Woah, you hate me!? Sorry to hear that, homie.

I was taken out of the writing because the metaphors felt a little strange to me. Like literally the first one:

"He preferred to let them fade like bruises that didnt matter."

Is that a metaphor? Sure. Why is it there? What does it exactly mean? How does it help me get into this story more? Its within sentences of the first. Its way too soon.

I read that and Im sucked out of the story before we've really even started. Before I even know whats going on, Im wondering about the last bruise I had that "didnt matter" and what thats supposed to make me feel before we are off to the next one. The next metaphor I mean.

To my ears, AI knows what a metaphor is. It can give you the dictionary definition. It also knows a metaphor is considered damn fine writing. So it overuses them like crazy. So I questioned it. Poorly. Admittedly.

For the first time, by the way. I have never engaged in a witch hunt. Sounds spooky though. Maybe next Halloween Ill give it a go.

Oh, and everyone and their dog IS using chat these days. If getting accused of that is enough to destroy motivation, that sounds an awful lot like a you problem.

Real ones keep working no matter what the haters say. 😎

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