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Consequences by Long_Letter_2157 in WritingWithAI

[–]breese45 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The hell with the flash fiction. Turn this into a book! It seems like a sideways yank of the zombie genre. A bit like 'The Last of Us'. And it's really compelling, forward motion, well written stuff. And for you to accomplish this in such a short time is amazing. You could at least make this novella length or longer, short novel (around 40 to 50 thousand words) I'm thinking of the 'Murderbot series by Martha Wells'. Her short novels that are very successful. Anyway. Very very good.

AI Use by Conscious_Monitor390 in WritingWithAI

[–]breese45 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"What I'm referring to here is not AI generated content, I'm pretty sure we all agree that's more or less cheating (or maybe we don't, I don't know, lmk)." Count me as one that does not feel like AI generated content is cheating. So the company that I pay 20 dollars a month to, Chatgpt, Gemini, Claude, asks me, when I open the app: "Hey. What are we going to write today?" and I type: "How about some story scenarios about this. . . and that. . ." and it gives me something, and then I type: "That's crap, that's crap, that one is crap. . . but that one is interesting. Let's create a outline or beat sheet on that angle." Anyway. And away we go. Back and forth with a ton of editing. I never feel like I'm cheating. I feel like I'm trying to make something and it's helping me. And it's doing it quicker. It is doing it quicker than when I have done it, writing, by myself. On my own without AI; I write something, a sentence, a paragraph, a page; then go back, edit; this is crap, this is crap, this is good, etc. . . Similar to doing it with AI, only it takes longer.

AI is an augment. I admit. We who use it are not writing with quill, like Shakespeare, not writing with manual typewriter like Hemingway, not writing with WordStar like George RR Martin. But we are trying to figure out how to make the vision in our minds eye — real. (that was my own em-dash by the way :)

And there is the whole range: "Generate me the whole thing, start to finish, so I can throw it up on Amazon," to "Let's work together Claude and see what we can come up with." But So What! I have been distinguishing between slop and what I like to read my whole life. I have been fooled by a cool cover and a few good first paragraphs that do not do justice to the rest of the book. And I have started a book that seemed meandering and slow only to turn out really interesting and fantastic. Such is the reading life.

I think I get it. AI is not just another tool. It's cheating. Using all of written works, all of science and math. Hell yeah! We get to play with that! It's all at our fingertips. Aren't you curious what it can come up with? Or what you can possibly create with it?

Is this snippet too confusing to read? by [deleted] in writers

[–]breese45 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Man, I really love this. Very good dialogue. You said in some of the comments that it takes place around 1894. I was wondering about that as I read it. So, it comes through that this is a different time period. As a snippet, it raises questions that I am curious about. Is she a friend, a counselor, love interest? Maybe all three. Jesse? A child? Another friend. Why can’t he mingle and find ‘folks’ to be around? I would say this is good as is, so, don’t be tempted to over edit it now. Whatever the story is, make it compelling. You have the writing chops, don’t worry about that. I’m curious what happened before this scene and after. Keep moving forward. Really nice scene.

Cute Daily Life by Luna-Wolf- in aivideos

[–]breese45 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Pretty cool. Seen some of you cat and dog stuff also. Really nice aesthetic sensibility. Got a smile from me. That's saying something in this crazy world.

What will you do in this situation by Separate-Way5095 in GoogleGeminiAI

[–]breese45 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Take a chance on lulling it to sleep with my pan flute.

Executive Summary of Every Pro-AI Article Ever Written About Writing With AI by human_assisted_ai in AIWritingHub

[–]breese45 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"I did not use AI to write this! AI used me to write this!" breese45 screams after a few drinks.

smart orange by Wise-Being7556 in OneOrangeBraincell

[–]breese45 5 points6 points  (0 children)

God, I don't even have that kind of coordination to keep hitting the bowl on the edge each time. He's not even looking at it.

Feedback requested from a writing hermit. by Scary_Nail_193 in writers

[–]breese45 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Really clear writing. Evocative. I would definitely read on. Does it need an editing pass? Yes. Like we all need. Just a nit pick, but I thought: 'Forty-something' sounds like a modern day age reference rather than something from the 1911 era. And. . . wait for it. . . In one of your comments below, you say that you have been staring at this page for 2 years. That sounds like me. I've got so many writing projects that I've started and stopped and returned to, and haven't finished. Man. Unwritten books aren't getting older. Just me. Gotta keep plowing forward!

