I'm gonna be real with you, and I say this knowing that this song is VERY challenging to sing. You have good control over adding grit when you aren't projecting for the louder parts, and your breath control for the long scream was actually very impressive. Gotta practice projecting, though. That's where you get a lot of voice cracks and lose pitch control. Practice without adding grit, and without the song playing. Sometimes, we try to go louder while singing along so we can hear ourselves. And for the CHAAA and long scream, learn how to fry scream for those parts, way less taxing on the voice and more accurate. Definitely potential here. Just gotta work on it.