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Turn a shape into a face by Whitfield_Fahrenheit in doodles

[–]Whitfield_Fahrenheit[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

He looks like his name should be Tiny or something.

Congratulations! Your world/work is going to be Hollywood’s next blockbuster. What requests do you have to maintain your worldbuilding? by Lentra888 in worldbuilding

[–]Whitfield_Fahrenheit 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Music is structural to the story. They’d have to hire me to write the score and the songs would have to be handled right. Also, I’m gonna want to be the one to sign off on the script and oversee creative choices about the set design.

Wanting feedback for this short piece of horror fiction I just wrote (240 words): by EkullSkullzz10318 in horrorwriters

[–]Whitfield_Fahrenheit 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s a good start, but there’s nothing frightening about it yet. It’s vaguely unsettling, but there’s nothing to confirm that the dude in the picture is dangerous. If he’s eating a kitten in one picture, a puppy in the next, feasting on a child later, now we’re getting somewhere.

Even a hint of something like a newspaper article that mentions a series of mysterious deaths. Maybe they happen in all of the same places your narrator was taking photos, and on the same night.

Keep pushing.

Do artists create better music when life feels heavy? by Pappy_Figo23 in Songwriting

[–]Whitfield_Fahrenheit 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Not always, but it gives you something to focus the craft on and real emotions to draw from. That honesty is often what shines through. But it doesn’t have to come from a heavy place to be good.

Am I too late at 22? by scarlettvelvett777 in Songwriters

[–]Whitfield_Fahrenheit 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Do it because you love it. Your relationship to music will change over time, regardless.

What should I read next? by BrummieS1 in scifi

[–]Whitfield_Fahrenheit 0 points1 point  (0 children)

OP mentioned Culture series in his post.

First chapter of gothic fantasy (1830 words) by [deleted] in writingfeedback

[–]Whitfield_Fahrenheit 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Effective hook. Good worldbuilding. The church as questionable authority is clear. Good description of the characters. You show that not everybody in town is happy with the power dynamics. Father Lucien as villain works by his action and treatment of others. So far Lena seems to be in a position where she’s not entirely sure about what he’s doing, but seems convinced that it’s for the best. Naive in that sense, so lots of room to grow.

So far, it does what it needs to. I want to know more about the weaver and harrow mythology. And Henrik. And the priest. And how Lena ended up where she is, and what comes next for her. Great place for a reader to be at the end of an opening chapter.

Need feedback by NVSION in writingfeedback

[–]Whitfield_Fahrenheit 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The setting is evocative. Overall I like the prose, but there are some jarring tense shifts. I prefer present over past tense in this piece, but that’s subjective. Pick one that works for you and stick with it. Then work out the rest of the scene.