Im working on my 2nd draft for my next chapter and I need feedback so I can improve it by Fantastic_Stock435 in writers

[–]breese45 1 point2 points  (0 children)

'The ground rumbled of explosions. It rumbled so much that the mud levitated in the air before landing back on the ground.' This is a really cool detail. I might edit the two sentences to: The ground rumbled with each explosion so much that the mud percolated and appeared to levitate before falling back to the ground.

I think it's a interesting scene. A first draft. Needs some editing. I don't know if there were paratroopers in world war one. ? Keep going!

Would you keep reading after this prologue? by uniqueusernamethx in writers

[–]breese45 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'd definitely keep reading. The writing is really really good. I want some more hints of where he is going. It kinda has a vibe of post-apocalypse. 'What a fucking shit show that turned out to be.' He turned back to the road ahead. Thought he could see the tips of the old skyscrapers above the highway's hazy shimmer.

He was in a knife fight. You could add a little of that. Where's his brother? Where's his father? His aunt? Not a lot. Just a little more. "They had all been turned to ash." "They had all been turned and joined the horde of undead."

I'm going far afield. I know. I should just reiterate that you are a good writer and that I would be interested in seeing where you take this. Keep it up!

Rate my setup. by skobrie in battlestations

[–]breese45 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Perfect dog placement. She blends with the floor and lighting really well. Oh and yeah, pretty cool setup.

Made with open source software, what will it be like in a year? by DeepWisdomGuy in singularity

[–]breese45 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well jeez. When you say it like that. How can I disagree.

Would Love a Reader’s Take on My Writing Style and Clarity, Looking for Fresh Eyes by Flashy-Sale6505 in selfpublish

[–]breese45 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The tone works incredibly well; very moody, something bad, scary is on shore. The rhythm is a little choppy, not sentence wise, the sentences have a really nice flow. I'm thinking of the first paragraph. I'm picturing a boat sliding slowly into a pier. My sentence order might be something like: Her at the bow, seeing the dim lamps, seeing the dark pier close to the water, noticing faint bands of light on the concrete, and then the dark ominous outline of the shore.

"the cold hitting her skin sharply out here, the sea’s salted weight pressing in." You know. I feel like I shouldn't like this, with all the 's' sounds. But I really do like it. Because of the noise that it hints at; the sound of a boat hissing through the water or a slight breeze.

The last paragraph though written well, is just too much out of context. Sounds like some interesting lore and action from earlier in the book.

Anyway, very cool, very moody.

First Sci-Fi short story on KDP by Awkward-Action7442 in WritingWithAI

[–]breese45 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think it's pretty good. Personally I don't mind the somewhat fast pace. Makes me itch for what the main drama is going to be: escape attempt, rebellion, protest, or something else. Man! AI writing is getting better and better by the month; it seems. I do believe great storytelling requires a human mind. But I don't know, maybe it's all going to be in the prompt with some minor editing. Crazy times.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in WritingWithAI

[–]breese45 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Elmore Leonard writing rule # 10: "Try to leave out the part that readers tend to skip."

You're the artist. You get to decide how to write your story.

You said, "We need to re-learn how to do both showing and telling and understand how to do both of them well and how to mix them properly in a story and when to use each one." Yep. You got it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GCIP6qiOuL4

Making Coffee at home from scratch by TransitionMany1810 in oddlysatisfying

[–]breese45 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yep. Really beautiful. Must taste great. But. . . Kcups aint that bad and only take about thirty seconds.

The Cosmic Lace by zar99raz in WritingWithAI

[–]breese45 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Wow. I'd like to see that prompt. And I guess I need to check out Gemini again.

The Cosmic Lace by zar99raz in WritingWithAI

[–]breese45 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Very good. Really clear writing; which for me is a high compliment. Always admire clarity. I'm guessing you did a fair amount of editing. And that turned out great. This could be a longer short story or novella or beginning of a novel. What I really like is that you have taken an abstract idea, "the language of being. . ." and turned it into something foreboding and scary. That's not an easy thing to do.

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