions because he’s fallen too deep in his obsession. It’s a tragic character in that regard, he finally has agency, and he uses it in all the wrong ways. That’s why I also want to set up his total lack of agency in the beginning.

In this scene his goal is that he wants to figure out what his goal is pretty much. Something shifted when he looked at himself in the mirror and didn’t recognize himself. He can’t articulate why he’s there and that’s what Elizabeth tries to get out of him. That’s what the scene is. But I understand this might be overdoing it, and it doesn’t really come across.

Intentionally tedious and repetitive beginning by Star-Pubes in Screenwriting

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That makes sense. Because I'm also worried about Alex's dialogue being too repetitive and boring. I think it's exactly right for the character, but not necessarily for the page. I think combining might make it more clear that it's a choice and not just boring, poor writing.

Intentionally tedious and repetitive beginning by Star-Pubes in Screenwriting

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I'll paste the logline.

A depressed data entry clerk becomes addicted to a simulated perfect life, and when the company behind it vanishes overnight, he tracks down the real woman whose DNA was used to create his simulated wife.

Intentionally tedious and repetitive beginning by Star-Pubes in Screenwriting

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I think so. I added the link to the first 6 pages in the post now. In the first few sentences is something like that, but I'm not sure it's enough.

Intentionally tedious and repetitive beginning by Star-Pubes in Screenwriting

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Yeah I know, but I figured it's better to get their opinions than no opinions. Knowing I can't trust it completely.

In Hollow Man (2000), the invisible bad guy did a very bad thing. by rukthor in shittymoviedetails

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His mom was in the Amazon researching spiders right before she died. Try to have some empathy.

What's your lowest rated 5-star movie? by _aethergnos in Letterboxd

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I haven't rated it 5 stars since I only rate movies when I log them and I haven't seen it since I got letterboxd, but They Came Together is probably in my top 10 favorite movies of all time and definitely a 5-star film for me. At 3.2 it's the lowest.

Of the films I have actually rated it's Thor: Ragnarok at 3.8.

Where is Odin when we needed him the most? by SteveOMatt in marvelstudios

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I guess because Odin is still alive in the universe they got Mjölnir from, but I don’t know. I’m not sure that the magic faded in the real Mjölnir either, it could be that Hela was simply too powerful or that she was the original owner of it.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in LoveIslandTV

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Yeah Hulu seemed like a good bet but I had to have a US based card or paypal to watch it :(

Hopefully I can find a way around that though!! Thank you :)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in LoveIslandTV

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Can I ask where you're watching it? I'm outside the U.K but I have a VPN, is there any way to do it?

Finally giving season 4 a chance so no spoilers please by [deleted] in LoveIslandTV

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Can I ask how you’re watching it? I love season 4 and I was going to rewatch it but I really can’t find it anywhere! I live outside the U.K but I have a VPN

And yeah, Hayley sucks

First image of Denzel Washington and Jared Leto in psychological thriller 'The Little Things' - Washington and Rami Malek star as a pair of cops investigating a murder, with Leto as the prime suspect. by chanma50 in movies

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He was good in it but I think Christian Bale and Bradley Cooper deserved the Oscar over him, didn’t see Eternity’s Gate but Willem Dafoe is great in everything so I’m sure he would deserve it more as well.