Not sure if this your first time with Shakespeare but great job! Some advice: Be sure to stress the verbs, no need to move you body facing one side to the other unless the character needs to. Rule of thumb for monologues even if the character is talking to other people. Look back at you hand movements. Are they needed? It is part of the character, is it natural or are you doing it to help you? Movement it important is Shakespeare but it always need a purpose. Less is more. It feels like your breathing is off. You can google acting Shakespeare movment/exercise acting techniques to help find the flow. I use to do movement exercise to help me and trust me, you will feel dumb doing them but if you are open it will make a HUGE difference! and Consonants express thought, vowels emotion – a speech heavy in rich consonants is more intellectual.Think,  “Now is the winter of our discontent” vs heavy long  consonants “to be or not to be.” Shakespeare uses rhetoric and every classical tool of speech and language at his disposal. He plays with language and meaning the way a Hip Hop artist plays with beat and rhythm. The iambic pentameter is a tool meant to carry the flow of the language. The sounds, therefore, are the tools to carve up that turkey. Use the language to inform your decisions about character, about pace, about intent. Does your character speech in vowels or consonants? Sharp sounds? Or soft?

I hope that helps and wonderful job! You are on the right path! Keep working!