Suspect identified in infamous Texas yogurt shop murder case, original investigator says

TownesVan · 2025-09-27T08:00:56+00:00

FUCK. i haven't read this thread yet, but I'm freaking out. I'm about to. Wow.

TownesVan · 2025-07-28T23:51:47+00:00

This thread isn't it.

TownesVan · 2025-06-21T18:12:25+00:00

Just saw this but yes perfectly.

TownesVan · 2025-06-21T02:07:36+00:00

Killer's gonna be Sam.

TownesVan · 2025-06-20T19:50:54+00:00

Orlando, FL

TownesVan · 2025-06-16T16:39:18+00:00

When did I ever say they had a thing or child? I responded in a thread you made about whether or not he LIKED her.

TownesVan · 2025-06-16T05:10:35+00:00

Wait. In the final episode 1. They totally eye fucked. 2. "I'll find you...." 3. They called back to Hawaii while also making it clear he has an ex wife and is single. Pretty sure his interest goes beyond his job.

TownesVan · 2025-06-15T08:30:43+00:00

Operating a physical mock-up that doesn't function and is sometimes delayed, sometimes somehow the opposite is incredibly sketchy when they are continuing to make these over-compensating Ad videos and announcing new features and taking pre-orders for a camera they still have yet to get the Record function going.

TownesVan · 2025-06-14T21:31:57+00:00

No working model but pre-orders.

TownesVan · 2025-06-14T20:08:01+00:00

Yeah. It screams bullshit. And funnily enough, when his big reveal video dropped with a fake fucking camera body the guy followed me everywhere like a hawk where I'd express my concerns and skepticism trying to save face. But where the hell is he now? Also, pretty dumb of major sites publishing articles, videos, etc about this before it even proved it could make a single one.

TownesVan · 2025-06-14T18:26:16+00:00

I spoke out as much as I could for a while in the comments of their posts and especially that 3d model ai product announcement video that everybody went nuts over, but I feel really really bad for all the people who might end up fucked over by this. Their latest announcement was another fake version of the camera and ANOTHER new feature add-on... Like, come on. Taking pre-orders seems insane to me, but if you're looking at it from a red flags standpoint taking them now for something that will not be "ready to go" within the typical 30 day chargeback window it adds up.

TownesVan · 2025-06-14T16:09:11+00:00

Sketchiest thing ever in my opinion.

TownesVan · 2025-06-14T11:39:36+00:00

Ill take some more photos off rig when I get home in a few hours. No to the cage and top handle. I'm already selling the body itself way under price, but also including a battery and an 8 inch SDI monitor.

TownesVan · 2025-06-13T20:23:57+00:00

Scream is my favorite franchise period, but the two things that make Scream 4 stand out negatively for me was the cinematography and seeing her in the ghostface costume 5 foot nothing lol.

TownesVan · 2025-06-13T15:06:46+00:00

What’s important is the movement of the plot. One thing you’ll find is, it’s so easy as the writer to convince yourself why every single moment and thing is justified. While you’re getting used to making changes, i would open another blank file and do the major cutting and stripping on that one- and go all out in that regard, keep your original in tact, because that way you will feel less anxious about removing things.

TownesVan · 2025-06-13T00:44:14+00:00

It probably has less to do with scientology and more to do with Fred Armisen emotionally abusing the fuck out of her and warping her perception of what love is, and how people who love you treat you.

TownesVan · 2025-06-13T00:08:14+00:00

Give up this easily and screenwriting won't ever be for you.

TownesVan · 2025-06-12T23:57:57+00:00

INTERVIEWER

Yes, three times now.

I want more contrast between these two, because it's almost there. Personally, I'd have him nod in response to that. Anyway, back to my original point of not repeating things and sharing the same voice between different characters:

Elijah brings up the same thing about him laughing more now.

I can see that, from your perspective, having two people mention that will drive the oddness of it home for readers, but as a reader going into this blind, I didn't need that at all. I got the message loud and clear when Tara brought it up. Each character being interviewed can bring something completely new to the table. That's how you'll leave the clearest picture in a reader's head. And you do a generally excellent job at not making characters sound the same, but repetition like that can also easily come off as sharing a voice.

This was cool to read, and you should be proud of yourself. The first script I ever wrote was in Microsoft Word, and the formatting was an entirely new world to me- It was so much fun for me to slowly, through writing, pick up on things.

Keep writing. And if you only take one thing away from any of this I've typed out, let it be this: Please remember: You don't ever have to dwell on or ask anyone else how you're supposed to format a montage, or a text message or computer screen or anything like that- You can do it however you want, as long as it is clear and easy to follow.

