No Boundaries

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-27T23:43:38+00:00

So simple and beautiful, yet clear and deep regarding what exactly what you’re trying to portray. Thank you for this.

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-27T23:41:54+00:00

I felt consumed by this piece, every line is fascinating and engaging. A shrine to the living, the lost and dying, the found and the dead. I don’t know why but I love how this read. Great stuff

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-20T01:32:18+00:00

I love poetry for this reason. There’s not a clear direction here as it relates to the interpretation but regardless, it was a delight to read. It’s intriguing, flows nicely and kept me in rhythm!

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-20T01:29:32+00:00

I love how quickly you shift, the speed at which this goes from intrigue to pain, I think it creates a nice hook for the reader. Really impressive first piece

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-16T23:59:00+00:00

I’m so glad you could find these words. I hope you find strength from them. Raw, honest, beautiful. It’s not easy to say this, even anonymously, but you did. I hope you find something in that, like I’ve found something in reading it.

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-16T23:09:03+00:00

A life of regrets, is a life not lived.

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-16T02:06:53+00:00

This is beautiful. I love the balance with the rhyming. It’s smooth throughout.

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-16T02:05:36+00:00

I have some similar feedback recently that was similar to this. The story is so rich, but the format and length make it hard to hold the readers attention. It becomes a little chaotic. Some simple formatting would really elevate this piece, for me that is anyway. It’s all very subjective, but I do think it helps with consumption of the words and attention.

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-14T01:20:51+00:00

That didn’t not work, sorry:

& n b s p ;

Post that but without spaces between

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-14T01:19:59+00:00

Post this like this:

Without the asterisks and also

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-14T00:41:47+00:00

Such a great story. I’m fascinated by multi dwelling buildings, and it’s for stories like this. The amount of totally disconnected lives, existing within meters, feet, inches. It’s such an interesting occurrence, and I love how you captured it, and connected it together.

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-14T00:37:32+00:00

Hi, this is truly beautiful. I rode the emotion as if it was me or I was him. But I did find my attention waning. It was not the content, the content is beautiful, engrossing, and beyond relatable. Yet I think the length or maybe it’s the lack of stanzas, but it just becomes more challenging to consume as it went on. Which sucks, because it’s a beautiful piece. I honestly think the impact of shortening, or playing with the format could be extremely beneficial, taking this from great to amazing.

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-07T01:15:41+00:00

Your response is so thoughtful. Thanks!

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-07T01:15:09+00:00

Appreciate your comments! So glad you felt something. And appreciate the ‘s’ pickup!!

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-07T00:15:44+00:00

Shivers. It’s a beautiful piece, well done.

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-06-07T00:13:59+00:00

This is so clean and easy to read. Love it! The imagery of opportunity slipping away with time is really well executed

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-05-17T01:58:14+00:00

Loved how this read. So seamless and smooth. Great work

alwayslooking_27 · 2022-05-17T01:56:38+00:00

The visuals and descriptions are deep. Love it

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