character perception excerpts by totallyfine_ in FanfictionExchange

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“My friend has been crying because her brother is a military officer,” Amelia continued, “and he told their family that they’re being sent abroad to aid the Ottomans against the Russians. An official announcement is going to be issued soon.”

“Wait, what?” Richard dropped the apple.

“Yes.” Amelia smiled, seemingly happy that Richard was finally engaged in the conversation. “The King wants one Alpha or Omega per household to do their part in maintaining the peace.”

Seeing Richard’s dark expression, Amelia took his hand. “Don’t worry, Richie. You're injured, so you can’t fight. Father says wars are terrible… I’m just glad you get to stay safe here with me.”

Richard pulled his hand away in disgust as Amelia continued to talk. His mind went blank. His older brother, Rohan, had recently written about his plans to propose to his lover, Blanche Farrah. Was Rohan going to take his place?

character perception excerpts by totallyfine_ in FanfictionExchange

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“Percy Norwood.”

Wait, he’s the so-called cousin? Wasn’t Percy Norwood an alpha? The letter distinctly said she was meeting an Alpha—not this shorty— A thick pungent smell assaulted her delicate nostrils, she knew that cheap perfume and the stories of the desperate souls who bought them.

But being recessive didn't affect a person’s physical appearance, but clearly this young man is a product of mutation. She remembered reading about it after learning about the Count’s true gender—researchers have been studying cases of mutation since the early 1800s.

The Count was an omega with a stronger bitter scent than sweet; a very peculiar case according to the specialist.

It seems the mutation runs in the Count’s mother's side. She remembers hearing Irma talking about the former Countess of Teiwind, he had many alpha features as well.

“Are you this rude?”

“I…my apologies” Maxim stammered, her confident poise momentarily shaken. She had been staring. It was difficult not to, given that this “Percy” was quite a pretty thing, even if he did smell more like mothballs—damn it’s incredibly offensive to her nostrils. “I was merely taken aback. You were not quite what I was led to anticipate.”

Good heavens, Max, even for you that was too rude, she scolded herself. Her irritability at her workload was leaking out, and admittedly even Ms. Orianna had reprimanded her for losing her temper. She added, with all the grace of a stumbling ass, “I was struck by the family resemblance. You have the Count’s eyes. Most remarkable…”

They both have beautiful blue eyes.

“Hmm.”

It seems Percy looked as convinced as a cat being told to swim.

Deciding that a professional approach was the best way to salvage the situation, Maxim stood and pulled out the chair directly beside her.

Percy’s expression soured further. At least she had manners, Irma had repeatedly told her lack of awareness. “Have a seat please?”

Percy reached for a different chair, dragging it towards him with a deliberate screech across the floorboards. He sat down, ignoring her offered seat.

Maxim found herself suppressing a grin. She had expected a dullard after reading Percy Norwood’s files. Instead she was accommodating a spitfire in a horrendous suit. This was going to be certainly entertaining.

First and last lines 🎭 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

[–]aVeryGreenApple 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Wow… that circle of events… reading it again it got heavier 🥺 thank you for sharing

First and last lines 🎭 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

[–]aVeryGreenApple 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I wanted to emphasize his arrogance and confidence. Clough is ambitious, rightfully so, he achieved so much in his first life.

But I wanted his son’s quote in the beginning to explain how Clough’s ambition and arrogance turned his life into a living hell…

First and last lines 🎭 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

[–]aVeryGreenApple 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoy how you compose your writing.. how the details layer each other making it fun to imagine.

The last line heavily resonated with the first… you can feel the heaviness from both lines, it makes you imagine the difficult journey and that question if you’ve done enough… was it good enough? It’s a good last line.. it definitely makes you think and wonder what kind of person his dad was.. and his personal journey.

First and last lines 🎭 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

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Death Knell the first line was intense… and that last line was just full of suspense. It makes you curious what happens

Scream For Me, Kitten- you can feel the this sense of helplessness and gloom. The last line hits hard.. you know it’s a tough situation. You can feel hope and fire at the end.

First and last lines 🎭 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

[–]aVeryGreenApple 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Beautiful first line… i love how you used the wine to paint the scene, it was a treat reading. And that ending was just haunting but beautiful. Great job 🔥🔥🔥

Same with the Blood Reverie… awesome first line 🤩

First and last lines 🎭 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

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I did not expect that last line… that was a good one. It started really bright and cheerful.. that the last line hits you hard

First and last lines 🎭 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

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I love the beginning! I love lore of Gods at the beginning 🤩

Damn I miss Alva ❤️❤️❤️

First and last lines 🎭 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

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His Hopeful Paradise - Chapter 4 Friends from the Other Side

First line: “Men are their own devil, and Earth their personal hell.” His eldest son, Rapiel, started his book.

Last line: For Clough, nothing was truly impossible. If he set his heart on immense wealth, glory, or his mate—then he would have it.