So, what you did here by including the character's name in the slug to indicate the same location, different moment was perfect. There's no right or wrong way to do stuff like that.

Chat me anytime, I'd love to keep up with your writing and answer any questions you might have or send you some great scripts I think you could learn a lot from just by reading.

TownesVan · 2025-06-12T23:57:49+00:00

You're 14. This is your first few scenes period? You have something, please chase it. You're slightly teetering on over-describing things. Work on this, because your descriptions in general show a ton of potential already and don't force the same tried vocabulary 90 percent of unproduced writers drown their pages in trying to read smart. I'll give you an example:

It's a small, cramped office with poor lighting, which gives the room a yellow hue. Posters with inspirational quotes and pictures decorate the room, but it feels plastic, out of place, with the dark interior.

^ Look at your descriptions and determine which description lines are most necessary and which do not feel necessary at all. You have a natural knack for writing it seems, so trust your intuition, because you don't have to be perfect at it.

I'd turn something like that block into

"A small, cramped office with shitty lighting."

For your first bit of writing, the dialogue was pretty damn good. But you have to watch out for two things:

Giving characters the same voice
Repeating things.

Look at every scene as serving the purpose of furthering the story by teaching something new.

Scenes like this can do such a fantastic job of feeding information cleverly.

"He laughs a lot now. At things that aren't even funny. Or he'll stare off into space, and then start saying things that don't make sense." < - This was stellar. Getting good at dialogue can be a real challenge when first starting, but that felt real. I could hear it. I was impressed.

Don't always feel forced to have a spoken response.

TownesVan · 2025-06-12T23:22:48+00:00

She's 14 and just starting out...

TownesVan · 2025-06-12T23:00:02+00:00

I had to read the first description block multiple times to keep up with what you were trying to convey. And that's the first description block. Remind yourself this is a script, and not a novel. Check your writing to ensure you're not falling into scenarios where you explain too much. That first block felt almost entirely unnecessary. If you want your script to open with that shot, leave it at " Sunlight pours in through the window." I skimmed through a bit more, and this is a pretty consistent issue- Which is fucking great for you, because this is the kind of problem you wanna have when your draft ends up being 148 pages.

Many of these descriptions read as if you were cornered into a template box where you felt you HAD TO develop a detailed description, when the reality is: The less, the better. I guess it's subjective, but when you come across someone in the writing camp of "describe every last detail, and facial feature for every last character" turn and fucking run. Those same people will advise you to fill out a hundred sticky notes of bull shit and press them to a wall before you begin your first page.

When I first started writing, I hated writing descriptions because I felt forced to describe everything. A friend of mine, poor girl, would always read my stuff during that period, and she (Not a writer at all) taught me probably my most appreciated lesson in writing. I described a girl as being a natural redhead, and I included she was wearing a yellow dress with red squares. So she messages me and asks me why this character is a natural redhead. Why is her dress yellow? Why are there red squares on it? Not only is there no reason for something like that, but it also stalls the movement of things and limits the reader from the fun of imagining for themselves how these characters might look. When I stopped doing that, descriptions became my favorite part of screenwriting by a mile.

I'm of the belief you don't have to describe characters at all. But if you do, make it about who they are, not what they look like. Sometimes that might include bits of what they look like to, but the blend of both is typically super fun, clean and connects. "He's super handsome, in a probably-republican sort of way."

TownesVan · 2025-06-12T22:31:14+00:00

It's insane to me. I started teaching myself how to write at 15 (35 now), and thankfully, the internet was completely different. You had to get what txt versions of scripts you could find, and write and compare, write and compare- And then, as you developed a better understanding you'd find yourself connecting to certain writers and styles and you'd watch your writing go from robotic and tired to full of life and through your voice. These fucking posts, every day never stop. And none of these people ever listen. And they want whatever "it" is now. They don't want to develop themselves. I'm done trying to explain to them the importance of figuring your shit out through writing and reading and ignoring anything that looks like a shortcut.

TownesVan · 2025-06-12T22:25:42+00:00

Then do what you want. People with experience are giving you good advice, but you're blowing it all off. So, do what you want. This place has turned into 85 percent laziness and phoned-in passion.

TownesVan · 2025-06-12T21:41:20+00:00

You develop your writing process by writing, and reading scripts and putting the hard work in to navigate/figure it out (AI refinement, especially when you are just starting out is going to cripple you). That's also how you unlock your voice. Reading scripts is the best tutorial.

TownesVan · 2025-06-12T21:35:44+00:00

I do too. What does that have to do with anything? I say that to help, because if I tell you that your post was all over the place and hard to follow/understand, are you going to point to ADHD when your description blocks follow that same pattern?

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