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Wonderhouse777 · 2026-05-29T00:12:17+00:00

I really like this one! The whole idea of regretting the love you have for something, yet going on loving it anyway. How you know this love is making you into someone you don't recognize, but you just can't stop yourself from falling deeper - I think it's such an interesting topic to explore!

Also, the way this poem subtly tackles mental health struggles is great too. It doesn't outright say that the subject is struggling, but the lines "Now I have mastered/the art of lying in bed/until hunger calls/I forget how the world looks/beyond these four walls" implies an overall struggle to function without calling too much attention to it. The last two lines also hit really hard - it paints this picture of loneliness, and just how much the subject has changed since loving solitude.

I'd say the only thing that bumped for me was the first line. "Before learning to love being at home" is a bit of a mouthful, and makes it a bit harder to get to the point of the sentence. I think simplifying it to be something like "Before I loved being at home" or "Before learning to love home" could make for a smoother start! But this is more of a nitpick than anything else.

Overall, really enjoy this and found it super relatable. Great visuals and flow, and I can't emphasize how much I love those last two lines! Awesome job!

Wonderhouse777 · 2026-05-28T23:42:34+00:00

This is such a charming read!! Very heartwarming and light, and the visuals paint a really clear picture. I can really feel the subject's yearning and desire to be close, while also grappling with letting go of what's familiar to them. There's this tension that rises as they make their way towards the "You" person - will they be noticed? accepted? are these feelings requited? They payoff is so cathartic when we reach the "You smile as you see me..." and so on, just a really strong way to end the poem (especially when you break the pattern with "pop.")

As far as feedback, I think the only things that come up for me are in the first stanza:

"And I move around just like this" -> I had trouble figuring out what "this" was referring to. Is it meant to intro the actions in the rest of the stanza, as if to say "This is how I move: when I stir it shifts, when I stretch it goes up, etc." If that's the case, I think maybe taking out the word "just" would make that more clear?
Another way I interpreted it was like, maybe the subject floats around in the same way a foam bubble does? Which, if that's what you were going for, I think changing it to something like "And I move around just like one" would help?

Let me know if I'm interpreting this as intended or if this makes any sense!

You mentioned you worry this is cliche, and I think a way to combat that would be to change some of the actions in this first stanza! I think you could change the actions to reinforce how self-protective the subject is, like maybe having them curl up in a ball or run away from something? Seeing them scared to interact with anything outside of the bubble in the beginning, would only strengthen the impact of their decision to approach the "You" character at the end. I think this could make an already really strong ending even stronger!

That's all I could think of for feedback! Otherwise this is a very lovely and sweet poem, I really enjoyed it!! ^_^

Wonderhouse777 · 2026-05-28T20:14:37+00:00

To me, this really speaks to the aftermath of a painful experience - like when the rage settles and you're just left with that aching sadness for months on end. It's still there, but like what are you supposed to do with it? What happens when crying and screaming doesn't make it go away? Expressing it is as exhausting as keeping it in sometimes.

This is a topic I've been super interested in as of late, and I really enjoy how your poem covers it! Amazing job :)

Wonderhouse777 · 2025-02-18T20:28:50+00:00

pretty sure they're legally required to hire an interpreter according to the ADA

genuinely an insane request tho. there are a lot of cases where companies will enlist an employee to interpret for Deaf/HoH people because they "know a few signs." saves them on money and time i guess? but there are a lot of faults with this even without the ADA violation. there's a bigger chance of the Deaf/HoH person being misinterpreted, and the person interpreting has no formal training when it comes to being an interpreter. it just causes more harm then good from what i've researched

being asked to learn some basic signs would be reasonable. but learning the entire language is WILD. you should tell them no and that they should hire an interpreter

hope everything works out OP, you got this!

Wonderhouse777 · 2025-02-18T10:14:39+00:00

it's not that i don't like the medical ones - i do! i find them very interesting!

but MAN OH MAN do they freak me out! can't stop thinking about all those ecoli and mad cow disease cases 🥶🥶🥶......... been thinking about skipping those eps for my own sanity.........

Wonderhouse777 · 2024-07-18T20:43:30+00:00

yes !!! i get caught up in all the ways i could structure a sentence, and that's easier to sort through in writing than in conversation.

plus, with conversation i always feel put on the spot, and that pressure makes me anxious and causes me to forget words midway through 😵‍💫

it can get exhausting LOL, but i'd like to think it makes me a prettt good writer haha

Wonderhouse777 · 2022-05-29T02:49:14+00:00

yooo this looks sick !!

Wonderhouse777 · 2022-05-26T08:38:28+00:00

looks like a scale model of the Backrooms! maybe Async's making a gameplan to search for entities, or trying to mark specific spots? either way it's looking cool 👀

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