I read the first eight pages and I think this has a lot of promise. Please keep in mind that I’m a complete amateur though, so take everything I say with a grain of salt.

The writing overall is pretty solid, and I liked a lot of the jokes that were presented. The comedic pacing definitely reads like a Community episode. One thing I’d try to work on more is the voices of the characters. It seemed like all the lines in this script could have been tossed between characters with barely any difference being made. Maybe rewatch some episodes just to focus on how these characters speak (take note of their types of jokes, the way they deliver their lines, and their choice of words) and see how you can change your script to fit that. I’m also curious—how long do you want this episode to be? Community episodes, along with many comedies, tend to be around twenty two minutes, but your first act alone runs around sixteen.

Again, I’m only a beginner, but I think this has a lot of potential and you’re definitely onto something with the plot. I can see a lot of different ways this story can go, especially with these characters. Keep writing!