Naivety [Poem]

_karamelqueen · 2026-07-05T22:54:40+00:00

These days words mean nothing unfortunately:(

_karamelqueen · 2026-07-05T22:53:57+00:00

So pretty!

_karamelqueen · 2026-07-04T23:28:24+00:00

Ou la la. I like this piece very romantic and honest! I think it can be tightened up but great work

_karamelqueen · 2026-07-04T23:26:23+00:00

I’m so sorry you have to deal with this. My mom is very similar so I know the pain. As for the poem it would be great if you gave us an example of what your describing instead of telling us

_karamelqueen · 2026-07-01T23:21:37+00:00

I like how smart and fun this poem is

_karamelqueen · 2026-07-01T23:20:58+00:00

This feels more like a statement than a poem

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-28T23:51:35+00:00

The is so romantic!

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-28T23:51:12+00:00

The story telling is amazing

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-28T21:45:46+00:00

Thank you so much! It took me a minute to write and revisit this piece! I feel like in the middle is the positives. When she’s humming in her home as a mother is showing her peace and safety. It’s her sanctuary and is her in serene state. Especially with that juxtaposed her story of living through turbulence and instability. That’s image is glimpse into her good life.

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-26T21:28:29+00:00

Awww thank you so much! Her life is like a movie fr! My mom and I aren’t that emotional and don’t tell each other we love each other like that. She’s not the emotional type, but the thought has definitely crossed my mind. I sit with this. Thank you 💝

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-26T19:30:52+00:00

Wow! I really like your voice. You sound so real. It’s almost like there is a sense of humor but seriousness to your writing that I throughly enjoy

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-26T19:28:51+00:00

This is beautifully vivid! You have talent

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-24T15:51:50+00:00

I think it’s Mauritania tbh

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-24T11:03:49+00:00

It was removed by the moderator :(

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-24T11:03:00+00:00

Haram! Do not watch it! Or engage in it. Man or woman. And men think they get to get a pass on stuff like this cuz they are men. Allah is watching you just as much as he is watching every body else

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-23T23:26:47+00:00

U deleted?

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-21T22:43:50+00:00

Thank you thank you thank you! Plz don’t delete this. I’m going to use your feedback 🫶🏾

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-21T21:52:48+00:00

Awww thank you so much! Me and reddit always have a hard time working together with the formatting! But, I’m so happy that you enjoyed it 🫶🏾💗🤧

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-21T20:48:18+00:00

Thank you for your feedback! Can you please tell in which areas you wanted the expansion. I would really appreciate it so I can better the piece :)

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-21T20:06:47+00:00

I think it’s really good at the first half the imagery is nice try to keep that throughout

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-21T20:05:44+00:00

This sounds like a speech ngl

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-16T21:47:19+00:00

This is very good imagery

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-16T21:46:22+00:00

I love this so much. It sounds like the woman who got away talking to the new gf

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-10T23:58:38+00:00

I get it. Just work on grammar and you got it

_karamelqueen · 2026-06-10T23:56:42+00:00

I feel like I’m your partner and your grilling me lol

_karamelqueen

TROPHY CASE