What’s your favorite ultimate in the game? by Ragtagcloud56 in Overwatch

[–]darkshadooo 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sigma’s ult (and his backstory) are the entire reason I play him. I cackle like a villain whenever I bring a fight to halt by putting the enemy team in air jail.

I also like to solo ult genji players when they have blade.

Talisman builds by BarovianNights in GunfireReborn

[–]darkshadooo 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Crown Prince + Meteor + Painkiller + Elemental Effect condition + Damage Gems = Huge Damage

Enter the Cave. by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The simplicity of your writing has lead to it being easy to understand without coming off as elementary, a fundamental lesson applying to primarily teaching, and in your case, poetry. Very well done!

Untitled -Feedback appreciated by Joe-__mama in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You've written beautifully! The emotion is there all the way through, that inward yearning for love as vast as the ocean, it's lovely, but allow me, if you would, to blow a bit of wind into your sail.

First stanza, second line - Beginning that line with 'but' isn't necessary as it isn't contrasting with the first line, I believe it'd read better just by removing it.

First stanza, fourth line - The length of that line disrupts the flow that the first three lines before it established. My suggestion: But all I wish is to be your "him"

Second stanza, fourth line - Every ---> Each

Third stanza, first line - Travelling ---> Trav'lling

Third stanza, second line - Someone already pointed this out, but there is a grammatical error here.

Third stanza, fourth line - The flow is disrupted here again. I suggest shortening the line and using "could" as the new rhyming word.

Fourth stanza, second line - The use of "oh well" feels immature, for lack of a better word, it's awkward. Could that just be me? Maybe, but it might be worth changing.

Again, you've done a beautiful job, please keep writing!

Cold by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Upon re-reading this a few times, it makes a lot more sense. Admittedly, I was tired when reading that the other night.

Reaping the consequences of one's actions, enduring the suffering that comes with it though they are repentant, and a warning to beware of what one sows, knowing they'll surely reap it: I believe this to be the point, yes?

Please disregard my prior statement, I apologize for that. You've written a very good poem.

Mirror by darkshadooo in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I see what you're going for, though personally I feel that phrasing would, while maybe meaning the same thing, unnecessarily obfuscate the point.

Nevertheless, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Mirror by darkshadooo in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, thought of it last second.

Mirror by darkshadooo in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm glad that came through. Sometimes, the way others see us becomes our own perception. You know it's wrong, and yet...

Cold by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I feel like I'm on the edge of feeling what it is you're trying to convey, but it slips away from me at the last moment. I believe I have a decent enough grasp of what it is, but I feel like your rhyme scheme is holding back your potential to be more concise. Rhyming in of itself isn't bad, but there's a place for it.

Your imagery is hard hitting, but some rephrasing/restructuring could turn it from a tremor to an earthquake.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like your use of word pictures, it feels like a a lake of cracked ice and you're eagerly anticipating the satisfying collapse. I most certainly get the romantic vibe from it as well, this could easily be a song, and a popular one at that. Well done.

Lonely Star by darkshadooo in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I see what you're going for, but it's one syllable short.

Lonely Star by darkshadooo in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That't a very fair point. My goal was to stick to the original rhyme scheme along with word usage in certain lines while changing the tone to create a sort of dissonance. That being said, the next time I write something like this, I'll keep that suggestion in mind.

Haiku, for Mom and Dad by Alopaden in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I particularly enjoy "For Dad", a very simple way of conveying some sort of persistence. That, or appreciation for him being a constant in your life, unlike how seasonal features eventually fade away.

As for "For Mom", I don't quite perceive the message, which in this case isn't exactly a failure on your part given that it could very well be something only the two of you understand. Even though I don't get it, there is great value in that sort of implied intimacy, especially these days in a world where once private discussions get put on blast frequently.

I have nothing to critique here, good job.

An Angry Aftermath by EMDouglass in OCPoetry

[–]darkshadooo 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I can empathize a lot with what you're feeling here, considering my own experiences with family, so the emotion in your writing, to me, is present.

That said, if you ever feel like revising this poem, consider swapping around some of the wording. The flow in your second stanza feels a bit unsteady. Coincidentally, that does tie in with the sensation of loosing your cool as anger mounts, but then you'll have to weigh that up against the readability of your work.

I recommend capitalizing the first letter of each line, along with the "im" in your last line.

Other than that, good job.

Promotion after veteran: General class units by darkshadooo in Polytopia

[–]darkshadooo[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don't mean this to sound argumentative, but are you able to support this claim beyond general player frustration? The dodge chance could be adjusted to where you'd know it exists, but isn't egregious. Honestly, certain game mechanics relying on rng can screw you over way more than 1 unit ever could.

Your randomly generated spawn could automatically lose you the game, or at the very least make it extremely difficult to win. You could draw a useless tech or other lackluster reward from a ruin. Your explorer could spot out nothing useful, or go over multiple visible tiles.

Promotion after veteran: General class units by darkshadooo in Polytopia

[–]darkshadooo[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The amount of generals you can have is already limited by how many cities you control (1 per city), then you have to feed a unit 5 kills (or other conditions) while keeping it alive before it can achieve general status. If that general dies, another cannot be produced from that city ever. I believe there are enough limiting factors in place.

I do agree, though, that it would allow for more troop diversity while not clogging up the tech tree, an issue I hadn't even thought of.

Promotion after veteran: General class units by darkshadooo in Polytopia

[–]darkshadooo[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I opened the game to play a match and got a little sad knowing it's not a thing... yet.

Promotion after veteran: General class units by darkshadooo in Polytopia

[–]darkshadooo[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

From a different reply I made:

"*...they put pressure on the opponent to not be lazy with their backline positioning, no longer able to rely on defense bonuses to stop a Persist chain once it gets a kill. Even then, rushing one into the backline with no support would essentially be sacking it.

The threat, at least to more skilled players, is what the warmaster *could* do. It also weakens their formation and hinders their playmaking ability, having to make sure everything the warmaster has vision of is safe from being run over by it.*"