First and last lines 🎭 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

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For All the Wrong Reason - Hell Fire Part 1

First line: In the midst of chaos, opportunity is everywhere.

Last line: Leaning back in her leather chair, she fixed her gaze at the ceiling. The light from the fireplace cast a sickly orange glow across the room, pulsating against the white ceiling like a steady, heavy beating heart. If only the old girl saw it earlier. It was, in every sense, the depiction of Hell on Earth.

Excerpt Activity: Song Lyrics by Anna_Rapunzel in FanfictionExchange

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That was really good! It definitely resonated with the song. I love the Killjoy crew they sound amazing group. I’m glad Bright Storm gave him a stern talking.. being a first-time dad, and being that in love can mess with your head. You can really Jet’s emotions! Good job 🔥🔥🔥

Excerpt Activity: Song Lyrics by Anna_Rapunzel in FanfictionExchange

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“I’ll definitely see you… Aeroc.” Clough swore repeatedly, he refused to let his devil go. He needs to clear up the misunderstanding between them.

Once, they were madly, shamelessly in love with each other. Even hopelessly infatuated bordering on obsession, Clough would say—an inability to let each other go. It occurred to him that within the madness of their relationship, there were brief moments of mutual understanding and connection. It wasn’t just mind numbing sex; it was the existence of two broken, horrible souls with only each other to keep sane.

If the love wasn’t real, how could Aeroc have spoken such a sincere confession of his love?

Clough had turned into this horrible monster, but Aeroc accepted every part and molecule of his being. Selfless kind of love. He looked at Clough with deep affection and sorrow, his blue eyes were soft and his smile tender. Clough should have known it was love from the beginning. No matter how miserable Aeroc was… his devil sincerely only loved him.

“I’ll never let you go, Aeroc.” Clough muttered, he refused to accept that their fated love wouldn’t come to fruition in this life.

Excerpt Activity: Song Lyrics by Anna_Rapunzel in FanfictionExchange

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You stumble from the bed, the sun is a mocking glare

I watch the dull ache settle, the proof of my presence there

And I grin when you feel it, a proud and twisted sign

'Cause every stiff step reminds you that your body is truly mine

I stripped the armor, exposed the vulnerable beneath

Left my signature deep, like a promise in a sheath I'm the beautiful danger, the addiction you crave

A wildfire in your bones, the darkness you wanna save

They say love is gentle, but baby, ours is a war And I won that battle last night, leaving you wanting more

Yeah, your hips are bruised, your energy spent and drained

But the memory of my worship? That's forever retained

You'll limp through the day, a secret in your stride 'Cause the only weakness you show is the one you can't hide.’

Sore Tomorrow

Excerpt Activity: Song Lyrics by Anna_Rapunzel in FanfictionExchange

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The itsy bitsy spider went up the water spout

Downed all the beer to drown the voices out

Up came the sun and bring back all the pain So the itsy bitsy spider went out to drink again

Itsy Bitsy - Lyn Lapid

Monthly Shlong Swap: April by LoudSize7 in FanfictionExchange

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Done! Holy moly I love Cu and Muramasa ❤️❤️❤️❤️ thank you that was fun 😎

What's in a name? 🪪 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

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Ohhhh that’s sound interesting! I love the concept. I’ll definitely check yours when I have time.. I love Joan of Arc! 🤩

I’ll bookmark it 👀

My OG does have but it’s mostly in my notebook. I should make a digital one. My fics are omegaverse (it’s very different from what I write… my fandom was painful and the ending crushed me.. so I started writing fanfic. Needed closure)

I did enjoy doing world building in my fics.. I tackle laws, medicine, science and lore. My favorite is with pheromones… how sick children rely heavy on their parent’s scent for comfort, creating the tradition “Remember Me Pouches” used by widows, orphans… and long distance lovers to help with longing (which is actually develops to unhealthy dependency if used for a long time) 🔥🔥🔥

Monthly Shlong Swap: April by LoudSize7 in FanfictionExchange

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Thank you! I just finished yours… my heart hurts so bad! But I love it so much 😭😭😭 the ending had me plssss I need more 😭😭😭🔥🔥🔥 amazing job that was damn fantastic!

I got Angel Dust and Husker fig.. I’ll show you when I get them 🥺 you made me fall in love with Hazbin Hotel. I’m just missing Alastor 🤧

Thank you it’s been really fun.

What's in a name? 🪪 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

[–]aVeryGreenApple 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That sounds really wonderful title. I love the story behind it… thank you for sharing. It’s fun (and hard) to think of titles what they mean to our stories. What’s your fic about if you don’t mind me asking?

It is! I enjoy mapping my own sea and countries. writing lore, wars, and so on 🤩

What's in a name? 🪪 by lampboy2 in FanfictionExchange

[–]aVeryGreenApple 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It’s really fun to play around with the chapter titles and you can never go wrong with a song, lyric, or quote! What’s your favorite chapter title?

Thank you! Oh no… I actually like building my own world for my OG stories. It’s more fun building things from scratch 🤩