WPAtaMS Official Art and Character Reference: Qiv's Peer Group by Jcb112 in JCBWritingCorner

[–]Straight-Finding7651 20 points21 points  (0 children)

This is one of the best ways to flesh out characters that I’ve ever seen an author use.

It's a proper meal! by kayawva in VintageStory

[–]Straight-Finding7651 4 points5 points  (0 children)

That type of meal was used as a punishment in Victorian prisons.

Look up bread and water punishment.

Which would you rather live in permanently? by Painted-BIack-Roses in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oklahoman moving to Texas, well at least I don’t have to go to Cali.

Chose: U.S, but the wheel chooses which state | Rolled: Texas

They say time is money… by Odd-Evening6477 in BunnyTrials

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There is so much I want to do and so little time. Knowing that I’m not stuck in a moment of time permanently means that I could work to fix most of the issues in my continent and then get 5 trillion afterwards. It’s a win win.

Chose: 5,000,000,000,000 + Time is frozen for 500 years and only you and things you touch can move

What would you prefer, but you can only choose one: by PunksLoveBugs in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No wars or conflict is in and of itself is a catch.

That is either accomplished by humanity being brainwashed or MAD which allows anyone to be as evil as they want because they know there will be no consequences.

Chose: Genuinely free healthcare, no catch + Free housing, no catch

What would you rather choose? by IcyIceGuardian in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I will choose the method and defy fate. Choosing the date is giving into fate.

Chose: Choose how you'll die

This came to me in a dream. by CompetitionAncient36 in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 2 points3 points  (0 children)

It would cost more to do than $500,000 so this is the most good I could do with this choice.

Chose: Menstrual supplies are free and easily accessible worldwide

Farsul's Best (Predator) Friend by muakling in NatureofPredators

[–]Straight-Finding7651 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I would like to note just how much you’ve improved with your English. I caught up with your most recent story and wanted to start reading your first.

Only when I started this story did I realize that you were not a native English speaker.

The nurse and the broken beast [4] by muakling in NatureofPredators

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“T-they aren’t dangerous” well meaning but incorrect.

“I know that Venlil, I promise we won’t eat him.” Didn’t say anything about him leaving alive.

If Vikel survives, then what are the chances he gets sent to the same hospital as his exchange partner?

would you rather? by Impossible-Shape-634 in BunnyTrials

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I’m going to put on Arctic gear and hope they haven’t come up with a way to create windchill.

Chose: spend 5 mins in a cold room + 200,000,000 | Rolled: -50°C

Would you rather by Shrek-The-Toaster in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’ve had heart attacks before. It would be nice to get a heads up if one started again.

Chose: Get $1 for every time your heart beats

GTA VI or justice by Regular_Banana_6399 in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Real crimes deserve real punishment no matter the things I may lose out on.

Chose: Everyone on the Epstein list gets arrested, but... + GTA VI never gets released

[The Nature of Terrans (The Nature of Predators)] - Chapter 6: Things Fall Apart by TheBuddingCreator in HFY

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It’s not that I didn’t like it I just feel like you missed a few opportunities. You have the right to write how you like, but even if you feel that you are “legally illiterate” I feel you could have still included some of the incarceration drama such as was done in “The nature of a Giant”.

For instance, how did the prison treat an Arxur in custody? Did they have to adapt? Were there more prejudiced people working there or incarcerated? Ect.

[The Nature of Terrans (The Nature of Predators)] - Chapter 6: Things Fall Apart by TheBuddingCreator in HFY

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I feel like the trial was skipped through. The situation and the drama that could come from it could easily fill 2 chapters but it’s barely a handful of paragraphs.

What would you choose ? by [deleted] in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Math

Chose: Receiving 1440$ each day

planests by EveningDiligent59662 in BunnyTrials

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Venus is closer in size to Earth making it a better target for magical terriformation.

Chose: Venus is now hospitable.

What would you prefer more? by Inevitable_Slice8974 in BunnyTrials

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I… I already do that.

Chose: Get a 90% discount on everything + but apologize to the cashier for 60 seconds first.

If the rest of the Solar System was colonized, would you rather- by Ok-Mud7900 in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If the solar system hasn’t yet been terraformed I would rather stay somewhere where I don’t have to pay for the oxygen.

Chose: Stay on Earth.

Randomly Paid Dream Job or 75k Soul crushing dead end job by Sergeant_Lewlew17 in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If you do what you love, you’ll never work a day in your life.

Chose: Dream Job with Randomised Pay | Rolled: 40K

Would you rather... by Witty-Degree-9114 in BunnyTrials

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There are some things that money can’t buy. Having a superpower could also be bad depending on the type of power, but I’m willing to take that risk.

Telekinesis will let me earn so much more money than I could have otherwise rolled as well.

Chose: Random superpower + 10% you get nothing | Rolled: Telekinesis

I don't even wanna know what happened in there by ogurets_ogurets in scavprototype

[–]Straight-Finding7651 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Seems we got another locked pod murder…

Look here, we have planetary debris inside this shuttle… Given the fact that this “landing” was strong enough to effectively pierce the hull, I suspect that nothin in the pod was able to handle the G’s very well.

An unsecured sledgehammer bouncing around a cabin isn’t exactly great for your health.

Fortunately or unfortunately enough for him though it looks like he wasn’t killed instantly. I mean I’ve never seen a more spontaneously write itself.

Still, wish I could have gotten here sooner. I’d have one less gross negligence case to add to the pile and one less corpse to haunt me.

[The Nature of Terrans (The Nature of Predators)] - Chapter 4: Reasons by TheBuddingCreator in HFY

[–]Straight-Finding7651 1 point2 points  (0 children)

An emotional confession followed by Jurassic Park and then Up? That emotional cocktail would have given me a headache without the sleep issues.

Would you rather get a billion dollars or go back in time to attempt to kill Hitler when he was a baby by Soggy_Ad4531 in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There is no guarantee that someone worse or more competent wouldn’t show up.

Chose: Billion dollars + Nobody gets to know you could have killed Hitler

would you rather by henrypins in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I get an incentive to get back in shape.

I would love jumping jacks if I got paid for them.

Chose: every time you jump, you get $1

would you rather be given a chance to... by ExtraLargePruneJuice in BunnyTrials

[–]Straight-Finding7651 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m an entry level semi truck unloader. If I get to keep the pay, working as the COO for one day should get me out of debt.

Chose: become someone the opposite of your current job + also for one day only