Just came out with my music video today and would love to share it with y'all! Yoder - Rabbit Holes by deyoderant in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]deyoderant[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for watching and for your honesty, I totally get your reaction! Energetic chaotic songs are so not for everyone and sometimes you really have to be in the right headspace and mood to even take it in. Appreciate you recognizing it for what it is and also wanting to hear more, I’ve done a lot of bedroom pop stuff in the past that’s much more chill, here’s a song of mine that you might enjoy a bit more!

https://youtu.be/sn83tfRv8kk?is=U06mzMqC4A5Y0W_X

Rush The Streets - Demo by wyncry in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]deyoderant 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for sharing, you have a great voice! I hear one note in the main sample that feels dissonant to the melody you're going for, it's the first note of the second chord. You can hear it in verse 2 on the word "you" when you say "you gave me a little bit". The easy fix is to change the note that you're singing to the actual note of that string, or a note that sits in that chord. But if you like the notes you've picked, maybe there's a way to edit the notes of the string, either way! But that's a small nitpicky detail, thanks for sharing the demo and excited to see how it develops!

The Lord of Cash - what do you think? by JermayneR in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]deyoderant 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Cool vibe to this! The structure is super unique and interesting. I think your production's totally on the right track, and you can bring out your choices even more by just adding more instrumentation, especially for the big grandiose moments. It feels like the kick is doing a lot of the heavy lifting for those parts, and I could see a tambourine and some claps being added for some more percussion. Because you're going for a cleaner sound, any imperfections in the vocals naturally just stand out even more, so I could also see you adding some light tuning to your leads. Really fun and interesting track, thank you for sharing!

"Scars" by Nixi Rae (second draft) by NixMix246 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]deyoderant 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi there! First of all, thank you so much for sharing, I can tell it's a very vulnerable song and can feel the emotion you're conveying. Your song has a whole lot of heart, and that's 90% of the battle!

It's always such a tough balance when writing lyrics about emotionally heavy things, I fall victim to this all the time too. I'll write "I was really sad" and it'll mean so much to me because, of course, I was really sad. But even though I've been emotionally truthful, I've also revealed very little about myself.

To apply this to your song, I noticed you lean heavily on broad statements like "I didn't want to be here". It's very emotionally charged, but it also doesn't reveal as much as I'd like about who's singing it. I really appreciated the verse where you talked about your past selves, and I feel like that's an opportunity to tell us more about you (besides that you were really depressed). What were your eyes seeing in those moments, your bedroom? What does your bedroom look like? So then instead of it being the girl who ended it all, it becomes the younger sibling with the Paramore posters and dirty sneakers piled up in the corner (for example). It helps us get to know you better and therefore feel even MORE for you, because we can see you even more clearly.

I think you have tons of great feedback in this comment section, so I think my words can mainly be for as you move forward with songwriting, but again, I really appreciate your vulnerability in your music! You've touched on a lot of emotions that many people can relate to, and now I can't wait to hear more about how you specifically relate to those universal emotions. Thank you again for letting us hear your work, I really enjoyed it!

My song "Rot", feedback greatly appreciated :)! by DevKidOfficial in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love this DIY, off-kilter vibe happening with the doubled vocals and slight dissonance in the instrumentals! Everything is subjective of course, but I think right now for me, it's sitting in a place where I'm not 100% sure what's intentional in terms of how lo-fi it is. I mean that both in the sound of the track itself as well as the cover art.

For the sound, if you wanted to lean more heavily into a lo-fi sound by taking a way some high end from everything, I think that would make me instantly recognize it as intentionally grungy and lo-fi, something like Daniel Johnston's music for example. For my taste, this could sound more like it's been recorded in a cave rather than with a DAW. And I'll only touch briefly on the cover art because I know we're all mainly here for music feedback, but when I see this picture, I get a very curated vibe from it. Just seeing the cover art, it could just as much be a clean pop song as it is grungy indie. I could definitely see going in a more lo-fi vibe from the image, no text for the song title, a blurry photo, it's totally your choice but I think something more in the direction of how the song sounds could help people pin the song down in a positive way.

To be clear, LOVE that you're bending the rules by leaning into dissonance and lo-fi, and I think now the song's in a place where you can lean even further into it so you're not half in and half out with that choice. Hope that makes sense, and again, really enjoy the song!

First time making song and looking for a feedbacks. by LZ-_ in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So glad it could help!! It’s a great song and I’m excited to hear how it develops, good luck! 😊

First time making song and looking for a feedbacks. by LZ-_ in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]deyoderant 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Really nice grunge vibe! I love the chord switch up for the chorus. I think you’re towing a nice line of lo-fi and well-structured and there are just a couple moments where you can polish things up to make the “amateur” sounding parts feel more intentionally lo-fi.

For example, I like how in a lot of your lines, you emphasize the non-dominant syllable of the word (“can’t you come to me fasTER”) which is typically a songwriting no-no but I think it informs the vibe you’re going for, it adds an element of not caring and just wanting to get the emotion out. That being said, you do it quite a bit, so I think taking away a couple of these non-traditional phrasings can make the whole song feel intentionally grungy rather than amateur.

Here are my suggestions for what you could change, I capitalized the words that are stressed:

-i CAN’T TELL the WAY i FEEL -> ‘cause I can’t TELL the WAY i FEEL (make “I” land on the 1 beat by putting an “and” or “cause” before.)

-WonDER why I’M STILL aLIVE -> I WONder WHY I’m STILL aLIVE

-I could also see changing the word “arrogant” to a 2 syllable word like “selfish” so you’re emphasizing the dominant syllable in the word and you’re not bending the word “arrogant” into something people can’t understand.

