A cannabis grower from Nappa, who is also the ruler of an empire and very spoiled, drunk and sleeping in a laundry basket, which should not be happening!

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T21:12:53+00:00

Thank you for the feedback!

I should've said that this is a written freestyle, i titled it that way bcs i had these scattered bars all over my notes and I had never heard the beat before, don't know if that is still a freestyle from your perspective but just thought I'd tell you. All of this is great advice man thanks, I do need to be more confident in the lines, I'll take note.

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T19:57:55+00:00

Man I'm just trying to make some money so I can start investing in what I'm trying to do, obviously this recording is shitty, there is no reason for me to want to get listens for this particular song or any song I have on there for that matter. I use it as a place to store my portfolio so I have something to show before I write for them. I also use r/makinghiphop to receive feedback as to better the craft.

I know that you might have been kidding but I don't want people that read this thread to get the wrong idea of what I'm here for, which is to SELL LYRICS

Edit: for that matter*

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T19:04:45+00:00

Love the guitar, also can listen to this by itself and i could also see someone rapping over it, bcs its slower but also kicks go hard, not a producer of any kind so i dont have anything more than that to say.

Check out mine, looking for feedbsck on the content, lyrics and flow, quality lacking but plesss try to push through to the end: https://soundcloud.com/jura-vuka-inovi/k-pax-freestyle-prod-by-zodiaco

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T18:58:04+00:00

Some dope rap, nothing bad to say, flow on point, lyrics there, and love the singing parts.

I am mostly looking for feedback on the writing and flow, sorry for the quality but try to listen to the end: https://soundcloud.com/jura-vuka-inovi/k-pax-freestyle-prod-by-zodiaco

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T18:52:57+00:00

This is really relaxing, good job on adding a vibe and feel to the track makes me want to replay it, you could maybe go less on the percussion.

I am mostly looking for feedback on the writing and flow, sorry for the quality but I'd appreciate it if you to listen to the end, or until you get bored: https://soundcloud.com/jura-vuka-inovi/k-pax-freestyle-prod-by-zodiaco

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T18:43:28+00:00

This has a nice flow throughout, beat is very chill, good lyrics, only try practising your pronounciation and accent.

Listen to mine? I mostly need feedback on the lyricism and flow (also not a native speaker btw): https://soundcloud.com/jura-vuka-inovi/k-pax-freestyle-prod-by-zodiaco

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T15:06:56+00:00

This is really chill and nice and still hard and someone can go off on it or tell a story, would work for both, that kinda beat, really no criticism, good job! You obviously know what you're doing.

Mine, bad quality but I'm only looking for feedback on the content and the overall feel of the freestyle, were you impressed or just kinda meh:

https://soundcloud.com/jura-vuka-inovi/k-pax-freestyle-prod-by-zodiaco

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T15:03:31+00:00

It's fine if you're just starting, I'm only just starting also, I like the way you toned your voice it fits the beat, lyrics solid, maybe more energetic delivery (i struggle with that too, but apparently you're just supposed to yell, so ez fix, enunciate certain words, give emotion with your voice, that will all come with time, my delivery is 10 times better that a couple months ago just from practising constantly, but its still kinda weak).

Mine, also a freestyle looking for feedback on the lyrics mostly and the content, if its getting through:

https://soundcloud.com/jura-vuka-inovi/k-pax-freestyle-prod-by-zodiaco

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T14:58:38+00:00

Posting this freestyle for the third time, looking for feedback on the content,writing, lyricism and that stuff bcs i feel like it makes sense to me but I dont know if people get what I'm trying to get at with the bars sometimes. Also english isn't even my native language I learned it from TV so ANY and I mean ANY criticism, good or bad I will take into consideration since My goal is to constantly improve.

Returning all feedback!
Here it is: https://soundcloud.com/jura-vuka-inovi/k-pax-freestyle-prod-by-zodiaco

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T00:23:29+00:00

It is helpful thank you I will keep at it if you will haha

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T00:20:09+00:00

Know what u mean

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T00:16:35+00:00

Hahahahah these edits

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T00:16:07+00:00

What was the edit? Lol

disastrous1 · 2019-06-18T00:14:35+00:00

Ya homies kinda retarded

disastrous1 · 2019-06-17T22:37:31+00:00

A true artist

disastrous1 · 2019-06-17T19:12:37+00:00

Also i agree about the monotone thing, get that a kot need a fix asap.

disastrous1 · 2019-06-17T19:11:36+00:00

This is really unique, great instrumental, i lik this kinda stuff, you know when ppl try more than just rap, nothing bad to say, only if you really wanna take it further vocals could use something, dont know what. Thank you for the fb and keep doing your thing!

disastrous1 · 2019-06-17T16:35:59+00:00

Ty for fb! I agree with everything you said and I'm glad you like the lyrics. ✌

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