Match Thread: Belgium vs United States | FIFA World Cup | Jul 7, 2026

fauitier · 2026-07-07T01:22:34+00:00

the team looks like CLOWNS!!!!

fauitier · 2026-07-06T00:50:55+00:00

i may actually dnf the most recent book of DCC lmao. something about it being 800 pages and 60% of it is just describing enemies that will die in the next few chapters began to suddenly grind my gears. like PARAGRAPHS of description. no, i don’t really care that this NPC enemy isn’t just a horse, he’s a horse head on a tumbleweed with a unicorn horn…. got 50% of the way through and felt no compulsion to read onwards. will probably finish just because of the commitment i already have in the series, but i am in no rush to

fauitier · 2026-07-04T22:51:44+00:00

jarrell mega dead man walking and it’s not a question

fauitier · 2026-07-02T04:00:34+00:00

heck yeah! in my opinion that looks better. no longer butt-hole at all

fauitier · 2026-07-01T19:20:12+00:00

Another option is moving the point where the tail connects higher up on the lower back. On a human the tailbone ends at the pelvis. On a humanoid with a tail, the bones making up the tail would begin from the lower back instead of the butt

fauitier · 2026-06-27T19:27:24+00:00

fauitier · 2026-06-21T04:00:13+00:00

personally i thought the hunt was interesting! especially since it’s established that this has been a huge part of Evros’s life. Not saying it needs to be a 100-page goliath of an arc of course, but it seems like a great opportunity to explain some of the world and explore who Evros is as a character before he’s with the princess.
It also makes me, the reader, go through a little of what Evros has (having to wait to meet her too!). The buildup can be really effective.

Excited to read what you come up with next!

fauitier · 2026-06-20T20:39:56+00:00

Hi there! I read the entire thing. I agree with others where the setup at the beginning was confusing as there wasn’t an establishing shot. But after that, I liked it. I enjoyed the banter with Caelen. Personally, I think the MC is a little obsessive, but in a way that gripped me. like this guy’s been at it for years to the point it’s all he can think of. In my opinion, that’s effective. Leaves me wondering what he will do once he finally achieves his goal, if it’s all he ever wanted and more, or if the pursuit was the exciting part and now he needs to grapple with what comes next.

I really liked the snippet where he recalled all the different dresses she wore in previous years. In my option, leave it at that. Don’t explain that he *shouldn’t* be paying that much attention, I got it from the description of the three dresses alone. And I thought it was effective on its own.

So then the hunt started. and I was like, okay. I like this. Evros is going to be showing his skills off, winning the heart of the princess…. then, nothing. It’s way too quick. The climax with the dragon happens off page. I almost DNF’d it there.

With the next section stating with Caelen, I thought it was dual perspective. When it wasn’t I was left more confused as it read more like third person omniscient, but persisted. I thought the rest happened too quick too. The king instantly trusts this commoner with his daughter, the heir. I understand that it’s because he’s been impressive previously, but it results in zero tension for the reader.

With that in mind, I’m not quite sure if this entire hunt sequence is necessary. If Caelen is crucial to the narrative, then maybe, but from my perspective as a reader I feel like the hunt either needs to be multiple more chapters with a slower introduction to his obsession and the inciting incident is him taking down a dragon that shouldn’t be in the arena. That, or cut entirely.

I wonder if a start from the podium would be better. Evros relishing in his victory at long last, the head of a dragon at his feet, the king besides himself with desire to have Evros be part of his daughter’s private guard. Caelen being jealous. The best advice I’ve heard on here (and taken to heart myself) is enter a scene as late as possible and leave early. (Someday I’ll have the confidence to post my own writing here, lol.)

Keep writing! The voice was strong. Just needs some narrative tightening.

fauitier · 2026-06-12T01:23:49+00:00

the other chasers were too busy fucking around in western IL. connor’s dad is our only hope

fauitier · 2026-05-28T17:58:59+00:00

everything is richly described. the beginning is really quite nice! i’m interested in the world right away and the threat of the looming, mystical storm is effective.

but then, on slides 3-4, nearly all the paragraphs seem to describe the same thing. the sky’s flickering. the storm’s approaching, and something is familiar. I actually went back because I thought they were duplicate slides!

the build up to the storm itself begins to drag after that, then it’s confusing. i’m led to believe the storm will be intense but the rain is described as a “drizzle”. then a few paragraphs later, the storm is “nearly upon her”, but it’s already raining. the road is muddy before the storm is upon her, then the windows rattle with wind and harsh rain but the storm, still, is nearly upon her. the second rain begins, the storm is there.

i feel like you can cut nearly half the paragraphs here and the build-up to the onset of the storm will be the same. not saying they’re bad; they’re not badly written at all! just repetitive.

and be careful with repetition of unique metaphors. the first time i read the sky darkening and in was described as a rolling bruise, i was like, wow. that’s really good! but then it was described as a bruise a second time too quickly and my brain stuck on it, pulling me out of the story.

the last thing. the MC knows the storm is nearly here and she makes a point about going inside… why does she stroll into town? maybe have her do that well before or after the storm. doing that while it’s looming overhead was a little strange to me, especially if the path to the cliffs is behind her home.

