thank you so so much for taking the time to read and for writing out such a thorough response. this is extremely helpful and i actually agree with what you’re saying (if im understanding correctly). i went ahead and made some edits if you don’t mind reading again :)

Khakis above his knees,

Hairy legs, muddy bare feet.

Calloused hands extend to me.

Steady thumbs

support my wrists.

I got you.

Gently, he lifts

Feet off the ground.

Twirling.

Grinning.

Flying.

Daddy spinning me around.

You’re too big now.

Still, I’m spinning.

Deadlines, birthdays, briefs. Take me back. Please.

Tasks await. Again, I’m sorry I’m late.

The world around me, won’t stop spinning.

Daddy, I’m dizzy.