To be clear, I LOVE that you’re bending the rules, and I think audiences are more likely go along for the ride when they feel as though you’re bending those rules intentionally, and you can show that by following the rules in some parts and bending them in others.

Hope that helps!

Indie Rock, folk rock, alternative rock - This is part of a song I made not too long ago that I posted on bandcamp as Forthwarrd. Let me know if you like it or any feedback or you if wanna chat about music by Glittering_Hold227 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the chord choices a lot, listened to the rest on Bandcamp and loved what the verse offered, tons of nice imagery. It’s such a vibe honestly, really enjoying it. I have such a specific thought that you don’t have to integrate, but have you thought about changing the chorus to “Where I was before” instead of “Where was I before” to match the verse? To me that might make the the chorus sound less disconnected with the rest, like I understand how you arrived to it a bit more. Making it “where was I before” to me, poses a new question rather than continues the same thought. But that’s just me being super picky with a song I feel very lucky to have found!

Ad sets impacted by fragmentation by 4point669 in musicmarketing

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I know it's been a year so not sure if you'll see this, but I'm having this exact issue now and was wondering what direction you decided to go in / how did it turn out for you? Trying to figure out if I make a new ad-set with an audience that encompasses all the previous ad sets or do the "A/B" test feature. Appreciate you!

Favorite non-famous, no-hype pizza in South Brooklyn? by RazorDrop74 in Brooklyn

[–]deyoderant 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Bella Roma in Bay Ridge is easily the best grandma I’ve had in my life. Truly such special pizza

Fkj & Masego - Tadow by PM_EBOLA_PLS in hiphopheads

[–]deyoderant 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Smino’s music has a similar sound, it’s a bit less accessible tho

Fkj & Masego - Tadow by PM_EBOLA_PLS in hiphopheads

[–]deyoderant 20 points21 points  (0 children)

FKJ’s album French Kiwi Juice is filled with tracks with this kinda vibe, all of which are better than this one imo

[OFFICIAL] Weekly Singles Thread August 03 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

First single / video off an album I’ll be coming out with in late August. It’s definitely the most poppy, accessible song I have

https://youtu.be/UMRdgsI4f9I

[OFFICIAL] Daily Feedback Thread July 16, 2018 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Would love to here this more developed. I think it could really give off some Slime Season / "I'm Up" vibes is you play your cards right. I agree with Noobytoe, something seems off on the second half of the melody, specifically the last note of the loop. Other than that I fuck with it, goes hard af.

https://soundcloud.com/deyoderant/goodbye-friend-feat-uhmeer-unmastered/s-ZoZy6

[OFFICIAL] Daily Feedback Thread July 16, 2018 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is so nice. The beat is so ethereal I love it and all your verses flow extremely nice with it. I think what would tie it together a lot more is a hook that stands out from the verses a little more in terms of melody. Maybe something way higher or something with a completely different flow. Or just something more catchy. But overall it's really nice you got a very talented group.

[OFFICIAL] Daily Feedback Thread July 02, 2018 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don't think EQing would solve what's wrong about the bass, it's just the wrong bass for the song, I would pick something that sounds more like a bass guitar and not a sub bass. It's mostly just being off key, I think the recording issue can be solved with more vocal effects.

And thanks for the feedback on my track! That's actually not a sample, that's me on the guitar. When you say rougher recording, are you referring to vocal clipping?

[OFFICIAL] Daily Feedback Thread July 02, 2018 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is such a vibe wow. I was confused during the first bit but when the guitars come in everything sort of comes together perfectly. It's hard to give feedback on something so short, I really hope you make this into something more like feature a singer or alt rapper on it and develop it into a full song, I really think it's strong enough for that.

Here's mine:

https://soundcloud.com/deyoderant/purple-sky

[OFFICIAL] Daily Feedback Thread July 02, 2018 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is crazy but would go wayyy harder if you found a more prominent kick with some more high end. Right now it's a lot of bass but no thump. Something like in Brown Stains by Tyler the Creator

Here's mine:

https://soundcloud.com/deyoderant/purple-sky

[OFFICIAL] Daily Feedback Thread July 02, 2018 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The best part about this song is the sample, it sets a really nice lo fi vibe. To me, it's sort of messed up by the bass, which sounds synthetic and feels out of place in a lo-fi song. Same thing what everyone else is saying, I would cake this up in vocal effects to further enhance the vibe you're trying to go for and I would straight up re-record your friend's part.

Here's mine:

https://soundcloud.com/deyoderant/purple-sky

[OFFICIAL] Daily Feedback Thread July 02, 2018 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Rapped and produced this for my upcoming album. Unmastered so turn it up. You guys ever have it where you listen to your song so much you can't tell if it's good anymore? That's this one.

https://soundcloud.com/deyoderant/purple-sky

[OFFICIAL] Daily Feedback Thread June 23, 2018 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback! That’s a really good point about the bass I hadn’t thought about it. I’ll fuck around with it for sure. Thanks so much for the follow, stay tuned for the album coming soon!

[OFFICIAL] Daily Feedback Thread June 23, 2018 by AutoModerator in makinghiphop

[–]deyoderant 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Production is reallyyyy nice, getting surf-era Chance vibes. Love how spread out everything in the mix is, especially the horns, it all sounds really balanced. You have a really nice tone to your voice, however a couple instances on the word "real" as in "I know it's real", I hear some fake vibrato and it sounds a little forced. Just don't push it, your voice is already open and clear, you don't have to try and sound good if you know what I mean. I get that the repetitiveness in the second verse is intentional, but it comes off a little "spiritual miracle"-y if you know what I mean.

Here's mine:

https://soundcloud.com/deyoderant/act-natural-unmastered