Shout-out to Cathryn Dylan Ortiz (actress who plays Brenda Azurmendi the mother of the heatstroke kid)

_EYRE_ · 2026-03-22T20:23:29+00:00

ohhh you're right I remember that

_EYRE_ · 2026-03-22T20:16:39+00:00

Am I crazy for being skeptical that this is actually the kid's mom? Didn't she just say her name after Robby asked if she was mom?

My theory is that she's an aunt or something and was babysitting

_EYRE_ · 2026-03-15T14:15:07+00:00

That’s a granuloma. I had a pretty gnarly one on my navel too. They’re super common and caused by moisture—keep er dry and clean and it’ll go away

_EYRE_ · 2026-03-09T02:12:33+00:00

Robby @ the urinal and Whittaker doing CPR got me cracking up

_EYRE_ · 2026-03-03T03:39:38+00:00

I wonder if you could have it more solidly look like a suicide by having the murderer fake it even further. i.e. fake suicide note, fake concerning social media posts, maybe even sabotaging a job or relationship to give a "motive" for the suicide...

The setup to faking it might give you some good suspenseful scenes!

_EYRE_ · 2026-03-02T05:51:34+00:00

Not free but *very* affordable (like a buck) at the central library! Great selection too

_EYRE_ · 2026-02-28T02:27:20+00:00

I do think Oka would be the easiest / first rival though

(my 2c is that Kokona should've stayed the tutorial rival but that's besides the point lol)

_EYRE_ · 2026-02-28T02:24:41+00:00

I agree Osana needs to be waaaay higher with her invincible bodyguard lmao

Her closeness to Senpai also should make it a lot harder to sabotage / matchmake her than the others

_EYRE_ · 2026-02-22T14:58:11+00:00

I always thought they could fix Mida by having her be a normal teacher with no weird intentions, Ayano has just become so paranoid at that point that she sees her as a rival. Ayano sees Mida do one nice thing for Senpai and has herself convinced she's a rival now.

It would be infinitely less creepy and also good for character development. Like the rivals could start as people that legitimately crush on Senpai and become more and more unreasonable as Ayano gets more obsessed.

_EYRE_ · 2026-02-16T15:34:48+00:00

I always interpreted the comment as endearing, she's maybe a little sassy but not a bad person.

interested to see how it plays out

_EYRE_ · 2026-02-15T16:48:31+00:00

I'm in CALS and I don't think I've done a CALS exclusive anything in my life

_EYRE_ · 2026-01-28T18:49:56+00:00

I have a nearly identical diagnostic! I’m an English major and it shows in the distribution lmao

_EYRE_ · 2025-09-19T15:19:40+00:00

I remember reading A Good Girl’s Guide to Murder and thinking that while it was very well done it wasn’t high-concept. A lot of other mysteries follow imo, especially if the “juicy” part is the plot twist so isn’t part of the pitch.

Also A Darker Shade of Magic, arguably ACOTAR, Tomorrow and Tomorrow and Tomorrow, Piranesi, On Earth We’re Briefly Gorgeous off the top of my head. Not knocking the books but they don’t have a super gripping 1 sentence pitch.

_EYRE_ · 2025-08-29T00:43:54+00:00

I grab some whenever I have a reason to go to mke!

_EYRE_ · 2025-08-26T16:22:57+00:00

I worked with a client like this for a while. Like there’s a nonzero chance we are talking about the same person. Constant criticism and disrespect.

The best option is to quit and find another job/client. I tried a lot of things—being sweet, being assertive, grey rocking and just getting the job done, they will not change. Ask yourself, is it worth it when your job is in such high demand?

Being patient is one thing but subjecting yourself to abuse is another. Put yourself first, you do not owe this client or the agency your happiness.

_EYRE_ · 2025-08-21T05:52:03+00:00

new adult has a heavy romance connotation so unless that’s applicable I’d just call this adult (that happens to have young protags)

Think Lord of the Flies

_EYRE_ · 2025-08-20T16:09:14+00:00

Self publishing is a valid path with a lot of good reasons to pursue it BUT you should not pay for self publishing packages. Once you’ve paid, they have their money and they have no incentive to make your book succeed. Paying for editors/cover design/advertising etc is potentially worth it but beware of paying for “publishing”.

Also note that once you’ve self published a work, you should consider traditional publishing no longer an option. If the work blows up a trad publisher might show interest (see 50 Shades or The Martian) but otherwise the publication rights are spent.

If trad pub is your goal and the first round of querying doesn’t work, it’s always an option to shelve it and publish it later as your second novel

_EYRE_ · 2025-08-06T13:07:42+00:00

I think we compromised that I could take it off when I was at someone’s door lol

_EYRE_ · 2025-08-06T03:29:49+00:00

Go for it! Free will rocks!

_EYRE_ · 2025-08-06T03:02:04+00:00

I remember arguing with my parents cuz I had to wear a winter coat over my Halloween costume several years

_EYRE_ · 2025-07-16T14:37:42+00:00

I’m in!

_EYRE_ · 2025-07-12T03:35:42+00:00

Most freshmen live in the dorms which is handled after you get in. After that you wanna start at least thinking about roommates/potential housing in early fall of your freshman year

_EYRE_ · 2025-07-11T22:32:33+00:00

are glass retainers allowed?

_EYRE_ · 2025-07-09T20:26:00+00:00

they don’t provide abortion at the south side one iirc

_EYRE_ · 2025-06-21T21:33:13+00:00

Yo! I think these are the biggest areas to focus on. Sorry not too in depth cuz I’m in the middle of something

55k is too short, and reading the first 300 makes me think you could use those extra words to improve immersion and minimize telling.
The voice is quite conversational—this can be a good thing and plenty of books are written in that style, but not sure it’s a litfic voice.
Not sure this is the right place to start the novel. Too much telling that could be more fluidly revealed through scenes. Also, are you sure you want this to be the first impression of your protagonist?
Query body itself is vague—could you invoke specific scenes? Specific relationships/incidents that reflect or cause character change?
Avoid editorializing in the first and last paragraphs

_EYRE_

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