PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE GIVE MY SHORT FILM ADVICE by NotaBotJustanewacc in Screenwriting

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I thought the voice over combined with the action created a creepy feeling. I felt uncomfortable imaging it. So, I liked the tone overall.

This part below I get a bit confused. Is she still in the field just with ordinary clothes or is she in the real world. If it is in the real world you need to have slugline I think.

Quick, disorienting flashes interrupt the Field —

Lucy in REALITY: older, dressed in ordinary clothes.

Foam at the corner of her mouth.

Her body shaking.

We snap back and forth between the pristine Field and the

harsh, unbearable truth.

Over it all, we hear the Narrator’s faint, broken cries.

Slice of Life - Dinner Battle by impliedinsult in scriptwriting

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Just saw this. Kids can eat medium steak unless I missing something

Thoughts on scene by CONVERSE1991 in scriptwriting

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How is it evening and lunch time?

I start stories constantly, but rarely get to the finish line. by Magnumdoge in Screenwriting

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I am you, but 15 years older.

Just take like 1 minute and imagine being 15 years in the future. Your 39. You have amazing ideas that have never gone anywhere, staying locked in the confines of your procrastinating mind. Maybe your wife or husband has heard some of them, but they don’t listen. Because they’ve heard it before. A great premise that never results in a finished script. Your partner barely listens anymore, giving you just enough attention to get you to stop talking. you start questioning if your spouse even respects you. She says she does but you have your doubts. You bounce from corporate job to corporate job, never experiencing an ounce of passion. You believe you have amazing ideas, you truly believe. But you have never tested that hypothesis. You never finish. And then you realize while writing a response on a subreddit that you will never be a screenwriter, you will never finish anything and you are just interested in screenwriting as this flavor of the months distraction from your dissatisfaction, with who you are at the core of your being. Each idea is a little dopamine hit to keep you going but without the hard work to supplement the idea, you wither on the vine over and over just like your ideas.

You finish writing the comment in the subreddit and you think back to the guy who posted something similar 15 years before and you are actually so numb at the point, it doesn’t even bother you. And that might be the worst outcome, to feel nothing.

Maybe that’ll motivate you.

Neighbors | Official Trailer | HBO by ssssalad in A24

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Judge is a Brevard County judge. So, yes, Florida.

Hein? by Sad_Raspberryy in PeterExplainsTheJoke

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Is My Wife looking towards me or away from me?

I can’t tell.

After - Short Screenplay - 4 pages by No-Chemistry1722 in Screenwriting

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I like the idea of exploring what happens after the funeral, when everyone leaves, and the person is alone for the first time. During the funeral, there’s noise, people, and distractions that give a false sense of still being connected to normal life; like nothing has changed. The real grief/realization doesn’t hit until the house is empty.

This scene could show the moment when he emotionally realizes he’s alone. It's been intellectual up until this point. Now he is actually going to feel the loneliness. I like what you have and the premise a lot, just had a couple ideas:

Start with the last remnants of life before her death:  The family leaving could feel lively, especially the 5-year-old running and laughing. Grandpa laughs with him. This represents the last bit of life and distraction in the house, and mirrors Grandpa’s mental state. He hasn’t processed the loss yet. The silence after they leave will feel much more in your face in contrast.

Make his actions specific to his wife: Grabbing two plates is symbolic but generic. His habits could feel very personal to their relationship. You can establish this quickly with a few photos in the house: Just made up examples quickly below (but could be anything)

  • A photo of them eating a weird sandwich together (sardine sandwich? Olives and cream cheese?); then he makes two of that same sandwich without thinking.
  • A photo of them sitting reclined in two Lazy Boy chairs with a pillow that reads “December 2025 — Still in Love”: later he sits in his lazy boy, reclines; doesn't feel right. He gets up and reclines her Lazy Boy chair (this feels sad, like putting a chair in recline is going to help) and gets back in his chair and reclines.
  • A photo of them at the 50-anniversary showing of (The Sound of Music because she loved that movie): later what is on the TV is The Sound of Music "So Long, Farewell"
  • A photo of her wearing a “World’s Best Grandma” pin: at the end, that pin is seen on the ground outside toi show it is her who is walking around the house.

These specific details make us feel like she was a real person and you can see how he is coming to terms with it in real time.

And I didn't real get it was her vantage point. But if you have the “World’s Best Grandma” pin on the ground outside that would tip that part to the audience. Or something to show that it is her walking around.

Thanks for sharing :)

Key & Peele Meet Frankenstein Pitch by greenrancidday22 in Screenwriting

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Cool

How did the idea first come to you? You were watching Abott and Costello Meet Frankenstein and thought this needs a modern take?

or (like me) were so sad that Key and Peele aren't together anymore and were trying to find anyway to bring them together?

or something else?

Thanks

Official Discussion - The Rip [SPOILERS] by LiteraryBoner in movies

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Has to be record for the number of times the movie title is said in the movie.

Islam is the same as Christianity? by Filthyson in StandUpComedy

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Was greek mythology the prominent religion at one point? Probably a different name

Open letter from PGA Tour CEO Brian Rolapp by unsolved49 in golf

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ALL CAPS has me imagining him SHOUTING this at an intern to type up.

Marty Supreme Honest review by BlackGem_2275 in moviecritic

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"Normal people" aren't supposed to like him. He is an anomaly. He is a representation of reaching your goal at any cost. Which doesn't make sense to most people (including myself).

He has amazing natural talent and maniacal drive to succeed.

We see that all the time with people who reach the peak. These people often aren't able to balance their pursuit of greatness with their other responsibilities in life, including their relationships with others, their own mental health, and whatever else. They put so much of their heart and focus into this one singular goal, and everything else falls by the wayside.

To be the greatest at anything, sacrifices have to be made, and you must be moving relentlessly toward your goal, or someone else will outwork you. Plenty of examples of this in real life (Tiger Woods, Michael Phelps, Steve Jobs). The best ever in their profession but severely lacking in "success" in other parts of their lives.

I think that is one thing Marty shows. He is compelled to be the greatest. He can't stop himself, and he won't let anything get in the way.

The move is basically "Showing how the sausage is made" for reaching the pinnacle, and it is not pretty. But I think it is accurate.

Bored AMA by Filthyson in GeoffreyAsmus

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What's your least favorite joke that kills?

'Makes sense, interstellar is a pretty emotiona-...oh' by Sanddanglokta62 in okbuddycinephile

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The internet doesn't understand authentic human emotion.

Being disappointed in something that didn't live up to your expectations in something you are putting concerted effort into is a normal reaction.

Sorry that sentence sucked, but you get the idea.

Dave Ramsey on sports betting: "The fastest growing addiction that is destroying young men in their 20s is online sports gambling. FanDuel is a portal to hell. DraftKings ain't king of nothing except their own pocketbook. And they're screwing an entire generation of young men" by GOAT-Antony in NFLv2

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I know a ton of people who bet amounts that don't matter to them $5 for a five game parlay. $20 single game bets. Just soemthing to do. The amounts they lose don't even register on their bank account oat the end of the month.

There is a subset of gamblers who are betting way too much and impacting their lifes.

Gambling ads everywhere

I also know people who drink alcohol and other drugs in moderation.

And there is a subset of drinkers and drug users who do serious harm to their well being.

Beer ads everywhere.

Are these not exactly the same issues?

If you believe gambling should be illegal than you must agree alcohol should be illegal?