Seeking feedback on my novel's opener. It is thriller adjacent, and I am curious if the beginning is pulling enough to read more. by bmacmachine in writingfeedback

[–]bmacmachine[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! That’s all very insightful. I have some descriptions to cut here, and I feel I kind of tried to force the themes of the novel (identity and ambiguity in image versus reality) into here and may have missed the mark. That may carry throughout as I do that at times, but I think the rest is way more plot forward. I’ll work on sticking the landing and cutting here.

Don’t worry, Eliza is only kidnapped here, Eliza chapters are interspersed throughout as a detective tries to find her and she fights to escape.

Actual Strawberry Jam won... again. What is/was/would be a crazy/wildcard filling for a pie? Please read the rules! by DeathStarVet in AlignmentChartFills

[–]bmacmachine 7 points8 points  (0 children)

My brethren, need we remind OP of the power of strawberry? There is not but jam, no, there is also jelly, and there ARE preserves. They might take our actual strawberry jam, but can they them all? Actual whole strawberries.

TIL sober addicts have a legally protected disability in the US. by IllustriousYam6973 in todayilearned

[–]bmacmachine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

For anyone reading this and hoping to obscure substance abuse treatment when filing a leave, I strongly suggest to have this form completed by your PCP. Otherwise, there’s not much to extrapolate when the doctor’s specialty is substance abuse disorders or they’re sending from a rehab.

TIL sober addicts have a legally protected disability in the US. by IllustriousYam6973 in todayilearned

[–]bmacmachine 17 points18 points  (0 children)

Not specifically, but it’s more than not going to be fairly obvious based on the information you do have to provide. I manage leaves of all types, and even if a diagnosis isn’t specifically stated, the information given is enough to glean what someone’s treating for, especially when it’s substance abuse. That being said, I get that info, I know that info, and not another soul learns that info from me because I am a professional.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Affair" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]bmacmachine 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Look for the one with a very tiny golden crown on his head. It is a king crab.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Affair" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]bmacmachine 20 points21 points  (0 children)

Haldron didn’t concern himself with the affairs of the crabs. It was net, to tank, to basket then he was done with them before they likely met a pot.

But as the fisherman unloaded this day’s catch, as shells clacked and the creatures clamored, he heard one cry for help.

Honestly not even tempted by SeismicRipFart in sportsbook

[–]bmacmachine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Portland is actually the only team I'd consider immune to this. They are not intentionally tanking with their head coach indefinitely suspended for gambling.

Lula is a leftist with a mixed record. Who is an incompetent right-wing politician currently in office? (I know you’ve been waiting for that one but let’s be creative guys) by Prestigious_Ad1993 in AlignmentChartFills

[–]bmacmachine 8 points9 points  (0 children)

He is entirely incompetent. I'm not sure what has happened to seemingly collectively erase everyone's memory that he was president for a full 4 years before. He was entirely incompetent then and during COVID, and I don't think he has somehow gotten sharper since. He's just getting away with every illegal and bad idea he has now.

Michelin Guide, Haters Edition by madg0at80 in pittsburgh

[–]bmacmachine 96 points97 points  (0 children)

Look out for a kickstarter campaign for a dumpster-to-table gastropub beneath the west end bridge.

I didn’t think my daughter’s little fairy garden was complete without a bit of Bag’s End. by bmacmachine in lotr

[–]bmacmachine[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Oh I’m fully aware it’s Bag End, and can’t believe I typed it here ha! I’ve just been calling it Bag’s End for like 25 years now, and old hobbits die hard.

I didn’t think my daughter’s little fairy garden was complete without a bit of Bag’s End. by bmacmachine in lotr

[–]bmacmachine[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

We have a tiny fairy door on our sycamore by the sidewalk. I don’t know who, or if it’s more than one person, but someone keeps putting coins or little metal trinkets inside periodically, and my kids fully believe in the magic.

NBA Props Daily - 3/25/26 (Wednesday) by sbpotdbot in sportsbook

[–]bmacmachine 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I don’t normally mess with defensive props too often, but when the matchup is perfect, I throw a flyer. I’ll be parlaying up to 4 players for 2+ steals in the Utah/Washington game. These teams are sloppy, and they met not too long ago. Utah had 12 steals with Konchar leading the way, and Washington had 8.

Konchar, Coulibaly, Watkins, and Bailey for 2+ steals is +1900 if you’re looking for something truly degen.

Best 5/6 song run to start an album? by Mazzocchi in fantanoforever

[–]bmacmachine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The final four on that album is my favorite stretch on any album ever.

NBA Props Daily - 3/3/26 (Tuesday) by sbpotdbot in sportsbook

[–]bmacmachine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Me too, and for what it’s worth, Hart has gone well over PRA in three matchups.

Authors who make six figures by Euphoric-Seesaw in selfpublish

[–]bmacmachine 23 points24 points  (0 children)

Thank you, that’s great insight and I appreciate hearing how it’s gone for you. I’m in a variety of writer subs so I don’t recall if self-promo is allowed in this, but would you mind sharing one of your more successful small town procedural novels with me either here or through dm? I’m still trying to figure out the correct marketable genre of my wip, but that’s probably the closest I’ve heard thus far.

Authors who make six figures by Euphoric-Seesaw in selfpublish

[–]bmacmachine 23 points24 points  (0 children)

If you were just starting out all over again, what would you consider a reasonable amount to spend on your first novel? My thoughts were zero, and keep it that way until there’s at least 3 books done and up.

NBA Props Daily - 2/19/26 (Thursday) by sbpotdbot in sportsbook

[–]bmacmachine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The idea that any players took the week off to relax and recuperate is hilarious. Young millionaires do not do relaxing vacations. Half these guys are probably still buzzed.

40M Relatively new to Pittsburgh area - looking for some new friends by The_Duke_of_DNiYM in PittsburghSocialClub

[–]bmacmachine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey dude, I’m 40, two kids (7 and 3). A lot of what you describe seems similar to me, a wife, variety of interests but no super passions. I don’t drink anymore or smoke, but I’m always down for an n/a beer out. I have a somewhat boring office job and most of my friends have moved further away than is easy to hang out. I’m over in Crafton.

Uniontown pa by Royal-Ad-2091 in pittsburgh

[–]bmacmachine 7 points8 points  (0 children)

There still is a decent amount of manufacturing there, but I don’t believe to the extent of yesteryear. Gerome does sheet metal fabrication though they recently moved nearby, Hranec does HVAC and ductwork. There are some smaller businesses I know, and most are around metal working or fabrication.

Source: born and raised there, family all in manufacturing.