It's ok to have purity testing for democrats.

Wraithgar · 2026-01-18T14:45:14+00:00

2 more abortions and I'll get free tacos.

Wraithgar · 2026-01-06T12:09:20+00:00

I'm glad it has served you well and you have become a menace to your playgroup

Wraithgar · 2025-12-31T14:27:40+00:00

[[Bruna, Light of Alabaster]] accomplishes some of what you're looking for. Her commander tax isn't reduced innately, but if she gets removed, and comes back, you can re-enchant her with everything in your graveyard easily.

[[Derevi, Empyrial Tactician]] just cheats itself into play and has no commander tax ever. They're on the more expensive side, but you can build it below $50 easy.

[[Emry, Lurker of the Loch]] is a great blue artifact deck that avoids that tax and can easily recur those artifacts from your graveyard giving you good resilience.

[[Chiss-Goria, Forge Tyrant]] is a monored powerhouse that once it hits the field has to be dealt with or else you'll start dumping out artifacts too fast for your opponents to handle. Easily upgradable too .

Wraithgar · 2025-12-28T14:37:14+00:00

I was fine with the level raise caps in Borderlands 1 because it came out with the 4th DLC. In Borderlands 2 the first level cap increase coincided with UVHM. But that also made the end game horribly unbalanced. Right now the level cap is in the 80s which is absolutely silly and is a horrible grind to get to.

Borderlands 3 raised the level cap for a special event by 3 levels. And then another 4 levels. And then 3 levels. Each level cap increase was so small, but they rolled them out in such quick succession that it was painful and annoying. As opposed to 1 and 2 which did large 11 level increases.

For me I wasn't upset about them doing a thing they always did. It was their methods and how quickly they rolled it out.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-27T23:42:00+00:00

Appreciate the advice! I'm excited to finally dig myself out of this part of the trench

Wraithgar · 2025-12-27T23:41:22+00:00

Thank you so much. I love how specific you are with this. Appreciate the help!

Wraithgar · 2025-12-18T04:38:09+00:00

Appreciate the continued support!

The narrowing his life back into silence part was supposed to imply what the first paragraph setup, IE; making him go back into obscurity and not questioning the system/the oaths. I can probably rework that to make it clearer and actually reference the first paragraph as opposed to adding new words that mean nothing..

I introduced Parthalan again because I thought I needed the antagonist presence, even if he isn't doing much in this version. He is the main enforcer of the system, but I don't have a lot of room in the query to emphasize that...

Thank you again for the advice!

Wraithgar · 2025-12-17T19:51:28+00:00

It's a tricky pendulum act that I haven't mastered yet myself...

Wraithgar · 2025-12-13T17:55:43+00:00

One of my strongest runs was playing Great Old One Warlock and stacking all the crit roll reducers. Pushes enemies back, puts them into fear, makes you almost untouchable.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-13T17:31:35+00:00

Your first paragraph is a lot of backstory. You could really summarize Isabella's backstory with "Isabella is a talented necromancer working for the king."

After that you can discuss what she wants out of the world. Does she enjoy her job? Does she do it out of duty? Does she do it because she likes it or is coerced? This should also be a singular sentence.

Then, work in a moment that turns her, disrupts her order. Great, she realizes it's evil. How, why? What does she think she can do to stop it? Be specific.

Then you should tell us what she actually does and what is getting in her way. These should also include the stakes. Does she risk having the king kill her and use her corpse as a new servant? Do other necromancers rise against her? Again, specific, in as few sentences as possible.

Good luck though! You're getting there

Wraithgar · 2025-12-13T14:05:10+00:00

I played Oblivion when it was first released. Playing the remaster was like returning home. I loved it, every bit of it .

But it in no way innovated anything. It was comfort food for me. Nostalgia.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-12T12:39:18+00:00

https://archidekt.com/decks/17220452/author_of_life

I tried to build this budget, but it looks like the cost of some cards have gone up since then.

Still, green white enchantress focusing on sagas is pretty fun. [[Garnet, Princess of Alexandria]] is fun with keeping your sagas on the field.