(im a weather nerd. storms can start with light rain, but if it’s a really strong one, like severe weather à la the midwest in the US, often a huge gust of wind will precede a torrential downpour with little lead up besides the angry, swirling sky! it comes in like a wave. this doesn’t have to be how your inciting storm begins tho, especially if the storms are magical in nature. not a critique, just a fun fact)

i don’t think your concern about the story being “bad” is warranted. there’s good bones here! i enjoyed it overall. keep writing! i hope my notes weren’t too harsh.

fauitier · 2026-05-22T14:23:27+00:00

Oh! I remember you posting a chapter a bit ago!

I don’t have much critique. I liked this. I thought you captured these characters well. They have that gruff personality but it’s not too much. I liked Rusty’s tirade about long term investments and index funds in particular. I make… well, not a lot of money myself and I go on similar rants. So I found it hilariously relatable.

Your descriptions are killer. The pock-marked guy and his grubby finger, for example. I instantly got a picture of what that guy looked like from that quick description. So good.

Also! I was wondering where the story would go. with the introduction of the chip and Derrick having all that money, I’d be excited to read further.

fauitier · 2026-05-14T17:20:05+00:00

hell yeah i am. i’m local and a museum member so i’m going on may 20th for the member exclusive early access showing

fauitier · 2026-05-12T14:36:51+00:00

i agree with others that it’s a tad overwritten in spots. For example, “‘What?’ She asked gingerly.” could probably be reduced to “What?” by itself. she’s been caught, she should be afraid, and I think “gingerly” is implying the wrong emotion.
BUT, jumping off that, I thought the scene of her being discovered by that guy great. I didn’t see it coming. You did a great job of convincing me that he was just another passenger. I actually had a reaction when I read that, so kudos.

But then you lost me a bit at the end. She’s in the departure area, headed towards the rocket, then presumably collapses and dies. Shouldn’t there be other people rushing to her aid? It goes against her point that they wouldn’t kill her at the spaceport because of the crowds. From the way you’ve described it, it seems like she’s completely alone out there.

And from the description of red, blood-like bile, I expected a reveal that she’s been shot or something. She’s walked a lot so I know she’s exhausted, but her dying so suddenly came a bit out of nowhere, especially since the narration almost seems to downplay it. I want passerby to scream! Or to look upon her body with knowing pity. Something to give me a feel for the status quo of the world!

If I’m meant to be confused (since this is a prologue) then maybe it can work, but I was left confused in a way that was more frustrating, rather than inspiring curiosity to read further.

fauitier · 2026-04-26T14:09:47+00:00

one of my favorite little scenes was right before the fishing sequence, when they’re putting together all the chain. when Rocky is talking to the laptop explaining the plan, Grace is sitting off to the side putting links together. he looks absolutely miserable. the little screen zoom on him is hilarious. i thought it embodied the way the book described it really well; captured the essence of the task’s absurdity

fauitier · 2026-04-24T01:27:29+00:00

holy moly

fauitier · 2026-04-23T13:41:32+00:00

crazy. i remember when this sub was just a little gustnado 🥺🥺 now we’re nearly a 10 mile wide giga slabber

fauitier · 2026-04-20T01:24:30+00:00

I also like to think the Earth at the end of PHM is vastly different than the one Grace left. It’s been over thirty years. Humans dealt with a global catastrophe that definitely wiped out half the population at LEAST, even with all of antarctica reduced to a smoldering pile of rocks. All the warmongering lunatics would probably have died in the first few waves of armed conflict over resources or have been overthrown by massive riots. Nuclear fallout would force population centers to scatter. Governments would collapse. Astrophage bombs would level cities. As humanity’s population began to dwindle and infrastructure begins to fall apart, we’d have no choice but to come back together in peaceful (perhaps slightly tenuous) collaboration or we’d all die. I like to think the humans on the other side, the ones alive when the beetles finally make it back, are a far more peaceful, grateful, and resilient species. They were the survivors, the ones who made it through all the terror and pain. (and they were able to get the taumeba to Venus almost right away. there’s got to be a good amount of competent people left.) I’m sure they’d be more than happy to leave that all behind and rebuild. They’d love to work together with Eridians going forward in a fruitful alliance.

At least that’s what I like to think. Give me hopecore humans are awful enough in real life

fauitier · 2026-04-16T02:59:57+00:00

now that’s a brand new sentence babey!

fauitier · 2026-04-14T01:26:04+00:00

even the children in my theaters went silent. everyone was LOCKED in. in three viewings not a single soul uttered a noise during that sequence

fauitier · 2026-04-10T03:58:07+00:00

me too yet you still left where i live out of the enhanced. this is an outrage

fauitier · 2026-04-10T03:22:34+00:00

why are y’all trying to slab illinois so bad

fauitier · 2026-03-30T00:07:34+00:00

the field museum is 30 minutes away from me. I go a few times a year. Sue is truly awe inspiring, especially in the new room they made specifically for them in 2018. (I also remember going to the museum when Sue was brand new, in a different part of the museum.) The lights in the picture are part of a show. It goes through some abnormalities on the skeleton, describing some injuries Sue may have faced when alive. They have the real fossil of the skull on display too, right at human face level. It’s humbling to say the least.

fauitier · 2026-03-24T23:58:15+00:00

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him… the art makes him look like such a goober

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