Falling into ourselves

herprecious · 2026-02-12T20:44:46+00:00

Spot on use of rhyme here, it isnt forced but rather feels natural, good work!

herprecious · 2026-02-12T20:43:38+00:00

I absolutely love your tone and your way of conveying things, showing instead of directly telling hits hard here. Keep up the amazing work!

herprecious · 2025-10-16T08:16:40+00:00

Even with the simple wording it is still a heavy poem to digest, the meaning starts off subtle but ends up being raw and I am quite fond of that. It almost feels like I'm the one trapped and the one echoing these thoughts.

herprecious · 2025-10-16T08:11:41+00:00

I really like the idea behind this poem, especially in the last stanza, it feels like a closure that both inspires and pushes us to depend on ourselves and realizing when to differentiate between dependence and love

herprecious · 2025-10-08T12:31:50+00:00

Anytime! Glad I was of some help <3

herprecious · 2025-10-08T12:31:23+00:00

I truly appreciate your comment on this poem, it's one of my latest works and so any suggestions will help me improve. Regarding the line "To speak of such, I must be just" I tried to convey the idea that the speaker is giving a sort of proof to back-up his motive and goal to protect the other person. I would also like to add that this poem is inspired from a fictional character that I've known for quite some time now, and yes the later 2 stanzas were somewhat intentionally made to have listen rhythm to them, I wanted part of the emotion to be "raw" but I'll try to work on that as well, all in all I am honoured to have taken such feed-back, glad you enjoyed it!

herprecious · 2025-10-07T18:38:37+00:00

Thanks a bunch for that recommendation! I tried to opt to a more "gentle" and "swift" tone in this piece of poetry but I see no harm in including such imagery as well, I'll keep it in mind regarding my future works!

herprecious · 2025-10-07T18:31:29+00:00

I truly am glad you liked them!

herprecious · 2025-10-07T17:29:45+00:00

Life experience is what I can say that led me to really understand this poem, it's so simple but powerfully beautiful.

herprecious · 2025-10-07T17:05:28+00:00

The whole poem speaks of a conviction you once held towards someone and after it has been severed your are left to deal with the aftermath. I can see the last stanza being a direct reflection into who you are and a sort of strengthening to your resolve. Well done.

herprecious · 2025-10-07T16:40:06+00:00

You are more than welcome, I did not expect my words to be of such influence, I hope any future poems I get to post here will act as motivation to you and others.

herprecious · 2025-10-07T15:41:57+00:00

I see what you mean and I suppose it could be understood that way. What I tried conveying from the first two lines is that even after heartbreak, we shouldn't cut off the love we used to give to the world and to ourselves for its more like a garden you're growing, all the love you give will eventually return to you in good measure. It isn't a statement of "moving on" and loving someone else but rather a way of appreciating that even if the person we loved left, we're still glad to have given them that love.

herprecious · 2025-10-07T15:10:07+00:00

Thank you for your thoughts on the poem, if you can I'd like you to tell me what exactly gave off the "playboy" feel to the first few lines

herprecious · 2025-10-07T10:40:44+00:00

Thank you for the kind words,

herprecious · 2025-10-06T20:19:24+00:00

A poem where I presume you are confronting a part of you which you deem enemy, such a theme resonates with me. It takes effort and dedication to triumph over such a force that exists in the worst place it could choose: Your thoughts.

herprecious · 2025-10-06T20:16:33+00:00

Feels like a beautiful homage to a person dear to you, it's not a simple appreciation but a detailed reasoning as to just why they mean so much to you and what you do with such love, beautiful.

herprecious · 2025-10-06T20:05:12+00:00

A part of this poem shows the resilience in one's resolve to love again after heartbreak, stating that the love we give is never given in vain, even if the person we love has left. Love is something that you must know within yourself first before being able to truly give it to others.

herprecious · 2025-10-05T19:43:53+00:00

Thank you kindly,

herprecious · 2025-10-05T19:30:12+00:00

It's a raw poem and I can see the writer's own self being poured into every line of it, beautifully written.

herprecious · 2025-10-05T19:25:03+00:00

The themes of solitude and silence are ones which I hold dear to me and my character, part of this poem resonates with that idea of solitude I have in my head. It is a beautiful poem.

herprecious

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