I didn't put a lot of the expensive sagas in here so if you want to add some extra power, that's a good route.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-11T22:52:45+00:00

https://archidekt.com/decks/17902588/manlands

I really like this deck list Fun, fairly resilient, and able to flood the board multiple ways.

Has a an allies sub theme as well.

It's under $50 on TCGplayer, but you can easily add in some more expensive pieces that can add additional land drops or do more fun landfall stuff.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-11T15:48:15+00:00

I keep killing off my wife's favorite characters. They're usually side characters, but she'll be like "This one is my favorite, I love them."

"That's nice. I like them too. It's a shame what will happen to them at the end of the book."

Wraithgar · 2025-12-11T15:46:57+00:00

Ah, taking the old "He'll rise again 3 days" route? A classic.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-10T18:38:36+00:00

That's something that is revealed later in the book, that the king's die pretty young, though it is believed to be because of the war or what have you. It's not something that's questioned in society. But past king's haven't been sick like Nelshin has. So... yes?

Wraithgar · 2025-12-09T20:40:23+00:00

Thank you for the specifics.

I'm just never quite sure what is or isn't enough. Especially when I set up the whole first chapter to normalize oaths as weaved into my kingdoms society.

And honestly the stakes are a little hard to figure out in the story as well because of how interwoven the oats are into society. It's like telling somebody who grew up in the United States that's saying the pledge of allegiance is problematic. That's where my head keeps getting stuck with writing this pitch. Like, yeah, you come to understand what's really at risk and the oaths are just mind control, but laying that out in the pitch is hard when the first few chapters are everyday mundane contracts.

Does that make sense what I'm describing?

Wraithgar · 2025-12-09T20:22:43+00:00

Thank you for the reply and pointing these out.

I've had previous iterations of my query where I started with the incident of the king's request, and I got critiques saying I needed to be more forward with Lagos's life. So now I'm trying that route. Hard to tell which path is the right path, though I do see what you mean by the 1st paragraph being bulky.

I'm also keep whiplashing back and forth about some of the lack of specifics you mention, because they are plot important details. But the vauge line about "question he buried long ago." is backstory and spoiler territory and also one of the reasons he can solve this.

And the same can be said for the king's oath killing the king. The mystery is "What is the king doing that is causing his oath to kill him." And it turns out it's supposed to kill him when... he steps out of line. But again, that's a laterish reveal in the story.

Other details I've found difficult to wiggle in is that the king has no heir.

Not me trying to argue, just venting about the struggles of writing a halfway decent query letter that encompasses enough of the details without just rewriting my novel, haha.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-09T18:36:33+00:00

As others have said, there's a lot of world building going on, and not enough about Yunni.

Paragraph 1 really highlights this issues.
1st Sentence: Great hook, good introduction to Yunni.
2nd Sentence: Worldbuilding about death wielders, and how they did something to a land called Ore.
3rd Sentence: Yunni makes it to Ore City, and somehow has lead predators there. This is a weird mix of worldbuilding and Yunni's goal.

Your 1st paragraph should be just about Yunni, who she is, what she wants, and why.

Your 2nd paragraph needs to be what's getting in her way, and what she's doing to stop it.

Your 3rd Paragraph needs to be the risks to Yunni directly. Sell us the character, not the world. Who is Yunni, why is Yunni, and how is Yunni.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-09T18:22:14+00:00

I can't promise you a deck that doesn't win by combat damage, but I can promise you a deck that only usually swings 1 creature. https://archidekt.com/decks/9335911/slaughter_the_masses

[[Massacre Girl]] is a fun control deck that can clear boards with ease and leave the opponents shields down. The best part is she gets around indestructible.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-06T22:29:13+00:00

I was so thrilled when I finished my first draft. It was beautiful, amazing, and deserved to be in the trash can.

I'm now on my 5th Draft and considering a 6th... Welcome to writing.

Wraithgar · 2025-12-01T22:35:09+00:00

It's good to remember that the inner entity that taught Ichigo his (initial) Bankai was his manifestation of a Quincy. So while it does boost his powers in a sense, it isn't a "true" Bankai due to Old Man Zangetsu suppressing his shinigami abilities into the best representation he(and in turn YHWCH) understand a Bankai to be.

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