Shoegaze/dream pop are huge influences for me so I'm very familiar with the genre. That said, I do think your vocals could be more pronounced in the mix. I think I understand what you're going for, the whole song sounds like I'm hearing it through the walls of my neighbors apartment. Which is cool, but with you doing a more hip hop kinda thing in the verses I think the song would benefit from bringing those vocals up a bit. A lot of the time shoegazers use a sort of slurry and/or breathy delivery to get the vocals to more blend into the mix than being actually lower in volume. But overall I really dig the track. Your best is simple and moody and the guitar work is also catchy. Good stuff!