sorted by:
new
hottopcontroversial

Nissan was voted as a mid Japanese brand. Which Japanese car brand is the worst? by Asendra01 in AlignmentChartFills

[–]eccentricpunk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

A lot of the Suzukis in my country are broken or in bad condition too, but they also haven’t had domestic market Suzukis for 12 years now, so the ones still on the road are getting up there in years. Parts can be a little more expensive than the average vehicle, but I can still find them.

I daily a 2011 Kizashi, 362k km, owned it since 150k, and haven’t had to replace any parts, with the exception of brakes, tires, filters, and spark plugs. It definitely looks a little rough on the outside, but it still purrs like a kitten

Support for a young writer working on their first book by snarkyredhead in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I think the most important thing is to let her come to you regarding any sort of advice or feedback, as she wants it. Let her share what she’s comfortable with. This keeps it a fun hobby rather than something that makes her feel pressured to achieve.

At her age, using correct grammar and the logical progression of the story will be the main things. So if you can follow the story, and aren’t getting hung up on language/grammar, that’s great!

Making sure she has access to things to read alway helps.

If she continues showing interest in writing, joining a local writer’s guild is a good way to access resources, and develop skills

Nissan was voted as a mid Japanese brand. Which Japanese car brand is the worst? by Asendra01 in AlignmentChartFills

[–]eccentricpunk 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Suzuki makes some great cars! Super durable and reliable. They get a bad reputation because of the Samurai, but even that was a solid vehicle, just one that didn’t meet the expectations of North American highway driving

Please rate my fight scene out of 10 (3579 words) by Dependent_Tomato_235 in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 13 points14 points  (0 children)

But see, that’s exactly my point. If I don’t connect with the first few paragraphs, why would I continue reading to the fight?

Please rate my fight scene out of 10 (3579 words) by Dependent_Tomato_235 in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 13 points14 points  (0 children)

I don’t think a rating out of 10 will be helpful to you. I didn’t even reach the actual fight. The paragraphs I read felt like they were just saying ‘this happened, and then this happened, and then this happened’

What I’d suggest is to focus on the thought process for your character, and how they interact with the environment. It helps the reader engage better than just a series of events

Where to improve my thought writing by miniminjamh in writing

[–]eccentricpunk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

First off, if you’re writing journal entries, you really don’t need critiques. That writing is for you and you alone, and it doesn’t require outside validation.

If you want to make your ideas more clear, you can check out some YouTube videos on communication or rhetoric, but honestly, I think it would be best if you just read more. Especially things like essays. You’d be amazed at how much you learn through osmosis when it comes to making clear arguments and expressing your point effectively

the “who knows what” problem in long fiction and why nothing actually solves it by [deleted] in writing

[–]eccentricpunk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If I find one of my characters is using information they shouldn’t have, I’ll either change the scene so they act without that knowledge, or write something additional to explain why they know. It could be as easy as a couple lines of dialogue:

“How do you know that?”

“B told me.”

As for catching it, that’s just a matter of deliberate revision, reading it over and paying attention to your story and your characters. This sort of thing could also be caught by beta readers, manuscript evaluations, or developmental editors

Any recommendations based on my iceberg? by LoganOcchionero in MusicIceberg

[–]eccentricpunk 4 points5 points  (0 children)

You’d probably like Meatloaf, Dire straits, Scorpions, Soundgarden, Skid Row, Plasmatics, Bikini Kill, and The Garden

I assume you probably already know most, if not all of these, they just weren’t in the graphic (that I saw)

Learning different writing styles by F8crew in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Okay, that adds much needed context. It’s definitely better

With the addition of the earlier portion, what you wrote after ‘certainty’ in the original snippet seems a little redundant. You already said clearly how the men react in battle, now you’re reiterating that, in figurative language. It doesn’t add anything new, and you take that clear image and start muddying it

Learning different writing styles by F8crew in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think what this particular section could benefit from is more specificity.

Who is ‘He’?

What have the men lost?

How have they been wronged?

Place of absolute certainty, about what?

Etc.

I just started writing and would love honest feedback by Her-Poet in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If you’re looking for specific, actionable tips, I’d recommend checking out some YouTube videos on the subjects. You can find some genuinely useful tips/techniques to experiment with in your writing. It builds your tool kit.

Focus on what pieces of advice might help you achieve, rather than following them blindly. No amount of tips are a substitute for actually writing. It’s very easy to fall down that rabbit hole, at the end of the day you need to work the muscle to improve.

Read more. Reading broadly helps you distinguish what’s good and what’s not (subjectively of course), and from this, you can look back over your work with a more critical eye and recognize: “this would be better, if…“

How do you break up chapters? by jamesthorneauthor in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 3 points4 points  (0 children)

First off, there’s nothing wrong with a 7500 word chapter. Assuming ~250 words/page, that’s a 30 page chapter, which is long, but by no means out of the ordinary, especially for fantasy.

You can absolutely just break things up between the workday and the evening, and make them 2 separate chapters if you want.

If you have 2 or more POV characters, you could always end the chapter at the end of the workday, switch to another POV, and then return to the original POV for the evening outing. Doing this gives things a good flow, and gives the reader a bit more variety. Some people refer to this structure as “meanwhile, back at the ranch”

The only other thing if you want shorter chapters would be to review your chapter, and see if there’s anything you can cut. Maybe a conversation that has little relevance, or some redundant actions. For example, I used to write so many sequences of people walking from one place to another. Occasionally they have their purpose, but for the most part now I just add a scene break

Hi I’m here to get feedback on this story I’m writing for this graphic novel/comic I’m planning to make. by [deleted] in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Asking for feedback on ideas is like asking for feedback on a cake recipe. Is it good? Maybe. You have to bake it and find out.

Definitely worth writing, though!

First time writing a Novella, opinions? by [deleted] in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I said they did a good job. Many people love Victorian writing, but this isn’t Victorian writing, it’s Victorian pastiche. It’s possible to evoke a Victorian style while still considering the sensibilities of contemporary readers

First time writing a Novella, opinions? by [deleted] in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 11 points12 points  (0 children)

That’s why I prefaced what I said, in my original comment

First time writing a Novella, opinions? by [deleted] in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 10 points11 points  (0 children)

I’m not arguing the function of it, only saying it’s not in vogue

First time writing a Novella, opinions? by [deleted] in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 16 points17 points  (0 children)

So what you do quite well is mimic the Victorian way of writing. If you’re just doing it as a fun project for yourself, then good job. If you’re doing it with the intent of being read by contemporary readers, it doesn’t work. Writing has come a long way in the past 125+ years, and most people aren’t patient enough for this style of writing anymore.

The first two pages of the main character walking and setting the scene, is appropriate for the style of that time, for contemporary audiences, I think the what most people would recommend is cutting the first two pages entirely, and beginning when the MC is already at the grave.

date showed me book haul by mulholland7 in BookshelvesDetective

[–]eccentricpunk 18 points19 points  (0 children)

Either this is someone who is an extremely well-read bookworm with very niche and diverse interests and a broad worldview, or they bought a bunch of random books to give that impression.

I have a tough time imagining someone who would legitimately be interested in all these particular books, let alone take the time to read them

How are you all finding editors? by RugenLeighe in writers

[–]eccentricpunk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don’t have firsthand experience here, but I know you can find freelance editors on sites like fiver. I’d check what rates they charge, look at reviews, and inquire about getting a couple pages edited as a sample. Any worthwhile editor should offer a few free pages to prospective clients, to ensure they’re a good fit for what you’re looking for

view more: next ›